Intro Story / Dr. Fibrin

Intro Story / Dr. Fibrin

Intro Story — Dr. Fibrin


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Orion
Artist
208 comments
# 10   Posted: Sep 26 2015, 09:15 PM
*sees own character in 1st panel*

Well now I HAVE to fight you.

Evi
Artist
110 comments
# 9   Posted: Aug 17 2015, 10:06 PM
Man I love how neat and precise your inks are and AYYY he seems really interesting dude I can't wait to see what happens in his upcoming battle!

Kozispoon
Approval Committee
1055 comments
# 8   Posted: Aug 16 2015, 04:58 PM
OH snippity. new crotchety professor. We need more sour grapes tromping round here. I like that his intro dealt with him showing off that 'tude. We instantly know who he is and what he's about- not to mention get a peek at some mysterious mysteries in that second page with the spooky brain slug behind the podium. At least I'm pretty sure its a brain slug. Please don't yell at me, Mr. Fibrin, it really was just an educated guess! ;3;

Hobbittastic
Artist
164 comments
# 7   Posted: Aug 14 2015, 06:18 PM
IF YOU WHINE YOU WRITE AN ESSAY. He's funny people; I like him. The only technical thing I can add is to take care of your actual panel lines.

graphicDREAMER
Artist
22 comments
# 6   Posted: Aug 14 2015, 05:37 PM
i really like this character, Charlie has already given all the advice i could hope to think of! i really like this comic excited to see more of this guy

Charlie
Artist
726 comments
# 5   Posted: Aug 14 2015, 05:01 PM
Geeps you have made leaps and bounds in your art, now its time to focus on the presentation! The word bubbles, and by extension the fonts, need a little bit of work I think. They're very stiff and very basic compared to your art, and at times be mindful of the edges of the bubbles touching the edges of panels like on a tangent. Its okay to have the panel borders cut them off (if that makes sense) but don't have them rubbing up against each other. It also seemed like a few panels suffered from the placement of the text being an afterthought such as the bottom left panel of page 2 where it seems like his nose is dictating the flow. Maybe approaching the pages with more thought to where and how you are placing the text is needed. Also again, the font is kinda plain and boring and seems more like it belongs in a word document than on a comic.

But really, man dude you have really come a long way as far as your draftsmanship is concerned. Everything is nice and clear and crisp and while I feel the poses may be a little stiff for how passionately he gets into his speech, they are still really well drawn. I do think perhaps to be a little more mindful of the perspective on some panels and perhaps zoom the camera out a little bit more to really give the scope of the room they are standing in. I couldn't tell if you were going for a smaller class room or a larger university type lecture hall thing (which seems more fitting to the character).

Anyway these are just some minor things, again major props dude. I hope this hasn't come across as overly critical, and some of what I stated certainly plays more into personal taste anyway. Keep at it!

UmbrellaFrog
Artist
8 comments
# 4   Posted: Aug 14 2015, 02:56 PM
I feel like this is one of those guys you love to hate. I look forward to seeing how you will battle with him

Nibbles
Artist
192 comments
# 3   Posted: Aug 14 2015, 10:46 AM
I LIKE HIM.

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 2   Posted: Aug 14 2015, 10:41 AM
Sanari is in on this yes.

E.W. Schneider
Artist
1057 comments
# 1   Posted: Aug 14 2015, 10:23 AM
Yay Dr. Fibrin. Critique later, time for hi-science rigamarole.

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