Brother's Keeper - Part 1 / Neosuke Whirlwind

Brother's Keeper - Part 1 / Neosuke Whirlwind

Brother's Keeper - Part 1 — Neosuke Whirlwind

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# 7   Posted: Jul 22 2007, 11:47 PM
I enjoyed that. I think on some parts in the middle area, or the climax of this part since it sort of ended at a climax... anyway, I think the initial story telling could have been better. I like your line work a lot, You have great line control.
Really though, I can\'t wait for part two. Bravo my friend.

# 6   Posted: Jul 19 2007, 12:10 AM
Thanks for the comments, all I ask is to keep me in mind and don\'t hate me for the things I use to make my comics. And yes I do try to correct my grammar. Forgive me for whatever mistakes I make.

And like I said the story will be cleared up in part 2 plus you\'ll get to see the shadowed guys face and find out who he is. But what you could do is go back and read my battle with  Mikal. The brother\'s keeper story continues from Mikal\'s story.

# 5   Posted: Jul 18 2007, 11:29 PM
overall nice stuff. the shadow guy looks cool specially on page 5. only crits are on page 3 he\'s looking a little to chill to be bleeding from the gut. and on page 8 the blood looks a bit like afro pubes.

Kotori Ky
# 4   Posted: Jul 18 2007, 10:52 PM
Welcome back to the land of the living, Neosuke. Good to see you active again.

Dee is right, it\'s a little confusing at times. And your grammar is also off... (Check the your/you\'re issue) I think it might be a matter of taste, but the coloring was a bit... eh, to me. I kinda want to see more focus on your linework for now. But maybe I\'m just worried you\'ll start to focus too much on using things like Photoshop to cover up sloppy or lazy linework. :\\

I\'ll look forward to seeing part 2.

# 3   Posted: Jul 18 2007, 08:40 PM
Well the story is breaking off from the battle I lost. I understand what you mean by confusing. But Part 2 will clear up your confusion.

# 2   Posted: Jul 18 2007, 08:37 PM
while i liked the art, it seemed to lack a little something, I was left a little confused.
I await part too :3

# 1   Posted: Jul 18 2007, 05:28 PM
that was good
I liked it al ot
i cant wait untill part 2

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Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Jul 25th, 2007
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