"Knight Owl" Corry vs. Gargonne and AEGIS

"Knight Owl" Corry vs. Gargonne and AEGIS

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michaelharris
Artist
353 comments
# 7   Posted: Jun 24 2014, 01:11 PM
Both: Short stories are fine, preferable even, but if you are going to do a 5-6 page story I'd like to see a more complete act.

MRNOITAULL: I really want you to focus on backgrounds. It's very obvious that you are avoiding doing them. I don't see any real effort put into this.

KENT: I liked backgrounds but I'd like you to use more reference, they were a bit generic and seemed like they came out of your head. I'd also start trying to use perspective to really nail down these environments. I like the use of the characters but I wish you had tried to make Corry look like a black male. Like taken a look at black hair and common african features. The way you rendered his hair it appears like a weird much texture kind of like pudding.

Rose
Web Dev
1180 comments
# 6   Posted: Jun 21 2014, 06:41 AM
Mr. Kent, trying something new... sweet!

But seriously guys, I was disappointed with both of your comics. I mean, they both had a nice feel to them, were well-rendered, and just generally felt like decent comics. That said, you totally left us hanging! Both of you ended with a simple lead-in to what felt much more like actual plot than what the comics themselves contained. Not that it's bad to have a comic that's less plot-driven and more about the characters themselves, but you really just tantalize us with comics like this.

So I guess what I'm really saying is that I want more comics. I guess that's all I'm really trying to say.

K.G.
Artist
23 comments
# 5   Posted: Jun 18 2014, 07:27 PM
As I'm not versed in comic art, I can't tell much, but here is what I noticed on your comics:

@Minotaull
I loved your pencil lines and your angles you use! Panel layouts are very good also!
I just didn't get what happened on panel 2 of page 3... the alien and the guy's faces are hidden and there's a balloon almost over it... maybe changing the angle for this shot would clear a bit more the action. The ending felt a little incomplete, it just ended abruptly, I think a couple pages "teasing" what you are planning to have on next installments would help this. :)

@Mister kent
That's nice that you are trying digital now! I really liked Gargonne asking for money so desperate! It felt very funny! But for me it's like the comic didn't end... I don't know if you were trying to make it open ended, but I thought your comic would benefit from a punchline or something like it...

Good job you all!

The Bent One
Artist
564 comments
# 4   Posted: Jun 18 2014, 12:18 PM
Kent - Congrats on making the first jump into all digital! The learning curve is hard, especially if you haven't found the right brushes that you feel comfortable with. Is there anything different in the way you were drawing this digitally than you normally draw? I eventually found that I draw best by doing my tiny layout thumbnails, blowing them up, and sketching right on top of them.

On the topic of an actual critique, Your backgrounds look sloppy. Give them some love! Other than that, practice makes perfect of the digital side of things. The story seems to cut off at the end, and I feel like you could have done a few more pages in 3 weeks.

Mrnoitaull - I like the touch or realism in your figures, and the ink wash is a nice effect. However, I feel like you could use it more sparingly to add more contrast to your images. for example, on page 4 in the first panel, if the floor behind the aliens was darker, they would really pop out of the page. As for the story, it seems clear that you had more planned, but just stopped. I'm guessing you ran out of time.

Great job, both of you!

Mister Kent
Artist
958 comments
# 3   Posted: Jun 18 2014, 09:19 AM
Sorry for the mess - tried my hand at my very first all-digital comic!

Cool comic Mr. Noitaull!! I like that we both happened to tell stories of the two sides meeting/getting to know each other. Your style is as slick as ever :D Thanks for the battle!

The Bent One
Artist
564 comments
# 2   Posted: May 30 2014, 05:35 PM
Yeah! CORRY getting back in the game!

stefan
Artist
68 comments
# 1   Posted: May 28 2014, 07:55 AM
KENT is on fire!

Good luck to the both of ya!

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Drawing Time: 3 weeks
Ended: Jun 24th, 2014
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