2016 Invitational: Semifinals / Ji-ho vs. Click Lyric

2016 Invitational: Semifinals / Ji-ho vs. Click Lyric

2016 Invitational: Semifinals — Ji-ho vs. Click Lyric

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Approval Committee
# 13   Posted: Aug 16 2016, 07:54 PM
I'll have to echo the sentiment you're getting in the comments thus far. Both these comics suffer from not-finished-itis. Though you both have really promising first pages. Which is a real shame as both characters are really cool and I'd like to see what y'all hatched up a bit clearer. Perhaps in the future, starting off with relatively neat or fully realized sketches would not only help in constructing your final panels, but if you're pressed for time the sketches could stand strong on their own and be legible?

JI-HO- So glad to see an invitational made event bleeding (or flooding?) into other members battles. Its definitely something intriguing to use and push your story forward! Even so, past page 1, I can't quite make out what's going on to adequately say what I think. Sorry!

TECHNICOLOR YAWN- Haha, did NOT expect that to go the way it did. When Click busts in all piss n' vinegar demanding to have words, I certainly didn't think those words were a declaration of love. Isn't he romancing others in the void jams? Does this bunny have no SHAME?? XD
Still, his attempts to woo and win ol' Ji-Ho's tempestuous heart was hilarious to follow. Though I certainly wish you'd given some sketchy love to your environments and backgrounds. Its clear your focus was more on the characters midway into the comic. I certainly wasn't sure what Click was perched on when Jo-Ho's sibling comes to warn him. Though, in Ji-ho's case, I kinda sympathize with her. I hate theaters- watching a flick with a crowd just ain't pleasant no mo'. I hope these two work out!

Global Moderator
# 12   Posted: Aug 14 2016, 06:37 PM
Its hard to properly crit these since theyre both so unfinished so i guess i'll just say good effort, team! I liked that you both started this with the setup that Ji-Ho hit Click with her bike that one time lol good callback! Dotorii, i would have loved to see where this was going, maybe next time! Technicolor, you draw such wonderfully exaggerated expressions and gestures, I love it, that stuff is right up my alley, and I loved the date concept! Couples like this are adorable! XD Hope you guys can do better in your next battles!

# 11   Posted: Aug 12 2016, 06:00 AM
Seems like these were both shaping up to be some fun stories!
Dotoriii, it's really fun that you decided to incorporate the flood event from last round! And, Technicolor-yawn, the dating thing was a really fun direction to take this. Click and Ji-ho actually make a weirdly great couple XD

Community Manager
# 10   Posted: Aug 11 2016, 12:12 PM
it's hard to give substantial critique on these; we know you guys are capable of far better so with WIPs, visually, it's really tough to give thoughts.

dotorii: liked where it was headed, shame you couldn't finish

Technicolor-yawn: you're blessed that your sketches come out so clean, your comics end up very easy to read even when they are incomplete like this. Try to see what you can do for next round to turn in a complete comic both visually and narratively

# 9   Posted: Aug 10 2016, 12:24 PM
@dotorii: Awww! It's ok, these kind of things happen! I agree with Pita that 3rd page is a bit confusing, but otherwise it is still pretty legible!

@Technicolor-yawn: MAN your rounds are so much fun omg! Also kinda sad you didn't get to color the pages, I really liked your past round on how you choose your colors with a limited palette (And I also forgot to tell you last time, but Click and Spencer's text messages were my fav part it makes me so happy they are still friends!). Anyway this round is still really strong, the sketching is really solid and the humor is on point as usual!

Think Tank
# 8   Posted: Aug 10 2016, 11:35 AM
I'm gonna start by saying it's really cool that you both continued to build the interaction from Doto's previous comic.

Doto: What unfortunate timing.  Based on what you've done in the past, you really pump out some magnificent work in one week's time!  I look forward to seeing how this could be continued if you and Tech decide to face off again.
The only thing I had some confusion with was following the flow of the third page's third panel, where it goes right-to-left to follow Ji-Ho's movement to Click.  A flip of composition from the second and third panel of the page where the building is facing to the right instead of left could have probably helped with the flow a bit better.

Tech: Pencils are pretty clean, and expressions are nice!  The delivery was funny, too!  However, the pacing of the story felt like it would have needed another week to fully finish.  Try to condense your matches more to fit the time allotted, like your previous match-up.

Despite this, it was great to read y'all's entries!  I look forward to seeing what you make in the future.

# 7   Posted: Aug 10 2016, 12:03 AM
HAH! Took the words outta my mouth Dotorii! I couldn't finish my round either, so lets see who can Unfinish the best, haha.

# 6   Posted: Aug 9 2016, 11:59 PM
Techni I'm so sorry ughh I had a VERY impromptu trip this past week and I could only churn out what I have submitted. I really wanted this round to be something rad but I really did not have the time to work on it. I apologize   for this but I hope we can face each other again when I have more time!! (Good luck in the final round!! I'll be rooting for you!!!)

Think Tank
# 5   Posted: Aug 6 2016, 09:09 AM
-waves tiny pennant-
You can do it!

# 4   Posted: Aug 3 2016, 01:24 PM
omggg i'm ready to DRAW!!

# 3   Posted: Aug 3 2016, 08:31 AM
I've been waiting for this!

Astro Sean
Approval Committee
# 2   Posted: Aug 3 2016, 06:59 AM
Delivering mail or food, which is radder?

E.W. Schneider
# 1   Posted: Aug 3 2016, 06:24 AM
Absolutely can't wait to see how this goes.

Comic Details -

Type: Tournament Match
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Aug 16th, 2016
Votes Cast: 29
Page Views: 819
Winner: Technicolor-yawn

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