I agree.  If you use someone character you should atleast let them know.  As long as I\'ve been here I\'ve never seen anyone not help out another artist\'s story.  There might be some compromise a little, but that\'s life.

Now with the story.  I like what you have here, it was very well drawn.  I\'m not completely against a wordy comic, but I hope part 3 is more graphically told.

Keep up the good work.

Well it is common courtesy to ask. Thats the word I would LIKE to have used if I remembered it. Im sure my intent got lost in the wording when I tried to work around the context.

But rally now, this is life or death !

and since im a minor part of it as well, a message via PM or AIM would be appreciated.

Monday, you make it sound like a bad thing that I would have liked to have been asked.

Colussus, get in touch with me on email or PM or something. Give me a basic walk through of what was gonna happen, and we\'ll talk. Some of the stuff you have going on is ok, but a lot of the rest just isnt the character, and wouldnt fit with his story, and seems out of place. But if its important to your story, we can talk about it.

I think he just wants you to talk to him about how you\'re using his character. And if he can find the heart to agree then maybe this story arc could fly.

Looks like we have a problem! This Dan idea I have, has not happened yet, so....I\'ll scrap it! Don\'t worry! I have my backup plans! I\'ll let the nanonytes die instead of rebuilding itself!

haha i was joking about the pregnant part....


So basically for your stoy, EVERY one has nanonytes in them?

Im just kinda skeptical that you sort of took my character and are now adding things to him and changing him, and didnt even really ask me if you could do it. Obviously in my continuity, Dan lost the Battle Royale.... but he doesn\'t have nanonytes or anything in him that wasnt there before. It wasnt a scar match, so I dont have to live with it, all I have to get across was that he lost.... but having 2 stories where theres 2 completely different dans may get confusing... so i mean, i guess I obviously cant stop you, but it would be nice to know whats happening in advance maybe? So when people ask me about the last crazy thing Dan did, I will know who wrote it......... I mean its one thing if you just had Dan as a large part of the story... but you have changed him completely. I think its awesome you want to use him, I just wish there had been some communication about the whole aking him different with new powers and nanonytes and all that.

LUCY!!! YOU GO SOME SPLAININ TO DO!!
why 4 are there no boobs... anime boys just look like girls with no boobs...

ah well, some dynamic camera angles would have helped to keep that conversation interesting, but then there was some random robo Daku action at the end wich was cool...

Cant wait for Part 3

Ps: If the boob thing is about her boobs making her have special powers this is a hop skip and a hump away from being a F grade Porno...

Great work      - Sphinx

i can\'t wait for episode three so that i can find out why my robo-dakus are seemingly attacking random targets

Though it\'s usually a bit of a while between each of your works I read, it seems to me that your english is getting better.

I love the work that you do and the dedication you put into these pieces but damn that was a lot of dailogue. I\'d advocate story and plot revelations but that was a bit much. I hate to say it, but nothing from that middle panel in page 10 processed in me because it was like an essay and a bit of a chore to read. It\'d of been nice if there was some more humor/action/something to break it up a bit.

Epic. Can\'t wait for part 3.

Oh I forgot to tell, Dan is a big role in this story =)

bout that estrella and coral look like each other, yeah.... they look identical =|, I tried so hard to make difference, but it looks like I failed, lol.

Dan pregnant? Where did you get that?! Haha XD, No, of course! =) and one more thing...

Dan will get those nanonytes back, cuz every human with human nanonytes has so called a
\"Mother\",  those nanonytes who died were Corals, they couldn\'t handle him. But the Mother isn\'t a nanonyte like those who were inside Dans body, so all those suckers died except the Mother. Maybe you will ask: \" Uhm....what does it do?\" Well.... the Mother will build a bunch of unique nanonytes which will adapt after Dan. Like a signature, \"We are Dans nanonytes and we belong to him, and we are created just for him\" and it will create a tattoo somewhere on his body which represents Dan (Like Corals scorpion mark on her left eye), and \"Dans Nanonytes\" will give Dan a NEW LEVEL of abilites, weapons, clothes etc. etc. which is different to Corals.

Complicated stuff I know! I hope you get it, and you understand everything, there\'s alot of things I havn\'t told about, but hey.... they will soon come and be revealed

Sorry for my sucky english! XD

So like.... i think i have to say I woulda liked being asked to have Dan be made into a major plot point in a story that potentially changes his whole character and gives him new abilities and whatnot....... bu now you probably know I won\'t be running with the whole nano-thing in my stories, but thats cool i guess.......


Only things I would have liked to have seen done better in this :

Dialouge proof read and maybe made to sound a bit more like people actually talk. If klunky could be used to describe spoken word, it could be used to describe this script.

Also, possibly a bit more visial difference between Estrella and Coral.... they looked like identical twins 80% of the time.

lastly....


...is Dan like.... pregnant now? Or something? I don\'t understand....

Seriously, why doesn\'t she have any boobs? lol

I loved this piece; it\'s so... deep... and stuff.  Wow, crazy cool is all I can say.  Especially those last coupla pages, although it totally left me all WTF!?\'ing  Yeah, I hope you post part three soon!

i think you made some choices here that you didn\'t end up executing very well.....the contrast between the first 3/4 of the pages and the last was very dynamic but I think I would have preferred more in the last 1/4(they were excellent by the way)
the panelling and art in the first part was definitely lacking.....you didn\'t take the final look into account when you were desiging them?.....it ended up rather dull.....with less action/activity you really should have used the other elements better to still produce a visually appealling comic