Our Defender and Our Mother / Nyasuu

Our Defender and Our Mother / Nyasuu

Our Defender and Our Mother — Nyasuu

by Julz


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Julz
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374 comments
# 6   Posted: Jan 16 2017, 09:49 AM
I hadnt considered that. Thank you!

G.Lo
Artist
103 comments
# 5   Posted: Jan 15 2017, 10:06 AM
I always adore your coloring- I feel like it's very vibrant and suits your style very well.

I felt the pacing was fine, I do think however you either could have drawn out certain scenes or gave them bigger panels for more attention such as on page 5 where we see Ma channeling presences, I feel like if you gave that a page of it's own or that panel was bigger and you gave it more attention than the rest of the panels, it would have worked better. Kind of the same thing regarding the energy transfer on page 6. I feel though you might have benefitted more on page 6 by using more dynamic angles, and perhaps maybe a different color pallette? I felt the cool blues and greens to yellow was a bit more calming than intended. I'm awful with colors though so take that with a grain of salt haha.

I really liked the lore you've provided and the potential shit storm that could ensue after this event! Looking forward to what else you have in store!

Julz
Artist
374 comments
# 4   Posted: Jan 15 2017, 09:21 AM
I felt the pacing was too fast too, but i also wanted it done so ppl could reference her new design in time for the vday collab. In what way could i have saved the pacing? Also i acknowledge that i was sloppy with my word bubbles. Usually im better about that but I didnt think to look it up. I got lazy.

Shen
Global Moderator
1303 comments
# 3   Posted: Jan 14 2017, 07:12 PM
YOOOOOO NYASUU! Cool shit is happening, what a fascinating development! i DEFINITELY wanna rematch now~ I agree the pacing is a bit fast, and sometimes the placement of the words inside the bubbles is a bit off-kilter. I like this new look for Nyasuu but i hope shes okay in there! I hope to see some push and pull between Nyasuu and Tiga over control of her body!

Ish
Artist
79 comments
# 2   Posted: Jan 14 2017, 02:37 PM
Duuude that was some twist! I really love the coloring in this, and the effect with the hard brush lineart looks amazing! The only thing would be the pacing, it is a bit too fast for my liking. Maybe if it had taken a bit of time to build the atmosphere, but what we have is alright. I really love Tiga's twisted morality and man, I can't wait to see more!

Radji
Artist
543 comments
# 1   Posted: Jan 14 2017, 08:15 AM
let it be said that i like Nyasuu. but here is a development that made her so much more interesting ^^ especially the lore of her people.  wonder what naughty tiger goddess has planned ^^ poor miller has reall too much on his plate , hahahaha.  so yeah, i have to fight Nyasuu. with Louise.
the story itself is good, and reminds me of that scene in Brother Bear 2. the one with the sha(wo)man.

in page 4, some text bubbles were over each other, it was a tad bit confusing.
nooooooo, why the chickens ??? they had so much to live foooooorrr ^^

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