Intro Story / Dr Calderwood

Intro Story / Dr Calderwood

Intro Story — Dr Calderwood

by Fearn


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Puzzlething
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# 10   Posted: Mar 18 2014, 06:27 PM
 I was all set to comment and be like "Yo they should like, look and talk way different even if they are triplets. They totes seem like the same person right now" and then I read the bio and I was like welp, that's totally intentional.

     I really like it dude, it reminds me of subnormality a little bit. I really like how textural everything is, though I think you could use a little more spots of hard black in the world itself to balance out how much you lay on Ivy. I also think Ivy could be a little more expressive. Like, look how amazing Bub is! Bring some of that expressiveness into Ivy! Just cause she's chill doesn't mean she can't emote. Even some more expressive body language would help, she's standing a little stiffly on pages 3 and 4.

      Also, totes joining the bub club.

ColdShoulderAve
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# 9   Posted: Mar 15 2014, 12:27 PM
I have to agree with many of the other commenters. Pacing is really good, inking is interesting and fun, and Bub is done very well and naturally, very expressive. Good stuff!

......Bub, I like Bub..I feel an intense comraderie with Bub..... Buuuuuuuuuuuhb

metsuke
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# 8   Posted: Mar 13 2014, 03:08 PM
I really enjoyed this, the pacing and gags were on time, I wish the lettering was by hand, imo it takes away from all the nice detail you have created here. The punchline on page four kind of falls flat, but only because you set the bar so high on the previous pages. My gut initially gurgled that the three twins were the witches of the Graeae, before going blind and cauldrons and chasing after an all seeing eye, but after reading the Bio...there (might) be a chance?
All in all so well done that comments like "amaze-balls" now hold more magnitude coming from you.

michaelharris
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# 7   Posted: Mar 11 2014, 01:49 AM
I really like the art. The characterization is good as well as the props. Cats aren't easy to draw. I do wish the intro story revealed more about the main character. Honestly, I thought the cat was the main character. Its a good idea to give the character's name in an intro, especially if you do a piece outside of void. I wish you could have shown that the 3 ladies were actually the same person multiplied. You could have dressed them the same(does she teleport/duplicate with different clothes) Putting them in different clothing made them seem like different people.

Fearn
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# 6   Posted: Mar 10 2014, 02:34 AM
Le Fred:
The hers that don't talk are a bit creepy, they just stand around and smile meekly, it's weird.
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True! I kind of wasn't sure if to do that, have random "hers" talk or have them speak in unison. The latter would be beyond creepy... I should have probably gone for the random ones speaking. It's all a learning curve! :)

Thanks everyone for the comments! <3

Quartney
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# 5   Posted: Mar 9 2014, 11:00 PM
Aww! Da staffordshire terrier cerberus puppy!!! Cute!!
I love your clear crisp pages! :D

RobThing
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# 4   Posted: Mar 9 2014, 09:20 PM
Ahhh yesss I was waiting for this  :D  THAT KITTY.

Fred v2.0.1
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# 3   Posted: Mar 8 2014, 07:20 PM
Woo! FERN!
I dig it!
The hers that don't talk are a bit creepy, they just stand around and smile meekly, it's weird.

TINMAN
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# 2   Posted: Mar 8 2014, 07:08 PM
Luscious inks you've got going on there Miss. I dig your style and design absolutely. Very crisp and well characterized. Well worth the wait of her arrival. I'm interested to see how her personality and powerset and all its delightful possibilities play out on the battlefield and otherwise. Totally hitlisted.

Field Marshal Lionel Forsythe W. Underwood XIII, GBE
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# 1   Posted: Mar 8 2014, 06:29 PM
Do my eyes deceive me? A fully coherent intro with story and glorious art graces the site? Pukka work you lovely little thing you. You executed this intro comic very well. I salute you.

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