Entwined / Wizzie Belles
Critiques & Comments
# 16
Posted:
Jul 15 2014, 09:20 AM
I really enjoyed this! Gorgeous work--I think even better than I've seen from you! Great colors, and I think your stylized anatomy has improved. Can't wait to see what's next on Wiz's journey!
# 15
Posted:
Jul 14 2014, 04:48 PM
Figure all that need to be said, was. So instead: enjoyed, was awesome, looking forward to what is next. X3
# 14
Posted:
Jul 13 2014, 11:13 PM
Thanks everyone! I really appreciate the support.
And it was only a matter of time before I fucked up the spelling of a title. THIS IS WHAT HAPPENS WHEN YOURE DESPERATE TO GET THINGS ONLINE. Maybe I'll be able to get in touch with Bobo to alter it.
And it was only a matter of time before I fucked up the spelling of a title. THIS IS WHAT HAPPENS WHEN YOURE DESPERATE TO GET THINGS ONLINE. Maybe I'll be able to get in touch with Bobo to alter it.
# 13
Posted:
Jul 12 2014, 01:33 PM
i agree we could have been shown a little clearer that wizzie died due to a broken neck, maybe with a close up on page two or something, and it would have been cool if her neck snapped back all gross right before she woke up. i really like how natural your dialogue is and the way your handwritten font pairs with your art. I can tell you put thought into your word bubble placement and we read everything in the order it's meant to be read. I like the transition right after she finds out she died back to the drab real world on the next page. I don't have any real meaningful critiques, you obviously know what you're doing, but maybe if you had filled in some of the negative space with detail for the real world pages... nah, it's fine. oh, i hate to be 'that' guy, but the word is 'entwined'... i wouldn't have said anything but it was the title and all. hope to see more soon!
# 12
Posted:
Jul 11 2014, 11:14 AM
HATS- Lookit you, coming back after a lull and coming back mighty! Good on ya! You are definitely bringing it to another level with your comics, lady. This is stuff I'd expect to see shoulder to shoulder with other professional works in comic book stores, vying for my cash monies.
Wizzie is one of a small pool of female fighters I am always amped to read more about. I'm glad to see you're picking up where you left off in your other battle. Too often people who default or submit unfinished work never really follow through on completing their stuff, so kudos on this very polished end product. The first page definitely caught me up to speed on where we left off when we last saw Wizz.
I think you handled Wizzie's death really well. I especially dig her reaction on page 8, panel 4. The weight of what Spirit tells her really shows on her face. Talk about a chilling realization to come to! Speaking of Spirit, that intro to the...afterlife? Wizzie's mind palace? Was groovy. I am such a sucker for backlit bloom and it definitely served its purpose here. Not to mention you are making great use of those custom photoshop brushes concerning Spirits body paint. I like the rough almost messy application.
I'm glad you mentioned that you missed a word bubble on the last page because the ending seems so lacking with Wizzie slack jawed, staring off through the window. With how well the story was building, I was a little thrown.
All in all though, wonderful work and as always, I definitely look forward to more.
Wizzie is one of a small pool of female fighters I am always amped to read more about. I'm glad to see you're picking up where you left off in your other battle. Too often people who default or submit unfinished work never really follow through on completing their stuff, so kudos on this very polished end product. The first page definitely caught me up to speed on where we left off when we last saw Wizz.
I think you handled Wizzie's death really well. I especially dig her reaction on page 8, panel 4. The weight of what Spirit tells her really shows on her face. Talk about a chilling realization to come to! Speaking of Spirit, that intro to the...afterlife? Wizzie's mind palace? Was groovy. I am such a sucker for backlit bloom and it definitely served its purpose here. Not to mention you are making great use of those custom photoshop brushes concerning Spirits body paint. I like the rough almost messy application.
I'm glad you mentioned that you missed a word bubble on the last page because the ending seems so lacking with Wizzie slack jawed, staring off through the window. With how well the story was building, I was a little thrown.
All in all though, wonderful work and as always, I definitely look forward to more.
# 11
Posted:
Jul 10 2014, 11:57 PM
Guys guys GUYS this was an immediate realise which makes it just say "1 week" this took me more around just over 2 weeks.
# 10
Posted:
Jul 10 2014, 09:41 PM
omg i can't believe this masterpiece was made in one WEEK. You are some kind of drawing god.
# 9
Posted:
Jul 10 2014, 05:38 PM
I can't believe you played this all off in only a week, this was really cool, good use of colors and it was really interesting to read.
# 8
Posted:
Jul 9 2014, 04:30 PM
ahhh its finally up, I'm so happy to have more Wizzie comics!! I LOVE the colours in this, especially the blues and violets on pages 6-10, and fantastic expressions as well. I'm glad we finally get to learn more about what Spirit is, now I need to know what the Voice is! So Wizzie can't die, but she sure can be killed! A helpful but PAINFUL superpower lol. One thing I thought, if she died by neck-breaking, maybe that could have been a little clearer in the art, as her 'dead' body didn't really have a lot of visible destruction around the neck so i just figured she bled out. I mean you don't have to go full-on gore but a slight twisting or something to indicate it got broke. Also, lol at long-suffering Miller, he will never know a moments peace being friends with her XD (also just noticed one of her get well cards is "lol bitch u dun fucked up" and that makes me laugh.) Glad to have Wizzie back! Looking forward to more!
# 7
Posted:
Jul 9 2014, 02:15 PM
Also, maybe it was only me, but like.
Is page 1 broken for anyone else?
Quote
It's not just you, for some reason i get the problem on my iPhone but not on my mac. The story starts at page 2 so you're not really missing anything vital, it's simply a little disclaimer of NSFW and where the story is in Wizzie's timeline. http://i.imgur.com/z2xLgFe.png
ALSO OH MY GOD DID I NOT FUCKING CHECK MY UPLOADED PAGES. Page 13 on the last panel should have a bubble that says "Well, okay..."
FUCKSAAKE IM DUMB
# 6
Posted:
Jul 9 2014, 01:52 PM
I just.
Really liked page 9, and the galaxy. It's just. So pretty. Oh. Uuuuh. Hmm. Yes.
Also, maybe it was only me, but like.
Is page 1 broken for anyone else?
Really liked page 9, and the galaxy. It's just. So pretty. Oh. Uuuuh. Hmm. Yes.
Also, maybe it was only me, but like.
Is page 1 broken for anyone else?
# 5
Posted:
Jul 9 2014, 01:29 PM
Your style is pretty solid here, this is good stuff. Nice job.
# 4
Posted:
Jul 9 2014, 12:59 PM
"And that's how they found my last boyfriend"
AAA++
AAA++
# 3
Posted:
Jul 8 2014, 06:07 AM
YAY, A Wizzie comic! I am excited.
# 2
Posted:
Jul 8 2014, 03:16 AM
HNGGGGG IM SO PUMPED FOR THIS
# 1
Posted:
Jul 8 2014, 02:52 AM
HAPPY 3RD VOID BIRTHDAY WIZZIE
Beyond Battle
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Jul 15th, 2014
Votes Cast:
19
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2058
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