Monster Child / Tiffany Dropkick

Monster Child / Tiffany Dropkick

Monster Child — Tiffany Dropkick


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Tofubeast
Artist
254 comments
# 9   Posted: Sep 29 2013, 11:29 AM
@Kozispoon: Thanks! Yeah, that learned me to try and force myself to upload/finish something that wasn't at its 100%. I'll be back with better stuff!

Kozispoon
Global Moderator
1084 comments
# 8   Posted: Sep 26 2013, 07:34 AM
I'm sorry to hear you were going through some life stuff, and I totally understand doing away with the usual checks and balances to 'vent out' a comic to gets those feels down on paper. It's just a shame your usual quality took a dive. I really reeeally like your Dropkick character and wanna know more about her and her world, but it does seem like the comics made are taking a gradual slope downwards in quality, which as a result leave me as a reader none too jazzed to trudge through the proverbial muck.

Keep your chin up and come back at us swingin'. I know you can do it! :D

Puzzlething
Artist
457 comments
# 7   Posted: Sep 10 2013, 05:07 PM
          I think you should be filling your space with way more art. The attitude of your art, comics, and even your characters is aggressive and cool, but you kill a lot of the impact by having so much negative space. Your most effective pages were early on, like 1 and 2, where you use waaaay more space than everywhere else. Too often parts of your pages feel isolated from the rest, instead of one, giant, killer illustration.

            You also shoot a lot of your dudes strait on. There's nothing really wrong with that, but I really think it would suit your dynamic style and angled line art to really play around with your perspective, camera angles, and movement through space.Just get as much movement and action into your composition as possible.

    Also, it's nitpicky, but in your last few comics, you have spots where your lines aren't totally black, and I think that detracts from its strength. Make sure you fiddle with your levels, because not only will it strengthen your lines, but it'll make your digital lettering and bubbles stand out way less.

    Dude, don't talk about deleting your comic and stuff. I always like seeing your art. Maybe it's not your best stuff, but I totally don't agree that there's nothing cool here. Pink and Chartreuse is a hot as hell color scheme, and your awesome sense of style can't help but bleed into everything you do. I really enjoyed everyone's facial expressions, but most of all I fucking love Bunny. Seriously dude, she's so awesome. Like Tiffany and Bunny are prolly like two of my favorite characters on void. You have an awesome aesthetic man, I just think you need get even more crazy and in your face with your art, and start putting in that polish. It's crazy what a little bit of shining can do.

Tofubeast
Artist
254 comments
# 6   Posted: Sep 10 2013, 12:03 PM
@Wei Ingnan: *edit* it turns out this comic can't be deleted so I'm going to have to live with it. Sorry, I was in the middle of life stuff that no one wants to hear about when I did this.

@Kent: Agreed! I think I will have to continue to put myself on hiatus from void battles until this entire year is over, or until I have a steadier situation/less projects on the table.

Mister Kent
Artist
947 comments
# 5   Posted: Sep 10 2013, 07:39 AM
Bunny seems like an interesting addition to the story! Also, I liked the very last panel.

I've seen you do much better in a week, and know you can do better. I think that, because the battle is over and this is a BB, you didn't have to upload it in such an unfinished state. With no deadline you could've taken some time to do it right, and I wish you'd taken that chance.

Furthermore, I'd suggest staying away from one-week battles for a time. Your art shines when you have time to work, and the extra weeks would also help allow for potential Life Hell, which always happens at the worst times.

Good luck with the next one! Hope life calms down.

(Edited because I said REALLY like a million times u_u )

Wei Ingnan
Artist
597 comments
# 4   Posted: Sep 10 2013, 06:44 AM
if by slightly incoherent mess you mean 'completely incoherent mess' and by when and where you can apply it as 'never' then I am in complete agreement with you...except for this in any way making up for anything

you are capable of much much better than this comic that you shat out and shoved under our noses....and anyone that tells you otherwise is doing you a severe disservice

you can do so much better so why aren't you?

Tofubeast
Artist
254 comments
# 3   Posted: Sep 9 2013, 08:05 PM
@skulls: glad you dug what I had! I had no line variation on purpose throughout this whole thing (this was all done with sharpie and highlighter) because I had done sketchwork like this before and had liked how it turned out, so I wanted to see how I could apply it to a short term deadline here.

Parts of it didn't work out, so now I know when and where I can apply it.

I figured that Bunny would probably just keep Quality in the dark and tell her to leave town so that they could handle it on their own without having to worry about Quality getting shot, but then it turns out to be all for nothing anyway because Quality doesn't leave. Could have probably been a bit clearer about that.

Cracking Skulls
Artist
344 comments
# 2   Posted: Sep 9 2013, 05:38 PM
I really like the approach you had for this as it does give an interesting stance on Tiffany being a big sister role model and such. I did have a hard time understanding page 3-4, Where bunny says Tiff can help, then just tells her to skip town or something? What was the point of telling her Tiff could help out then?

I'd say to focus more on your line variations for some time now. They can be dang thick from foreground to background, and nothing is differentiating them from the other. Just try to experiment more with thinner lines and using thick lines to make whatevers closer to the foreground.

Other than that, hey, new cute character, I like it. Keep it up!

Tofubeast
Artist
254 comments
# 1   Posted: Sep 8 2013, 10:43 PM
This was supposed to be the one-weeker Tiffany Dropkick VS Quality battle, and then life happened under and all round me. Here's a slightly incoherent mess of a bb to make up for it.

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