Pages seem a bit rough and the macro shots panel to panel left me wondering what i may of been missing if the camera was zoomed out a bit more. I did enjoy the tie in to some mythological tale telling with narcissus. Needless to say I'm intrigued to see more.

Quite an interesting story, it had captured a great amount of my attention. It’s quite a unique style; I look forward to the future encounters here at Entervoid.

Interesting set up! I'm looking forward to more!

Just wanted to point out that I was a little confused at the "I..,, BLARGH" part since I don't think it was presented in the most coherent manner to me. Also the logic of "I will rescue you!" leading to conclusion of "I will stare at you" being the means of rescue. I know the story of Narcissus, but 'owning' the story a bit more should free you to twist and interpret stories how you want.

i completely use sketchbook and photoshop i dont draw on paper anymore its been so long i suck at it now

Hahah I just noticed that Narcissus is totally touching her boob in that first panel. This character is really interesting and look forward to more from you. One thing I would challenge you to do is try to make everything look more cohesive. You have some really sharp lines right next to lines that were obviously blurred in Photoshop, and the speech bubbles have crisp edges but give more of a simplistic graphic design feel that doesn't match your art style. I would challenge you to either draw everything on paper and only using Photoshop to clean up your art, or at least to try to make it look like you did that.

Oh, and get battling!

I really liked the slight twist feel there was.

Critique:

You could work on your panel borders a bit - everything else is crisp while the thick borders (which work sometimes) are blurred. I think you made the borders and initial sketch in smaller resolution and then amped it up? The double borders are very greekish touch, but you could make it even better by decorating the corners.

Another thing that struck my eye is the scene where Everose eats the small pixie - unless the event was supposed to take a while you should've made the panels smaller and perhaps add one more frame - Size of the panel tells time and affects pacing. You should work on that aspect more to get your story even more fluid.

Overall, I like it! I look forward to seeing more, your storytelling is good and I really enjoy the greek myth references. I'm seeing a lot of potential, which will be only unlocked with more and more comics!

Welcome! You've already gotten my thoughts on this, all I have to say now is Get battling!

ehhh it was an epic fail at something new lol

nice, greek myth thing you have going on here is great. I REALLY want to see Everose interact with inhabitants in void. I have a question though, Why color her hair in the last page and not the others?