Albino Turtle: Good sketches that are leading to great work, but, I kind of got lost half-way through. This could have been cut down 5 pages and still be solid. Hope to see more in the future~

Albino: Clearly a lot of work went into this and I love your presentation, it's adorable and well written. You've made Dwagonfly and the Emberhearts into fully fleshed out characters, and they're quite likable. Framing the story in their personal motives and the tournament worked well.
It does tend to feel a bit decompressed and longwinded by the end of the aliens bit, I don't know if that was really necessary though I did get a good chuckle out of it. The comic is inconsistent tho, from nice colored stuff to greytones to speedy line work- strive for a more complete, even if its condensed, package.

Albino Turtle-the comic is cute and I like the interaction between the characters. But it might be good to cut some of this out. Not only do you have 14 pages, you have 14 pages with a lot of panels and a lot of text. I think you could have condensed the story which would have allowed you to focus more on giving us a more finished comic.

Albino: That was a really cute and fun story! Loved how you portrayed the characters. I felt the panels were a little difficult to follow at times, but nothing that prevented me from enjoying the comic. Hopefully you have a better idea of what you can pull-off in a given time frame now that you've gone a round. It'd be nice to see a more complete battle from you. :]

I KNOW! hnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnffgggg!!!

Albino: this was a nice little comic. Unfinished looking, but it has a quaint little plot and you handled dialogue well. Nice little level of action. I can even see the bones of your backgrounds, and I feel this would have turned out well if you could have finished. Even with the good plot, you should know how much you can finish in the time given. I feel 7 finished pages is stronger than 14 unfinished. Good work though.

Sprojler: I was so looking forward to your antics.. This makes me quite sad.

to everyone that had a question about the aliens, they were suppose to be a bit of a crossover with JBKtheDongsauger's "Boxo" .

oh also,
@kinuchio
the "to be con" was actually a "to be con" cause there were more pages and an actual end. so I'm gonna submit those pages as a side comic.
(when i have the time. huehuehue)

I love the humor and story direction of your comic, Albino. I think I'm going to like the Emberhearts.

damnit sprojler. I so wanted to see what dwagonfly could DO.

As for emberheart *A*... that. was. awesome.

Sorry about you not finishing, Sprojler, but I am glad you showed to apologize(?). I really am keen on Dwagonfly, an I hope to see you put him into action soon!

wished you were able to submit!
i would have loved to see what you came up with

NUUUUH! SPROJLER!

I deserve to DIIEEEE!!!!

sorry about the alien thing.. (and typos) I thought i should cut it too but i already finished those pages.( also all the photoshop data was deleted so i couldn't go back to fix things.)

Nevermind Dwagonfly, I hope you stick around.

Albino: ;A; Aawww Rue is such a cutie and I loved the personality you gave to dwagonfly - his father scene was very XD uh...moving. Though I did like the scene when Dwagonfly's lasers blew up the spaceship I felt like it dragged a lot and was sort of not needed. Great job!

Disappointed but not entirely surprised Dwagonfly didn't submit. The Emberhearts more than made up for the absence, though. That comic was HILARIOUS.

haha that was a fun read.  

Nice job, Albino! That was a really cool read! I enjoyed how you portrayed both you and your opponent's character. The opening pages were really impressive, and it's obvious you can put some effort into bgs when you need to. I took off a bit for quality because of how it dropped near the end, and the "to be cont." seemed more like a run out of time thing more than an actual arc ending.

Overall though, I enjoyed this!

SPROJLER: What can I say? Just don't let this be a discouragement or hindrance! Dwagonfly is a funny guy and I'm sure lots of people would love to take him on, stick around bro!

Albino: This was a very well paced match. Lets start off with pros and move to cons:

PROS: Your dialogue and body acting/language is very well done, for such a simple character like Dwagonfly something like that is integral to bring his personality, emotions and feelings across (aside from his face). For the time you were given you managed to fit in a rather impressive amount of detail, especially with Bunny and the bike they were ridding in. I like the way you made Dwagonfly your own, that's part of the fun of void, nice dialouge, clever jokes, keep it up! I look forward to more of this mother/daughter team.

CONS: Obviously when I say all of this I'm keeping in mind you only had a week to do all this so I know time and life only allows for so much. The focus on the main characters and action in the foreground is clear and sometimes blurring the background or making it simpler can help distinguish it, but the point in which it occurs in this comic is almost jarring, like well draw characters against a middle-school play background. Also, what is with the strange style-comic shift that occurs in pages 9 and 10? That confused me a bit.

Wow Turtle, that was.. interesting.. First of all you managed to make Dwagonfly a sympathetic character (I started feeling sorry for him halfway through the pages), great pacing in the story (although the Alien "loveship" could have been cut), great art, just a shame you didn't have time to complete it.. But having delivered 15 pages in the space of a week you deserve som slack

Turtle that was a super freaking good read! MY EYES!!! I love it.

SPROJLER WWWWHHHHYYYY!!!!??

DONE! OMG!

Dwagonfly looks like he is wagging his wang. I LOVE IT.
Also MORE ROBOTS.

So yeah, good luck dudes.

Dwagonfly is secretly my favorite charcter in this tournament. Or maybe my favorite character ever.

Best of luck to both competitors!

GO TEAM ROBOT

Gotta say I'm a fan of Dwagonfly

Good luck, you two!

HNFG!!!!!! WHY THE GIRLS!!! well I will look forward to this!

Good luck you guys!

Man, I'm all excited for the DWAGONFLY