Intro Story / Aurora & Remus

Intro Story / Aurora & Remus

Intro Story — Aurora & Remus

by G.Lo

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# 11   Posted: Jul 7 2015, 09:14 AM
Hey G.Lo!

Thanks for commenting on my latest comic, it led me to checking out your work.  

I love that this is in full color, and your backgrounds are great - something I seriously need to work on myself.  I tend to use this super stylized graphic-y approach with lots of blacks and pop-art looking shadow shapes and stuff without drawing any real places, and I just know I'm gonna get called out on it soon.  

I totally wasn't expecting Aurora to cave that girl's face in with her hoof.  When that happened I exclaimed "Jeezus!!  Oh my god!" to myself alone in my room, grinning ear to ear.  And then laughed out loud for about ten seconds straight.  I really gotta up my gore game with The Smile, because I want to elicit those kinds of reactions from my readers.

Maybe not normally a character I'd peg as a fit for The Smile, but I'm hitlisting Aurora purely in hopes of seeing you draw him someday.  

Mister Kent
# 10   Posted: Jul 12 2013, 06:29 PM
Welcome to Void, Aurora and Remus :D I look forward to your exciting exploiuts!

# 9   Posted: Jul 11 2013, 04:27 AM
 omg thank you sooo much for taking the time to critique this, I really appreciate it!!!
Note taken on the blur. That was something I had never done before, so I appreciate the feedback on that.
I think I have the least amount of confidence in my coloring, so thank you for the tips!'
Hahaha I thought I was being clever by making the panel on the left point down towards the nymph to hopefully make her the first thing you see in that panel. Not clever enough >>. I didn't even think that the reader would look at the ending swinging Aurora first- good to know!
Ahhh I also didn't notice that she was leaning! I'll definitely keep an eye out for that!

Thaaaaank you so much for the critiques, man. And thanks for expressing your hyped-ness; here and in the incubator! That is like the coolest feeling ever after I've put off battling on here for so long. It's definitely a confidence booster <333

Thanks so much <3 I definitely see what you guys mean about page 2 being a bit confusing - I didn't really notice that before. Ooh.. I like that idea of switching it up! Thanks :D

# 8   Posted: Jul 10 2013, 10:02 PM
Nice! I like this combo in this duo. I think on of my just quick story telling things to mention is on page two where she jumps up and swings around the dragon things neck. I read it back wards cause my eye hits the last part of that motion first. So if you just switch the thing around to where the jump is the left most part and the return is the right most part I think that would help a lot. Otherwise I dig it! Cool stuff

# 7   Posted: Jul 10 2013, 07:00 PM
Sorry about missing my chance to comment on this in the approval process, I was kinda freaking out. Everyone gave you so much great feedback in the Incubator thread, but I can't remember everything that was said, so please excuse me if I repeat anything.

          I don't like you using the blur tool on stuff out of focus. I think it takes away from your great linework and sense of detail, and I there are like a million ways to show what the reader needs to focus on in a scene without making it impossible to look at anything else. Colour saturation, surface detail, line weight, compositional elements. I think you're so good at most of those things that you could totally do it easily without the blur. In fact, it looks like you kinda just stopped using it after the first page.

           It's amazing how confidently you use so many colours, and it's a gorgeous palette. You consistently just shade everything with a darker version of the base colour though. Don't be afraid to use different colours for your shadows, because it can do really amazing things to unify your work as whole, strengthen the presence of the setting, and create and change mood. Especially when you have so much light coloured fabric, which usually draws from the colours around it quite a lot.

          Page 2 is a little confusing because I move strait to the next depiction of Aurora, which is at the end of the action, instead of down to the start of the action. I think It's because she's so close to the preceding panel, clear and colourful, and her staff makes up part of the border for that panel. So I'm like already looking at her a little before I even have a chance to move down to the white robed attacker.

            When you're character is in a neutral standing position, she constantly feels like she's going to tip forward.  She needs to lean the top half of her body back a bit to act as a counter-weight to how much of her legs stick out in front of her and because of how far back her ankles are.

        It's a gorgeous comic dude, and you obviously worked crazy hard on it. There's so much clever and ambitious stuff you're doing with your composition and pacing, and so much care and attention on every little part of the illustration. I'm so excited for your fight, you don't even know.

# 6   Posted: Jul 9 2013, 05:53 AM
Thanks everyone! I'm so excited to finally be able to battle!

@Animeshen- Thank you so much!  :D Not gonna lie, I've been pondering all sorts of ideas for that showdown! It's gonna happen B]

# 5   Posted: Jul 8 2013, 11:39 PM
oh I like your style, and your brilliant vibrant colours! Great composition and angles, you will be a great addition to Void haha, i can't wait to see you battle! (also, please fight Johnny Sweet that is a showdown that should happen)

# 4   Posted: Jul 6 2013, 05:33 PM
Fun stuff!

# 3   Posted: Jul 6 2013, 05:16 PM
Cute comic, I look forward to see where these guys go.

# 2   Posted: Jul 6 2013, 06:51 AM
More like interesting question! I kinna imagined that her pants are too low/ her tail is too high up. Also I imagine she wouldn't be a pro seamstress (more along the lines of fixing holes, hemming, patching etc.) and with all her traveling and such, I'm not so sure her sewing could keep up with the wear and tear those pants go through.

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# 1   Posted: Jul 5 2013, 09:58 PM
Silly Question: Why doesn't she just make herself a hole for her tail, or is it too high up for her pants?

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