Boek vs. Blackavar

Boek vs. Blackavar

Boek vs. Blackavar

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Mister Kent
Artist
946 comments
# 12   Posted: Jan 9 2014, 08:03 AM
Cherubas: The VC Kid's Club~great idea! Facial expressions rocked here! You got Mortido perfectly. I'd suggest more detailed backgrounds in future comics--you have really improved your character design and overall storytelling, just fill out some of the details of the world!

Momoless: WELCOME and congrats on the first battle! I like your style--very rounded off and distinct. I'd suggest finding a different font, however--this one can be hard to read when very small. Oh, and Kozi reminded me--your backgrounds were nice too! I am eager to see more from you!

Momoless
Artist
5 comments
# 11   Posted: Jan 3 2014, 05:55 AM
Big thanks to all the nice words and critis! I will try to take them into acount for my next comic :)
@Kozispoon: it truthfully was the originall idea that Blackavar's speechpattern is more oldschool, but I literally can't write in English like that. English isn't my first language and I'm actually pretty bad at it (I failed my classes at school...)

Kozispoon
Global Moderator
1077 comments
# 10   Posted: Jan 2 2014, 03:00 PM
CHERUBAS- Right off the bat, nice work getting some cameos with purpose in. The dialogue among them regarding the deep dark forest totally made me chuckle. I also dug your inks. Sharp, clean and I could definitely differentiate foreground and background despite the lack of color. You had such a great momentum going and snared my interest I was totally bummed to see a 'to be continued'! I certainly hope its continued. Definitely want to see what you had planned.

MOMOLOESS- DEM BACKGROUNDS THO. Very nice. You could really tell you put as much attention and effort into your environments as your did your characters, well done. I'm amused your fighter was rather hip and modern in the way he spoke. I dunno why I expected proper olden timey speech. I certainly didn't expect 'damn fine'. The relationship forged between him and the kid was short and sweet, not to mention I laughed at the last panel. Very cute stuff.

Sooo bummed I wasn't around to vote on this, but I'm tossing in my comment all the same. Nice job you's guys!

Puzzlething
Artist
457 comments
# 9   Posted: Jan 1 2014, 10:05 PM
Cherubas                -

                         Ahhhhh do more backgrounds! Your comic gets so better on page 4 once you get Boek into the forest. The forest is simple, but just having all that stuff around makes you so much more creative with your shot placement. You also end up framing your work way better. And the forest might be simple, but I love the texture of the bark on those trees. Way way more intresting than a featureless white void!

                       I'm not really feeling the action in Blackavar's tackle. You don't need speed lines or anything, but your linework should be fast and more dynamic, and his fur and clothes should be swept back by the air instead of just hanging there like he's floating.

                    Ugh, I hate "To be continued", especially because this was a really great set-up dude. Almost like an episode of the Goonies or something ( I have never seen that show so I might sound retarded right now)


Momoless                  -

                        This kinda feels like a tiny thing, but it bothers me. You're too obsessed with trying to get the shape of Blackavar's eyes right, and you're not thinking enough about their form. Draw the sphere of Blackavar's eyes first, then stretch his eyelids over it. You might not always have his eyes appear as that perfect angled almond shape, but they'll look much better. Always consider form over shape. Think about how objects and their surface details move in and out of the space around them.

                       I definitely agree with what people are saying about your lines. Even being a little more expressive would totally breathe so much more life into your art. I also think you can push the body language of your characters a little more. You obviously take that stuff into consideration, you have some solid poses, I just think it's just a matter of exaggeration to make things more interesting and dynamic. Dynamism in general is really what your comic is lacking, and I think it's just a combination of your static line weight and quiet body language.

                     It's a wonderfully polished comic. You put so much effort into everything you do. At no point did I feel like you were cutting corners to save time/effort. Those backgrounds are lovely, and I really like the way you draw tree's. You do great stuff with so few lines. Super impressive for a newcomer, you definitely know how to make a entrance.

Crafty
Artist
65 comments
# 8   Posted: Dec 27 2013, 03:27 PM
Both of these were cute and fun to read.
 
Momo, it was pretty cool to see Blackavar having some issues adjusting to city life. Good job with the backgrounds and the colours. I did very much enjoy the ending as well, I laughed at the headbutting.
Cherubas, I really love the facial expressions! And it was very amusing too. The 'To Be Continued' was a little frustrating, but only because I really want to see what happens next! Your lines are great - but I think they can be better!

Good job to both, look forward to seeing more!

Shen
Global Moderator
1298 comments
# 7   Posted: Dec 27 2013, 12:41 PM
Great comics! Both were a very entertaining read, and you both have a great style! Cherubas I think yours lacked depth a bit with no shading but I like your lines! Momo I like yours colours and backgrounds! good job guys!

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1441 comments
# 6   Posted: Dec 26 2013, 11:27 AM
You guys have opposing problems:

Cherubas: You've got better lines, type and proportions but 0 color or shades which makes it feel incomplete.
Momo: Cool colors but you need to work on finer lines, better proportions and better fitting type.

I personally preferred Cherub's story because of the writing even if brief, Ivan's defense and Somadis' knee shaking were the hilights~

Keep working, gents!

Fred v2.0.1
Artist
498 comments
# 5   Posted: Dec 26 2013, 09:09 AM
Boek getting his skull cracked by a goat is officially the best thing.

Momoless
Artist
5 comments
# 4   Posted: Dec 25 2013, 10:37 PM
I really am out of shape when it comes to comic drawing.... Everything took me so long but I'm glad I still got it done in the end. I'm really exited about seeing Cherubas story :D

Con
Artist
92 comments
# 3   Posted: Nov 30 2013, 08:54 PM
I dig both of these character designs and wanna see you both go all out. Go go go!

Crafty
Artist
65 comments
# 2   Posted: Nov 30 2013, 02:06 PM
Good on you Momo, getting straight into battling! Good luck to both of you, I look forward to some great comics!

Dechado
Artist
246 comments
# 1   Posted: Nov 27 2013, 11:52 PM
Good luck in your first battle, Momo.

Can't wait to see what you two come up with. I think this is a cute matchup.

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 3 weeks
Ended: Jan 1st, 2014
Votes Cast: 19
Page Views: 929
Winner: Momoless
 

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