Wacky Races 2, Round 1 / Koosh and Lapin vs. Invyn & Jasper

Wacky Races 2, Round 1 / Koosh and Lapin vs. Invyn & Jasper

Wacky Races 2, Round 1 — Koosh and Lapin vs. Invyn & Jasper

by Nothin

Icon for Koosh and Lapin51.7%
580 points
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Crit level: No preference


Icon for Invyn & Jasper48.3%
541 points
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Video320
Artist
116 comments
# 19   Posted: Sep 22 2017, 05:40 PM
Nothin! I really enjoy seeing a really sweet father/daughter team. I like the roundness of your style a lot. Also, you comedic timing is on point.

Reecers! Full color and exteriors! you deserve some love for that. quite the challenge.

PyrasTerran
Global Moderator
1449 comments
# 18   Posted: Sep 22 2017, 09:54 AM
I would try it visa versa, instead of multiplying the color multiply the linework and lock that up on top, so you can play with more color layers without having to worry about the multiply setting on them

For those just jumping in: Reecer started this match with a lot of computer issues and was forced to start traditional which is also why he started with handwriting, uncertain he would even get the change to return to digital before the deadline

Happy September 18th! ACAB -Reecer6
Artist
303 comments
# 17   Posted: Sep 22 2017, 09:18 AM
Yeah, I was kind of already doing all that in this comic? The linework, being traditional, was the bottom layer, and the coloring was a multiply over that. I used the magic wand too as much as I could (this art program has a default function to grow out the select area, and I have it set on precisely two pixels), but on some of the later pages, I really couldn't get the contrast as dramatic as I wanted when messing with the color levels because the ink of the pen was really light, and I didn't want to make it harder to read, so I had to compromise by leaving a lot of the remnants of the pencil sketch in. That naturally made it even harder to color than it already was.

PyrasTerran
Global Moderator
1449 comments
# 16   Posted: Sep 22 2017, 08:11 AM
To add to WD's suggestion, I would take it an alternate step and just set the line layer as multiply and color on a layer beneath so you don't have to mess with the lines. In this scenario, when you use the magic wand tool to select your spots to fill, modify the selection by expanding it by 2 pixels so when you fill on the layer beneath it also fills past the aliasing border, you'll lose alot of those white halo rims

William_Duel
Community Manager
930 comments
# 15   Posted: Sep 22 2017, 07:56 AM
Nothin: This started off pretty nice with some good colors and strong background work.  But I imagine you ran out of time because it certainly does feel abrupt like you knew you needed to add your opponent in somehow and forced it.  I would have also liked to see some shading so the art feels less flat.

Reecer: You were ambitious and it shows but it cost you in terms of quality.  When doing tournaments like this my advice is to go for the least amount of pages possible if you know you can't manage to keep high quality.  I'd rather see 3 pages of your best with a nice little story than several rough pages.  The linework is pretty rough.  Always work with long strokes and dont lift your hand off the page. And for coloring are you using PS?  You should use the magic wand tool, select white, right click select similar (or something that sounds like that) and delete all the white.  You'll be left with just the linework and you wont have to worry about dealing with it if you work on a separate layer.

Gregly
Artist
134 comments
# 14   Posted: Sep 21 2017, 02:11 PM
nothin- this is colorful and wacky, but i'm a bit put off by the lack of racing going on. koosh's resolution to veronica is pretty cool but then doesn't go anywhere cause invyn and jasper just sort of bone out. you drew them really cute as well so it would have been fun to see more of them!

reecer: yeah bad choice with the font, i didn't really have a problem reading it though. the overhead and interior shots on page one are sweet, but i only just realized the middle panels are of jasper, shoulda pulled that camera back a bit. there's a good back and forth in this comic, with each of them passing each other, and invyn getting tricked into going back, and koosh getting defeated while trying to attack back. the impact with the water may have worked out spread onto another page, or at least another panel. the lines are messy but the colors and humor and story is good, i liked this!

Kozispoon
Global Moderator
1111 comments
# 13   Posted: Sep 20 2017, 10:46 PM
NOTHIN- I was so charmed by Koosh's relationship with his spider baby and the rather amusing confrontation with the doppelganger I completely forgot you had an opponent! I'll admit- I was much more interested in the world and story this character has cultivated for himself way more than the last minute cameo of Invyn and Jasper. That's not to say this comic was bad. Surprisingly, this was a pretty good romp. It was funny and charming, and Koosh makes for some great comedic punchlines.

Unfortunately for me, this comic didn't meet the mark for what this tourney entailed- and that was showcasing a comic with your opponent.


REECER- It was ambitious trying to hand letter your own word bubbles but after a couple read throughs, trying to read this font was a journey. I still don't know what some of the panels have written. What killsme is that plot wise, the most pertinent bits seem to be the communication had cockpit to cockpit and those are the very places I cannot read.

Visually, your story had some high flying action and an interesting chaseYour environments and angles are definitely taking a turn for the better the more you battle, so I certainly hope to see you keep it up.

Corn Of The Breads
Artist
142 comments
# 12   Posted: Sep 20 2017, 09:23 PM
Glad to see both of these comics up and both fully colored this was an amazing round.

Nothin- I loved it all even the weird janky koosh clone (I need more of him when does he get a spider baby) but I dont feel the final joke really connected the wording was weird and I dont know why they left the race anyways?

Reecer- great job man I am sorry you had troubles with your tablet and it is great to see you pushed through it, I really love how creative the text boxes are, but a lot in the comic is unclear.

yarnwitch
Artist
302 comments
# 11   Posted: Sep 20 2017, 07:14 PM
@NOTHIN - I love how the flat colors worked here for you, and they seemed like they'd be really efficient! Clever choice! Its very clean and polished and I laughed at the imposter bit. Thank you for putting some of the wacky into the race!

@REECER - I liked how you used the text chat, but I had a lot of trouble reading it the first time cause I was on mobile. It was a really fun comic and I like the jabs they take at each other, like, that playful undermining that's part of competition? You've got it illustrated really well here. And clever way to cool that engine. I feel like you gave equal screen time to your opponent as well, and it wasn't to the detriment of your characters at all. The balance you managed despite the text difficulties was impressive!

Happy September 18th! ACAB -Reecer6
Artist
303 comments
# 10   Posted: Sep 20 2017, 03:08 PM
Man, I'm REALLY regretting not replacing all the handwriting with a proper font. I DID realize it was pretty hard to read to begin with, but I did touch up the bits I found particularly difficult in post, so I figured, even if it did require a bit of effort to read, it wouldn't be THAT inaccessible.

But that single hopeful assumption single-handedly lost me this whole tournament that I was really hyped for ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

I mostly just wanted to do a hell of a lot more with the Star Fox dialogue box gag and now I'll NEVER GET ANOTHER CHANCE TO IN MY LIFE

Bobo
Web Dev
947 comments
# 9   Posted: Sep 20 2017, 02:26 PM
@nothin: Koosh-Koosh and Lapin are so cute! I just wanted more of them, not that imposter guy. In fact, having that copycat appear only to be resolved almost immediately really made that bit kind of pointless. I know it connected with the whole "Veronica doesn't recognize Koosh" thing, but it just didn't land imo. The ending was really abrupt and kind of dumb, too. JUST GIVE ME KOOSH AND BABYKOOSH THAT'S ALL I WANT haha

@reecer: Most of this comic is unreadable. Either learn to letter or use a font; hand-lettering is really difficult to get right, so I recommend a font. Your art itself was really wobbly, kind of like you painted the colors over the lines so the lines lost their crispness or something. Or maybe it's just rough inking. If you ink traditionally, I would maybe use a larger paper and work on long, precise lines; if you work digitally, just work on making long, clean strokes (since you can zoom in/out as needed). I loved the way you showed the racers' conversations kind of like Facebook posts, and that would have worked really well if the text were easier to read. Definitely a fun, lighthearted comic overall, so just work on improving clarity and crispness and you'll be in business!

Radji
Artist
548 comments
# 8   Posted: Sep 20 2017, 04:52 AM
Reecer: the texts were a let-down, did you miss time? Otherwise, like always, humor is one of your strongest pont. Comedy in general suits you.

Nothin: I went "awwwww" with this father/daughter time. Man, Veronica really sucks.... Buuuut i went confused for two seconds et the reason Jasper and Yvin gave up... before realising it was a joke... i was a little embarassed lol

Energy
Artist
132 comments
# 7   Posted: Sep 19 2017, 09:13 PM
Nothin - not much racing in this entry, as far as I can tell, but I would love to see more of that copycat.

Reecer - Some of the text is hard to make out.

ArtsandGoodies
Community Manager
432 comments
# 6   Posted: Sep 19 2017, 08:49 PM
It feels awkward giving critiques since doing as much as either of you have in 1 week is just crazy to me and i can't do anywhere near that at my current skill level (partially also cause I work full time) but I do hope my critiques can still help.

Nothin: I like your style and the concept you had was really cool. However because of the two words on page 4 "Really sucks" the execution falls a bit flat. really sucks is pretty vague and doesn't make it obvious why they left, also "really sucks" sounds childish especially when contrasting the fact in the next word bubble they use the word "shit". If you had something like "Racist to green people" that would have made it much more fitting and make more sense as to why they would drop out of the race, since I think that is the type of effect you were going for and is a good idea. It was a good idea but the misstep of a couple words at the end unfortunately made it less entertaining than it should have been.

Reecer6: I enjoyed the story and the way the action and pages were layed out, but the hard to read text really brought the comic down unfortunately. In the comments you mentioned worrying about the color but really the text is way more of a concern. Unreadable text is something that should be avoided at all costs even if it means lowering the quality of art. While text may be one of the last things put on a comic (at least that's how my process is going, not sure if yours is the same) it's one of the most important ones to make sure it's functional even if it means you have to omit the color. I personally would much rather see a colors comic with fine text than one with colors that has hard to read text.

PyrasTerran
Global Moderator
1449 comments
# 5   Posted: Sep 17 2017, 04:52 PM
nothin: Some super cute father daughter bonding and the green racism was funny but I didn't really get the ending

reecer: I had to read twice to understand everything, I really did enjoy the story but the visual front was so hard to wade through, did you really not have any program available to add text tool to these? I'd probably add more points overall if I could read what everyone was saying legibly

Don't stop comicking y'all

Happy September 18th! ACAB -Reecer6
Artist
303 comments
# 4   Posted: Sep 16 2017, 06:58 PM
suuuuuubmitted!

To preempt some concerns: Yeaaaaaaahhhh, the coloring is sloppy! It's worse in the first three pages because of aforementioned tablet problems, but if you still feel like it's a problem in the last two, that's proooooobably my own laziness and a legitimate point to improve on. But I should be back to digital next time, so don't worry!

Happy September 18th! ACAB -Reecer6
Artist
303 comments
# 3   Posted: Sep 9 2017, 06:33 PM
So I guess this comic's going to be done traditionally, at least for the linework! Mostly because my tablet is very difficult to work with right now and will probably require replacement, but also I legitimately want to try it out? Kind of? The feeling is a bit Stockholm syndromey but it's alright.

Majikura
Artist
469 comments
# 2   Posted: Sep 9 2017, 08:37 AM
Green vs Green

Shen
Artist
1320 comments
# 1   Posted: Sep 9 2017, 08:09 AM
i anticipate this matchup to be delightfully silly

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Type: Tournament Match
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Sep 23rd, 2017
Votes Cast: 33
Page Views: 845
Winner: Nothin
 

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