Art wise
This was nice, the only issue I have is that there are title panels on three of the four pages. I think you should have only one title page. It really takes the reader out of the story. I also wished we could have seen Lady Doom. I really want to see more of the villains, they looked really interesting. You do a good job of moving the camera around, but I would encourage you to use more long shots. Most pages usually have a long shot, a middle shot, and a close up on them, to vary the panels.
Story wise
This feels like a deleted scene. The story isn't really progressed or begun. We don't really learn anything about Lady Doom. We learn that Shauna Miller works for/with agent 13, but none of this hints at a direction the story will be taking.
Propaganza!
Critiques & Comments
# 4
Posted:
May 29 2011, 01:30 PM
# 3
Posted:
May 29 2011, 12:21 PM
Yeah, admittedly this is more of a preview than anything else, but I'm doing my best to make it spicy!
# 2
Posted:
May 29 2011, 11:28 AM
Nice job so far, I like the colours. I hope you'll be able to shade all your pages like the cover and the few panels with shading too. Looking solid though
# 1
Posted:
May 14 2011, 11:01 PM
Good luck Kent! You always put out some top-notch stuff, I am excited to see what you do!
And the disclaimer I am gonna post on each of these:
Remember people who read/vote , these are being split into two pieces. So this first round is just the first half of the comic and the next round will be the second half. So if the story is fragmented at all by anybody, that would be why.
And the disclaimer I am gonna post on each of these:
Remember people who read/vote , these are being split into two pieces. So this first round is just the first half of the comic and the next round will be the second half. So if the story is fragmented at all by anybody, that would be why.
One-Shot
Drawing Time:
2 weeks
Ended:
Jun 4th, 2011
Votes Cast:
15
Page Views:
1226
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I'm not sure if you need that hatching in the line-work, especially if you are adding color....It looks extra harsh in the shadows under ladies' necks, think it would look better without it.