Hey BV I liked that you used angles and poses that most new comics wouldn't attempt. I Liked your first panel establishing shot, and for the most part your perspective was good in it, except for one building thats off. You should take a look at that the perspective thread on the void forum for help to improve http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=10652.0 . Also i dunno if you have access to photoshop or some other photo editing software, but when you scan in gray tone done by hand, its a good idea to adjust your levels to make your blacks, black. heres another thread for scanning in pages and making them pretty.  http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=9918.0  anyways nice job i can't wait for your next fight.

Beloved I really liked your line work and angles; good job.

PUNCH A DOG IN THE MOUTH!

I like your drawing style.
I do not like the writting.
It's basically just an excuse of a pointless senseless fight. There's no reason for it and there's nothing gained from it.(aside from dog punching) it's just completly random.
I've got nothing against fight comics, so long as the context makes some bit of sense.
I would have been more satisfied without the bit of dialogue on the last page. Does Nadya attack every guy, girl and dog she meets expecting them to have information? If she really thought Madelyn had info, would she really give up that easely her interogation?
bottom line; what the hell, Nadya?

Beloved: The lines are pretty good but you're killing them with those shades and blacks, they're very sloppy There has to be a better way to do your shades. Nadya's pony tail was especially distracting. I'm assuming time was running out and you were rushing, because based on your other work you're usually better at it.


      Edited Jun 2 2011,  08:26 AM by PyrasTerran

dagnabbit!

Hey! Good luck you guys! Hopefully a  good first battle Belovedvenerate!