Visually appealing indeed, not much to critique about. Not sure what the last page/last panel is, but I assume it will be concluded eventually.

One thing that bothered me was the giant white margins around allt the pages cept page 3. Like two inches of white on each side. I think it could be trimmed down a bit, and so the piece will be shrunk down a little and easier to read. Usually pages that don't require scrolling down are more enjoyable for me.

Very clear,very readable. Great job. I think the bg's could benefit with some linework, other than that, keep it up.

Loved the read!
The use of a thick bleed border is interesting. It creates a nice breathing space for the layout and it works well with the atmosphere and nature of the plot. The use of bleeds for storytelling is something i believe demands further exploration from adventurous Voiders.
Some of the inked backgrounds are flat and could use more of that atmospheric lighting that appears over the Flappies. Examples where it could have been used was page 3, panel 6. Other examples are where it is improperly used or used ineffectively such as Page 7, panel 1. The one panel that I can recall it being used well was page 4, panel 6.
For the figures, you need to practice drawing hands more. They come off as awkward in a lot of the poses they're in and don't feel natural.
Thats it. Keep up the good work!

this has been pretty good work for a week,love the colors on it ,looks really slick,reminds me of the old Dreamwave Days.
anyway the story reads pretty well,i am not to fond of the overall look of the characters,but thats just pure personal prefference ,

good job man !

i demand a spellings check option of the battle post ! just like in the forums !:)

Thanks puzzle! I think lineart is one of my strong suits so any advice on how to be the very best that no one ever was is awesome! I'll definitely practice my linewidths in future projects!

BTW do feel free to comment on other aspects of the comic. My friends also want some crit!

   Your inks are good and clean. I think you've totally established a strong base to work from, and you can start getting a little more extreme with your line weight shifts, try using suggested line too. On a different site I once saw someone say " You're not illustrating a coloring book, don't be afraid to leave gaps" and it really stuck with me because I'm just strait up terrrriiiibubblllllee with suggested line.

     You could be using your line art to strengthen the action. There's too many spots where getting more intense with the expressiveness of your lines would have gotten better results. For example, the bottom right panel of page 4. Not only could you have greatly increased the weight of the lines to show his muscles tensing, bracing against the force of the blow or his own magic, but you could have also used much more suggested line in his form, letting the edges of him get lost in the intensity of the blast.

 Thanks for showing the stuff you've been working on dude! It's awesome to know void peeps are out there showing how amazing they are, and it looks wonderful.

Looks pretty good. Feels kinda unfinished at the end there with the new texts.... but that might just be due to my not playing the game and being unaware of play tropes. On my phone, or I would comment more...

Okay so a lil background info on this:

I play an MMO called The Secret World, and one of the fanmade Guilds has this online magazine and asked us to make some art so we all collabed and made a comic.

I was in charge of inks and the shading on the last two pages.

It's not the most perfect thing, but I got permission from the other 3 that worked on this to upload here so any feedback would be nice to keep in mind!