Intro Story / Katherine D. Lamia

Intro Story / Katherine D. Lamia

Intro Story — Katherine D. Lamia


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anonymous
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# 9   Posted: Apr 24 2011, 08:03 AM
Excellent introduction; I can tell you are going to go far in void. Keep up the good work.

Geekpower
Artist
19 comments
# 8   Posted: Apr 19 2011, 06:04 PM
PyrasTerran: I love how colorful this comic is. As you improve I hope you keep that vibrant color around.

Concerning her figure, it's clear that she is busty, but once you've stripped her of clothing it feels like you're afraid to let her breasts loose. even nude they look like they're being pressed together by an invisible top. Don't be afraid to let them hang, sag, and part based on how she's standing and how her arms and shoulders are being positioned.

There is actually a small breast tutorial in the void university board, along with plenty of other tuts that should help you out.

Keep up the good work!
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hehe, thanks for the tip, i will check it out.

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1441 comments
# 7   Posted: Apr 19 2011, 02:33 PM
I love how colorful this comic is. As you improve I hope you keep that vibrant color around.

Concerning her figure, it's clear that she is busty, but once you've stripped her of clothing it feels like you're afraid to let her breasts loose. even nude they look like they're being pressed together by an invisible top. Don't be afraid to let them hang, sag, and part based on how she's standing and how her arms and shoulders are being positioned.

There is actually a small breast tutorial in the void university board, along with plenty of other tuts that should help you out.

Keep up the good work!

ironlion82
Artist
12 comments
# 6   Posted: Apr 18 2011, 02:08 PM
Love the art style. This looks like it's going to be mucho entertaining

Geekpower
Artist
19 comments
# 5   Posted: Apr 18 2011, 01:08 PM
Hey guys!, thanks for the comments, and as you can see I'm pretty noob at doing Comic Pages, all that you say kuro is true, and that's exactly why i came to void, so i can have feedback on my work, and i can improve more, i must say that this challenge of making comic pages will be fun, i will keep in mind all that you guys  point out for me, hopefully i will get it with more practice, and sorry about my bad english.

Kuro
Artist
581 comments
# 4   Posted: Apr 18 2011, 08:55 AM
Coloring's quite nice & the photo reffed background was quite good, taking a frame of reference & still having your own spin on it. I liked that. It's an ok start but there are some things you certainly need to focus on. Firstly, there are the classic hallmarks of some photoshop overkill in this. Filling backgrounds with flame textures, gradients everywhere & soft brushes happening. And point of personal preference, but something I'd like you to consider, when you use a digital type face for sound effects & a letter repeats looking pretty homogeneous, it really sticks out that you either didn't want to take the time or work into trying & really put your own spin on the letters. That happens in my old intro pages & it didn't look right then & has pissed me off since. Looking at that background ref, I can see you can draw, you've got the ability. I'd like you to utilize that more & not rely so heavily on the photoshop.

From a comic standpoint, your layouts are pretty boring. It's wide shot after wide shot. And sometimes they're scaling in & not reaching as far across the page which leaves you with huge gutters between panels, & not an optimized page. Seriously, if you consolidated your space here you could've easily fit things together here without necessarily having pasted pages together. You could've also paced the dialogue out better on that last page. There's novel lengthed balloons on that page. And the demon has like splits in the balloon, like you had intended to stagger it or something but lumped them altogether. Ideally, you don't want that much dialogue happening in one panel. Beyond that, careful with your actions & angles. You see her coughing a few drops of blood in one panel & then you don't see where this torrent of blood is coming from in the next. But because of the angle, quite honestly, the first time I saw that I was seriously schkieved because I thought she was suddenly lactating blood.

And lastly, it's cool. I get where you're coming from with the chicks. But it's a little ridiculous. Especially given the fact you drew two others with identical proportions. I'm not telling you to draw fat chicks, but there is such a thing as two waspy/hourglassy. At least throw some variance in there. And for god's sake, if they're not wearing anything on their feet draw some goddamn toes. The flipper baby thing is creepy.

Otherwise you've got potential! Get to battling.

Minteh
Artist
252 comments
# 3   Posted: Apr 18 2011, 07:00 AM
I would've figured the dress would suffocate her before the car hit her lol.

Joking aside, I like the character, a reluctant pawn of dark forces. I can see one or two things you might need to work on such as feet (page 2 there, it's like they're wearing flesh coloured boots).  I'd chalk up the clothing 'issue' more to a style thing. It's not my kinda thing, but you shouldn't suffer if it's yours, so I think I gave you some fair marks.

Good luck with the results and hope you have some good battles :]

Orion
Artist
211 comments
# 2   Posted: Apr 17 2011, 09:24 PM
Well, bullie. I am hook right off the bat. So many questions, so many possibilities and the art is something interesting as well.

I can't wait to see what happens next and who you are to fight.

Cracking Skulls
Artist
344 comments
# 1   Posted: Apr 17 2011, 09:16 PM
Hey! Loving this comic! This is a pretty good start for you. Hope to see some more soon!

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