Sebastian Rockwell vs. Clarke, Christopher
Critiques & Comments
# 8
Posted:
Feb 13 2011, 09:42 PM
Thanks guys for the comments. I was really trying to make the backgrounds and fill areas cause of the butchering from my last battle. But it only gets better from here. Appreciate it.
# 7
Posted:
Feb 13 2011, 12:10 PM
Seeker: Was your character in this? I assume you didn't finish. You had some interesting angles and others that really weren't clear enough. The first page was confusing and the impact of the car hitting the plane or whatever wasn't good. It was like it happened off of the page. You should show that to the reader better. I liked the angle that had Clarke grabbing the car though.
Fox: The first thing I want to tell you is to add some contrast. I think your character is cool and your line art is pretty good, but everything blends together because everything is white. Throw some black spots in there to help your characters stand out a bit. Throw some black spots on your characters to help break up their designs themselves too. Like Clarke's hair and and either his shirt or jacket or parts of his jacket should have been black. Just do something to add some more depth to your art because right now everything is kind of flat.
Fox: The first thing I want to tell you is to add some contrast. I think your character is cool and your line art is pretty good, but everything blends together because everything is white. Throw some black spots in there to help your characters stand out a bit. Throw some black spots on your characters to help break up their designs themselves too. Like Clarke's hair and and either his shirt or jacket or parts of his jacket should have been black. Just do something to add some more depth to your art because right now everything is kind of flat.
# 6
Posted:
Feb 13 2011, 11:23 AM
seek, were both characters even present in this? it was very hard to tell what was happening in that first page. And the reaction to the car being destroyed didn't seem like a realistic one but I couldn't tell if it just ended or if there was supposed to be more. Anyway, all we're presented with here is an event of a car getting thrown, & not a story.
fox, the biggest problem with this seemed the text in that there wasn't any proof reading going on here & the placement of the balloons (which were larger than need be) didn't seem to be done as you were planning this out. Or if you had, you didn't execute it right. You were covering too much art & in the wrong places, or too close to the subject of the panel. Or you were crossing things & tripping over yourself. Panel better, & don't be afraid of erring on the side of being a little smaller than too big when it's your art that's being covered. also, your drawing style's nice so it's ugly when you suddenly have these blatant photoshop effects breaking it up. don't be lazy. Draw the effect. Or write out the sound effect. If you're not able to blend the photoshop in well enough with your pencil work you should just avoid it & do it the old fashioned way.
fox, the biggest problem with this seemed the text in that there wasn't any proof reading going on here & the placement of the balloons (which were larger than need be) didn't seem to be done as you were planning this out. Or if you had, you didn't execute it right. You were covering too much art & in the wrong places, or too close to the subject of the panel. Or you were crossing things & tripping over yourself. Panel better, & don't be afraid of erring on the side of being a little smaller than too big when it's your art that's being covered. also, your drawing style's nice so it's ugly when you suddenly have these blatant photoshop effects breaking it up. don't be lazy. Draw the effect. Or write out the sound effect. If you're not able to blend the photoshop in well enough with your pencil work you should just avoid it & do it the old fashioned way.
# 5
Posted:
Feb 13 2011, 07:28 AM
Good job guys... I like the flow of action on both stories.....proportion wise not bad... Try to stay consistent...
Perspective....ah well...... Go do some reading... At least on the one point perspective... And look up some buildings on google or something....give them some life.
Perspective....ah well...... Go do some reading... At least on the one point perspective... And look up some buildings on google or something....give them some life.
# 4
Posted:
Feb 10 2011, 08:30 AM
I gotta find out who the first person to vote is. They are like my biggest fan
# 3
Posted:
Feb 9 2011, 11:05 PM
Interesting. I felt like Fox had the more complete story, but on the other hand I preferred the action of Seeker's tale. Both were entertaining though and that's always great to see. I'll sleep on it.
# 2
Posted:
Feb 9 2011, 01:20 PM
Uploaded, was fun. Can't wait to see yours Seek.
# 1
Posted:
Jan 24 2011, 10:59 AM
Very good to see you battling again, Twilight. I can't wait to see how you handle this. Good luck to you as well, Fox.
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
3 weeks
Ended:
Feb 16th, 2011
Votes Cast:
20
Page Views:
1725
Winner:
Fox24
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