You Took The Words Right Out Of My Mouth / Elle vs. Epo

You Took The Words Right Out Of My Mouth / Elle vs. Epo

You Took The Words Right Out Of My Mouth — Elle vs. Epo

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by Krissy

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Mister Kent
Artist
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# 5   Posted: Dec 15 2015, 04:51 PM
TDK: I thought your lines looked a little less certain than they've been, a little messier, but if you're using a new brush it might be your newness with that. I did notice some techniques I liked, ike the composition of character placement and group shots on page 5, and the scene transition between panels on page 2. I'd like to see more definition on backgrounds and scenes such as the first page city panel. Overall, I liked the story you gave us, and it's always cool to see Elle figure out a new opponent!

Krissy: I do like your style, the way you design a scene and the strong choices you make--for example, page 2 looks really nice all around, but graying out Epo in the second panel to shift focus back and forth is nice. I wish there was more here, but I'm really glad you're back and look forward to more comics (such as FASHION WEEK which better happen or I'ma cry :D)

Cracking Skulls
Artist
348 comments
# 4   Posted: Dec 12 2015, 05:40 PM
TDK: Your brush is thicker this time around, which makes your art pop out more, but there isn't much line variation to distinguish distance and space between characters and backgrounds. Page 7's last panel was pretty nifty for example, and could have been a stronger panel if you used lighter inking for the poses further away from Elle in give a sense of distance and time if you get what I'm saying. You're improving with different shots and angles when it comes to the overall comic, and can't wait to see more from you.

Krissy: You kind of mentioned earlier that this was somewhat rushed, which I can see with the quality of the background, so I'll just skip that part and say dang characters are super nice in quality. I can't say much about the comic other than that (and the aliens subtext, that was a nice little fun thing to put), but I'm hoping to see more in the future for this character, just time manage a bit more in the future and looking forward for more comics!

E.W. Schneider
Artist
1061 comments
# 3   Posted: Dec 10 2015, 06:39 PM
teedeekay: This is a nice little comic. I like the risk you've taken with using the brush, I think using new tools really does help and your work is given more dimension due to the fact your work has some line-width now (by virtue of using the brush). It really does look nice and for However, I still think you need to practice them out more. This would be the biggest step for you to take that would really improve your work.

You've got a lot of nice shots in the comic, but I wish you had an establishing shot when we get with Epo. Them in the military helicopter is a great shot, but it's only close up. I would have liked to see what the vehicle looks like from afar.  I think you need thicker panels and/or larger gutter spaces. Looking at so much of the pages you have, there's just not enough breathing room for me and it feels claustrophobic in a negative way, I think. When you also don't have blacks utilized to help fill out that space, it gets a little too busy also. Page 3 and just about any hospital page kind of makes it rough to parse.

Your story is good and I think the setup angle is an interesting option to continue. However, I would have liked to seen Elle get injected with sedatives and black out. It would have made for a stronger ending if we could have saw that happen instead of the fade to black.

I think these brushes could do a lot for you and I hope to see you use them more in the future. Good job.



Khrysanthemum: This is another fun comic. I really liked that you chose to pick up from where we last saw Epo and I thought utilizing Agent Black's death is a really great kicking off point for a story-arc for Epo to pursue. I think following an arc has a lot of potential and I'm interested to see where you take this storyline. As usual, your work is really bursting with life.

However, I would love it if you can kick out something with a little more polish on it next time. The characters look tight and good, but your backgrounds are a bit shaky. While that last page is cute, I certainly wish there had been more to the comic itself, so it's kind of disappointing. Still, I really want to see this story continue on. I think there's a lot of interesting places this could go. Good work.

Radji
Artist
555 comments
# 2   Posted: Dec 10 2015, 01:28 AM
@ten dead king
it really wasn't her day ...

Krissy
Artist
105 comments
# 1   Posted: Nov 17 2015, 08:43 PM
Ooops, I accidentally another battled.

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