Andre vs. K.G. Bochanovskyvich

Andre vs. K.G. Bochanovskyvich

Andre vs. K.G. Bochanovskyvich

50.8%
689 points
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by Reavz

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666 points
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Ten Dead Kings
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# 27   Posted: Feb 8 2011, 04:04 AM
Reavz lost with 666 points.



AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

      Edited Feb 8 2011,  04:14 AM by Ten Dead Kings

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# 26   Posted: Feb 2 2011, 12:42 PM
Rofl
The characters weren't fantastic enough for me to find them parody. They just seemed like regular, very slightly goofy people. If they had been over the top parody, it wouldn't have bothered me as much.

Reavz,
I had no idea this was vertical format at all. That would have made the story a lot easier on me.

E.W. Schneider
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# 25   Posted: Feb 1 2011, 09:56 PM
kuro: Not bad you two. I liked these.
Rofl, it was short, sweet, & funny. That was cool. But it would've been really cool if you went back & cleaned up the ink blotches with the word balloons for easier reading. Panels stacked on the left usually bug me, but the Ten Minutes Later caught my eye well enough & I honestly didn't even notice until later. Overall it was pretty snazzy & it's a shame when people (ie Mikey) can't tell when you're parodying things.
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Thanks. I'm gonna try to be a little more patient with this next comic (and employ a hair dryer.)


EDIT: MichealHarris, Andre really didn't talk that much to him. As for, KGB, he kind of has to escape. With a 3 page limit, I wanted as full of a story as possible. There's possibility of more of these things from me and Reavz, so I kind of need him to go free. If the crazy world of comics is too unrealistic, may I suggest reality instead?

      Edited Feb 1 2011,  10:10 PM by E.W. Schneider

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# 24   Posted: Feb 1 2011, 09:37 PM
Not bad you two. I liked these.
Rofl, it was short, sweet, & funny. That was cool. But it would've been really cool if you went back & cleaned up the ink blotches with the word balloons for easier reading. Panels stacked on the left usually bug me, but the Ten Minutes Later caught my eye well enough & I honestly didn't even notice until later. Overall it was pretty snazzy & it's a shame when people (ie Mikey) can't tell when you're parodying things.

Reavz, you got people befuddled over this, but that part was fine because it was fun & a departure. My thing though was the vertical strip format. Yes you put titles & things but on instinct, I started going left to right anyway, & it took me a minute to figure out what was going on. More indication would've helped. Or you know, given how computer monitors are, you could go sideways haha Also maybe A background would have been nice. Otherwise it was pretty tight.

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# 23   Posted: Feb 1 2011, 09:21 PM
O.M.F.G. want that kimono! I just about split something on that last panel.

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# 22   Posted: Feb 1 2011, 01:27 PM
MH: that was actually a kimono with the American flag and Obama stitched into it

michaelharris
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# 21   Posted: Feb 1 2011, 01:11 PM
Rofl
You never want to stack panels on the left side of the page. It breaks up the natural-shaped z movement of the eye. On page one my eye naturally went from the fourth panel to the midshot of KGB. Also the "ten minutes later" confused me There is a guy in shadow, then the next panel people are tied up and some guy is in the background. I thought the 2 guys were different people(they were colored differently) and it really doesn't make sense that it would take him ten minutes to beat up two guys then walk eight feet away and punch someone. Also, when introducing a character it is vital that we get a good introduction shot. I know we know who he is, because we read the title, but we only get a silhouette of Andre,  the a darkened back shot, then another back shot, THEN we get to figure out who is doing this stuff. That can work, if it is done for dramatic effect, but I ended up just wondering who this guy was.

Personally, I really hate the overused, "Hey I am the hero, but I will stand here for ten minutes talking to a dangerous and murderous villain, instead of taking him out, thusly allowing him to escape and continuing murdering innocent people." It isn't very realistic and I feel like it only works with spandex and/or hyper stylized stories in which the spectacle is more important than the people. I feel like these are too serious of characters to allow such a goofy trope. I mean the guy is a terrorist, not the Riddler trying rob a bank.

Reavz
I had no idea who these people are. That really put me off, I had to go back and read the title again. I was more put off by the generic black person speak as well as the one-note character of the person who I guess is Andre. She just seemed like a stuck up bitch, which is fine but she never really did anything but be a stereotype. I know there are people who talk like that, but this really felt like a white person watched a bunch of seventies movies and then created a character based on how he thought black people acted.If she was a background character, that would have been ok. As she is written now, I kept hoping she'd get shot.

I would have put the title panel on the left (on page one), As it is now, it looks like she shows up, talks some, then stands in from of wet dark blobs, then starts smoking with someone. The second page is really wordy, I would have liked less,  but part of that reason is I already didn't like the characters. I do think this conversation went on too long, but at the end it seems incredibly random that she has been in class for four minutes and gets expelled for no apparent reason. On page three, I have no idea where where got a flag on top of an Obama table, its kind of strange.

I guess this was supposed to be funny, but it just didn't flow well. Maybe if you did more pages, as it is now it just doesn't make any sense.


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# 20   Posted: Jan 31 2011, 08:05 PM
Great entries. Less is more.

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# 19   Posted: Jan 31 2011, 04:09 PM
Eep: Reavz in the page that had 2 yonkoma's I didn't realize it in my first read through and was totally lost (as in I was reading it left to right each row when it shoulda been up to down each column). In the future a bigger space inbetween them, or just separating by page should solve this! :)

funny that I didn't get it right off the bat when I should have, as I made a whole BB of yonkoma's myself... XD

ROFLQU: I think the 1st page was the funniest for sure. My only gripe is that the flava didn't carry over into the next two pages as much and they both seemed kinda just 'there'.

Both were funny, though I felt rofl's was very funny in a single concentrated page and Reavz had kinda funny spread out.

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# 18   Posted: Jan 31 2011, 03:52 PM
GOD DAMN IT ROFLQU: What's confusing?
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The confusing part, of course.

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# 17   Posted: Jan 31 2011, 03:52 PM
It wasn't confusing.  Though I guess it requires the reader to know a bit about comics from both sides of the pacific.  Reavz's was a yonkoma with the characters gender bendered.  And Rofl's was a straightforward superhero story more akin to some of those old marvel strips.  It reminded me very much of the hostess fruit pie ads and I half expected to see something like that at the end.  I'm guessing both artists agreed to a three page maximum and worked it out around that limit.  It's nice, it's very East vs. West comicking.

E.W. Schneider
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# 16   Posted: Jan 31 2011, 03:38 PM
What's confusing?

EDIT: Also, thanks a bunch.

      Edited Jan 31 2011,  03:40 PM by E.W. Schneider

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# 15   Posted: Jan 31 2011, 03:10 PM
RoflQu- Awesomeness!


Reavs:
Good quality  and humor!, but

The_BenT_One: I'm confused.
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      Edited Jan 31 2011,  03:10 PM by Horton_187

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# 14   Posted: Jan 31 2011, 03:10 PM
I am also confused. :|
But the art was pretty?

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I thought Reavz's was more interesting, even though i had no idea what was going on...which may have been what made it more interesting to me! But i love the expressions of the characters in RoflQu's comic; amusing as hell.

      Edited Jan 31 2011,  03:12 PM by InkyBrain

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# 13   Posted: Jan 31 2011, 03:07 PM
RoflQu, - awesome. Do more like this dude! Its nice seeing you finish these comics too bro : D.
Reavz - it made me laugh a lot hahaha. The last page in particular was pretty awesome.

Its hard to vote on this fight, they're both so different in tone, you both did good!

The Bent One
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# 12   Posted: Jan 31 2011, 02:34 PM
I'm confused.

E.W. Schneider
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# 11   Posted: Jan 31 2011, 05:11 AM
I wasn't too happy with my black colored pencil here. I think I'm going to do tones next time. Otherwise, I liked a lot of my anatomy and faces here, thanks a ton for the little vacation, Reavz.

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# 10   Posted: Jan 24 2011, 02:26 PM
I like this.

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# 9   Posted: Jan 24 2011, 01:13 PM
WOOOOOO

Ten Dead Kings
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# 8   Posted: Jan 24 2011, 12:44 AM
A battle of MANLY AURAS.

E.W. Schneider
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# 7   Posted: Jan 23 2011, 07:59 PM
Mrnoitaull: Nope, not gettin my hopes up.
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That's a good idea.

Darius Corry
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# 6   Posted: Jan 23 2011, 07:50 PM
Nope, not gettin my hopes up.

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# 5   Posted: Jan 23 2011, 07:42 PM
this looks koolio

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# 4   Posted: Jan 23 2011, 05:41 PM
From Russia with GUNS!

Can't wait to see this one. :)

Charlie
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# 3   Posted: Jan 23 2011, 05:40 PM
YAY ITS KGB...

And *sigh* I -GUESS- ROFLQU'S CHARACTER TOO. :P

Cracking Skulls
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# 2   Posted: Jan 23 2011, 05:36 PM
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYY

E.W. Schneider
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# 1   Posted: Jan 23 2011, 05:34 PM
LET IT WHIP

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Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Feb 7th, 2011
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Winner: E.W. Schneider
 

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