Chia-Hui vs. Will

Chia-Hui vs. Will

Chia-Hui vs. Will

by carlito

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288 points
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RadicalRollercoaster
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7 comments
# 21   Posted: Jan 10 2011, 09:56 PM
Thanks for the great first battle Carlito, I really liked your side of it, the way you drew Will was pretty cool and the colors were great.
And thanks for all critiques again everyone, I know exactly what I need to work on for the next battle now.

Darius Corry
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427 comments
# 20   Posted: Jan 7 2011, 06:55 PM
PS by "get better" I mean " get well"... just so yeah..

Darius Corry
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427 comments
# 19   Posted: Jan 7 2011, 06:46 PM
Carlito- You never cease to maintain your signature pacing and paneling. My only gruff is it being incomplete which you already explained so keep em coming an get better.

Radical- def a different approach here in Void. The chipper character can never really get old on the site. I will say to keep it as full and consistent as the first page and you shouldn't have too much of an issue.

carlito
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# 18   Posted: Jan 7 2011, 10:54 AM
Thanks for the fight Will. Yours was cute, sorry mine was open ended. I had more planned, but was working on the Patent fight & this one at the same time and got sick.

Fred v2.0.1
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# 17   Posted: Jan 6 2011, 06:10 PM
I gotta say, I love the extreme simplicity of your comic, carlito. It's nice and suspenseful and funny in nine panels... kudos.

Radical, very good humour. Kinda sad and cute... sometimes, I'd like to know what it's like to be innocent like little Will.
Manly on, my friend!

Darius Corry
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# 16   Posted: Jan 4 2011, 09:13 PM
Carlito your short and simple works for me. Like if you kept the continuity, you could def publish a book of ur battles ..which I would buy. I would only say is include the opponent a little more.

Penryn88
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# 15   Posted: Jan 4 2011, 06:39 PM
Carlito - I think the Swan thing is a reference to Zeus, since Zeus was known to masquerade as a swan and sleep with chicks. I'm not sure if Lau and Chia are sons of Zeus but that's what it sounds like. http://entervoid.com/view.php?id=2672&side=1&iid=01 . That may also explain why Will sees the significance of the swan, since Zeus is mythical/mystical and Will is a Fairy which is also mythical/mystical. As far as the art goes, I liked the 1st and 3rd page the most, the 2nd had some bad anatomy and strange color choices. I liked your story but i think its cause i caught the reference, I can see how others can be confused tho. I am interested in the next part.

RRC- You had a really charming story there, a very solid entry for your first go on Void. I agree that you may be a bit too loose though. I like your style, don't get me wrong. I just think you you could tighten it up a bit more. I think for the most part your figure work is fine, its really your backgrounds that need work. They look too sloppy, don't be afraid to use a ruler it you need too, just stay away from a Line-tool of any kind.

Good work guys!

Releasethebears
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# 14   Posted: Jan 4 2011, 05:51 PM
Carlito: I liked the usage of color and the story (from what I got was neat) biggest thing for me was the swan looks like it's inside the building rather then reflecting off of the window in page 2. aside from that there were some small anatomy issues but overall decently entertaining

Radical: I'm personally a huge fan of the loose art style that you have here but like Pyras said be careful because at times it can look rushed (particularly in some of the shots of the angsty youngsters) the story was silly and fun and i adore the almost moronic inocense that Will has in the situation.

well done to both of you and keep them coming

RadicalRollercoaster
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# 13   Posted: Jan 4 2011, 04:21 PM
Thanks for the critiques so far everyone, they are really insightful and it's nice to know that people thought the story was actually funny. I was beyond scared that I had totally belly flopped that part but from the comments so far it seems I did a good job.
And to Pyras, and anyone else confused, Will CAN talk to animals so I chose the actual word Waffle. It was originally going to be Penis, but I thought it was way too early in the game to start in with the dick jokes.
Anyways I thought I'd just say that and I can't wait to see what everyone else has to say.

PyrasTerran
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1413 comments
# 12   Posted: Jan 4 2011, 01:54 PM
Well aside from the swan thing:

Carlito: this is a better take on a really short comic, and with my assumptions on the significance of the swan, is at least an important enough beat for your character. The colors worked well too I think, though chia came off a bit more yellow than I'd think is necessary

Radical: you have a great sense of humor and you don't refrain from flexing it, great job with the writing. The loose art style I interesting to watch, though you should be careful because there's a very thin line between looking loose and looking rushed and some of the panels ended up looking like the latter. Also, what was it he wrote in the last panel? I would have thought he'd write something like 'baa' but what is 'wath'?

Orion
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# 11   Posted: Jan 3 2011, 09:17 PM
Well my take is that it is a representation of dominion as the black swan is a royal symbol.

The coming of the swan is a signal of Chu's own returning dominion over his life and identity that Lau has obviously taken.

Or it could be alluding to transformation ala The Swan Princess (the fairy tail, not the movie) of Chu transforming from his state of coma to life. a marker that shall bring change and transformation.

....


or I have no idea. Any hints Carlito?

PyrasTerran
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1413 comments
# 10   Posted: Jan 3 2011, 08:52 PM
Forgive my ignorance, what's this swan business? :(

Fox24
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215 comments
# 9   Posted: Jan 3 2011, 08:08 PM
hey carlito things got way out of hand and feelings got involved and I wanted to apologize and squash the beef. If you still don't like me then hey no harsh feelings from me. Happy new years man, hope we can go through another battle and make this an annual thing every christmas.

So I voted in favor of carlito Your comic was short, which made it hard to say I liked it better but the colors brought it out and gave drama, good thought

Radical, just too loose for my taste, I really wanted to read but I was looking at the crazy art more. SO I preferred carlito more. And the end

Charlie
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# 8   Posted: Jan 3 2011, 07:26 PM
Carlito - Not sure if I was really feeling the colours, or this comic in general. Your opponent just sort of felt...there. I was confused, he saw the swan but what significance did it hold for him? You made it clear as to why Chia would respond to it (Lau) but didn't follow up on why Will would have noticed it / be intrigued by it. This more or less seemed to be the start of a comic with no resolution, like maybe you ran out of time? I also just noticed as of writing this that you posted 'To Be Continued' in the comments below which I guess furthers my belief that you probably just ran out of time.

Logan - Nice first battle dude, I thought it was pretty hilarious and didn't mind the fact that Chia never actually made an appearance since there was a buttload of Chia battles that just had the sheep in it before, plus it doesn't really mess up anything concerning Carlito's story as far as I can tell so no harm there. I thought some of the art looked a tad bit rushed as the comic went on, but your character is rather funny. I have a character who also isn't from Earth and the whole not knowing everything about the planet is fun. Anyway, nice job dude and I hope to see more battles from you soon!

RadicalRollercoaster
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# 7   Posted: Jan 3 2011, 07:05 PM
Uploaded!
Hehe wow, I'm nervous. Well I hope everyone likes it and good luck to you, Carlito, I can't wait to see your side of the battle.

The Bent One
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564 comments
# 6   Posted: Jan 3 2011, 08:25 AM
Good luck dude, show us some good comics!

      Edited Jan 3 2011,  08:25 AM by The Bent One

carlito
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375 comments
# 5   Posted: Jan 3 2011, 08:20 AM
UPLOADED.
To be continued...

alberto311
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349 comments
# 4   Posted: Dec 22 2010, 06:22 AM
Penryn88: Fighting two at once Carlito?! Who do you think you are? Mister Kent!?! good luck guys
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Chia Hui has a twin.... Which one is which.

ThreeFatesAngel
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# 3   Posted: Dec 21 2010, 08:57 PM
FAIRIES!!! 8D

Penryn88
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76 comments
# 2   Posted: Dec 15 2010, 12:12 PM
Fighting two at once Carlito?! Who do you think you are? Mister Kent!?! good luck guys

E.W. Schneider
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1055 comments
# 1   Posted: Dec 13 2010, 11:54 PM
Hey, good luck to you Radical! I fully expect some ropes shown, Carlito.

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Drawing Time: 2 weeks
Ended: Jan 10th, 2011
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Winner: RadicalRollercoaster
 

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