That was fucking awesome. something serious with with an eerie enviroment to it. i like it, and that baglady don\'t fuck around, does she?

I know its a style... but I can\'t get away from the fact that her lips look like a beard. Especially in 1 panel, 2cnd page.

Good comments, ya\'ll.

I dunno if, when you see my battle [Act two of this story] with Ash, you\'ll say it\'s tightened up or not. I think the parts you mean for me to tighten up are the  reviel of Reli and maybe the smashing of the Mason Jar pages. Those were drawn very differantly then the rest. Simply because they are just one drawing, I think 4 by 8. My normal format was 7.5 by 15.

But, I\'m not really sure what you mean.

RTV, I\'m very happy to enjoyed this piece I liked writing it a great deal and you are very talented.

Page size, eh... I\'m going to be working in a closer to real comic books size, ten by fifteen and shrinking it up. Will there be scrolling? Yea. Will my huge panels be cut off by the monitor? Likely. But I\'m glad the for the comment, because it\'s so minor it doesn\'t really matter.

Thanks guys, look forward to Ash VS BL and Paige VS BL...and another Beyond the battle to wrap up \"The Soup Kitchen\" story arch.

As a sidenote could you consider making the pages smaller? I just felt I should mention this since I dont think anyone brought it up. When I have to scroll around the page to just to look at one panel I should know to take it as a sign of inconvenience. Sorry for this pointless comment,

I can\'t wait for act 2.

I really like the dark undertone you carry in the pages. I really felt miserable or threathened looking at the character\'s expressions, i love how you draw them!
I also like the opening interaction of the bag about talking to it in public. Page 4, damn! A great composition in panel one. The small details and what not, i also like the half angle you used for it.
On page 3 i like the third panel, it\'s very claustrophobic and works well as a 1 second frame.
Good work on the sequence where the cat attacks with his claws by using more panels/pages to focus on it. While i read it i was like: \"Hey get off me you annoying cat...\"

Storywise it got kinda confusing here and there, i couldn\'t quite sence what dialogue belonged to who without staring for a few seconds. Didn\'t bother me too much.
i also agree that if you just made a few \'lil\'  tighten ups, your work would look even better. But the way you used the gray/black white seperations on the first few pages got you some high creativity points from me.

to finish: I always enjoy finding out more about characters, this made me looking forward to your next fight and Act 2.
Keep up it up!

I like your style though I think it suffers from the sketchiness in places.  Tightening up the lines just a bit would really make it shine.  Story got a little confusing at the end for me, I like the bag he\'s an interesting character.  The weapon bag was a good gag also, that\'ll be fun to play with in a battle.  

Thank you so much! I\'m glad it was disturbing...I was afraid it wasn\'t going to be.

I have a habbit of trying to have many pages that look tottally differant then the others. Like the page that\'s just black and white with the cat slashing his face. I personally think I\'m lazy every time I use photoshop rather than an ink wash.

i was tempted to read this when i saw you posting it on DA, but i held back  XD
well, i really like it. it was a nice read  :3

the only thing i can say is it woulda been nice to see some pages with a little more gray shading. it was nice the pages that had it.

Heebeedahoobadeebee...

I\'m gonna have nightmares.

Thanks Wei, yer a life saver!

Fixed.

Okay so this is tottally messed up and wrong. Page three and four aren\'t suppose to be the same...I dunno how to fix it.