since it's a collab i'll give the crits for specifics things and I'm sure y'all can sparse who they're for
The colors are strong like before but you want to keep pushing the hard lights and shadows a little further especially in a situation like this room that begs for it; Panel 3's floor and background is most lacking of dynamic lights, we should see a streak of light hitting the carpet across the floor, and the shadows of the furniture (those hard blacks) doesn't quite match up with what we should be getting from light sources.
You want to push your facial variations a bit more; Fool and Pascaline have very similar looking faces and it doesn't help they're both blonde. I'm aware that when you are pressed for time faces can start to blend together, it happens to me too. And watch out with your profiles, panel 2 of the last page Pascaline's lips are struggling between the more realistic shapes and the side-mouth thing that you often see in anime. If it's a true perpendicular profile or further to her right then we shouldn't be seeing the philtrum as we are
Aftermath I / Black Swan
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Mar 24 2017, 02:24 PM
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Mar 23 2017, 10:19 PM
this was really well done and a nice breather to help exposition between the comics and it looks amazing congrats on it
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