Patent Hernandez vs. Cherry

Patent Hernandez vs. Cherry

Patent Hernandez vs. Cherry

by Fox24

41.8%
409 points
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by Reavz

58.2%
569 points
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E.W. Schneider
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1055 comments
# 20   Posted: Dec 3 2010, 11:37 PM
Fox24: Hey, welcome back, good to see you battling again, man. It was nice to see a short little fun story.

The quality here felt really weak compared to your last fight. I dunno if you had something going on or if you just wanted to do these short 4 pages, but it felt like you could have pushed yourself more on this. Your blacks feel like they suffered a bit here, either from a scanner that really drains it or in an attempt to remove all the pencil lines via photoshop.

The single bright red feels kind of obnoxious against the rest of the world, which is kind of sketchy. I think you should have focused on utilizing stronger blacks for this comic, as opposed to using that single solitary red. Blacks would have really improved your entire world if you had used them instead of that red.

I thought the way you handled Cherry was kind of funny, but also sort of a way to do this comic without having any actual interaction between Patent and Cherry. I would have rather seen interaction between the two, but that's not too big of a deal for me.

Your panels need some work. From the way it looks, you draw a panel, scan it and arrange them on the computer later. Actually plan out your pages and draw them. You can make the panel lines later on the computer (I know Zsabreuser does that all the time.) instead of arranging them, because you have the gutterspace haphazardly arranged and your comic is suffering as a result.

Don't write Ass as A$$. It's not censoring anything, it just looks annoying.

It's good to see you in the ring again, I hope your next fights will be of stronger quality than this, since I know you're capable of some good stuff.

Reavz: It's terrific seeing you keep on battling. This comic was even better than your last, as a result of good pacing and your flashback interacting and having a point with the narrative.

Your art looks great, as always. I absolutely loved the change you had to the past colors, that was a good move and it really strengthened the flashback by making the colors more muted.

I really think you should try shading next time. Perhaps you like flats, but your Childhood Snapshots Art Jam entry had some serious boost in quality from just that little bit of shading I felt. Maybe next time try some blacks and see if they could help boost the quality of your work a bit too.

Your word bubbles got a bit cluttered here. Make sure you're careful about that, because shoving it in everywhere could really wreck with the overall aesthetics of the comic.

Your story was real good, but I hope this doesn't become formulaic for you, since this is such a good character it would be a shame to keep on doing the same ideas over and over.

You're quickly becoming one of my favorite new people, I hope whatever you do next will be just as good! Great job.

Sofa King
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15 comments
# 19   Posted: Dec 2 2010, 06:52 AM
wow both comics were surprisingly entertaining
 
Fox24
 i enjoyed your work here for its randomly & hilarious story. but your page layout wasn't as good as your past work? for instance page 3 the last panel should have been "cherry on top of the cop"  then made "the Hernandez weapon search" its own page. but all aside i still cant wait to see your next fight  

Reavz
you have a very great very consistent style which i love but it makes your comic lack contrast,i believe gradient backgrounds would help more than adding detail. because your work has almost no unnecessary lines, which by the way i also love lol.



      Edited Dec 2 2010,  08:03 AM by Sofa King

Elio
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48 comments
# 18   Posted: Nov 29 2010, 06:42 PM
Fox24, your panels are all over the place and seemed uncomfortable. Take time to lay out the entire pages and create a better flow. Also the middle of page three is confusing with bubbles all over.

Reavz, very cool, nice clean traditional manga inspired work. Would love to see more detailed backgrounds. Your word bubbles also get a little wild, watch it mister.

Releasethebears
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14 comments
# 17   Posted: Nov 27 2010, 11:18 AM
Reavz, your art is stunning and the story and dialog are solid, the flashbacks are a bit confusing at first but I also think that's part of the characters charm (aside from his general charm) In my short time on this site so far Cherry has very quickly become one of my favorite characters to watch and I can't wait to see more

Qyzex
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670 comments
# 16   Posted: Nov 27 2010, 11:15 AM
We will battle, Reavz. WE WILL BATTLE!


Good job to both of you. I enjoyed this one quite a bit :3

The Bent One
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564 comments
# 15   Posted: Nov 27 2010, 06:45 AM
I would never have guessed it, but Cherry is now one of my favorite characters here on the site. The story is so well written, and the art is charmingly good.

Wolcik
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492 comments
# 14   Posted: Nov 26 2010, 12:31 PM
Fox24:
It somehow breaks descripton of a female looking boy to have a man's body :/

Reavz:
I'm astonished... it's awesome XD


Will try to give proper critique later :P

PyrasTerran
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1413 comments
# 13   Posted: Nov 26 2010, 10:04 AM
All cards on the table, Reavz, your comics have been one of the consistently most engaging, if not #1 most engaging pages I have ever read on this site. Everything is chosen with such craft, the shots and composition, the script and dialogue or lack thereof, each comic has been an isolated episode of amazing to me, this is a comic I would purchase from the bookstore or watch an adaptation of.

I look forward to the next match

Fox24
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215 comments
# 12   Posted: Nov 26 2010, 09:34 AM
I enjoyed the scenery in your comic Reavz, it's really nice to see focus on the surroundings and the characters, Cool stuff.

Fox24
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215 comments
# 11   Posted: Nov 26 2010, 08:53 AM
ANNNNNNNNND DONE! Can't wait for all the critiques, was on illustrator and photoshop like a rookie!!

Reavz
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13 comments
# 10   Posted: Nov 13 2010, 09:04 AM
Fox24: Don't stress it man, if you are having issues with the work then don't push it, I'll agree to let this one go. Just was a fun battle
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No no, no reason to cut it yet! Let's push this till the end, bro!

Fox24
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215 comments
# 9   Posted: Nov 12 2010, 09:26 PM
Don't stress it man, if you are having issues with the work then don't push it, I'll agree to let this one go. Just was a fun battle

Reavz
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13 comments
# 8   Posted: Nov 12 2010, 08:27 AM
Fox24: Keep me updated so I know if this should be shut down for the time being.
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RoflQu: So, I just got a message from Reavz that he's in the hospital right now. Nothing life-threatening, just some diagnosis and observation. However, I don't know how long this will be or if he wanted this fight canceled for the time being until he's 'better'.
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Hey guys, sorry for worrying you. I'm back home now. I don't know if I'll be called to the hospital again soon, but I'm still gonna try to finish this comic!

Fox24
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# 7   Posted: Nov 12 2010, 06:52 AM
Keep me updated so I know if this should be shut down for the time being.

E.W. Schneider
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1055 comments
# 6   Posted: Nov 12 2010, 02:59 AM
So, I just got a message from Reavz that he's in the hospital right now. Nothing life-threatening, just some diagnosis and observation. However, I don't know how long this will be or if he wanted this fight canceled for the time being until he's 'better'.

Cracking Skulls
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344 comments
# 5   Posted: Nov 8 2010, 02:31 PM
Nice match up! Glad to see you're back, fox. Good luck, you two.

Darius Corry
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427 comments
# 4   Posted: Nov 6 2010, 03:35 PM
not like that since your character is a guy.
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Chris wins for that one...got a good chuckle

Angie
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# 3   Posted: Nov 6 2010, 03:03 PM
Happy to see you back Fox! Also glad to see you doing another battle so soon Reavz, I really loved your first comic

Fox24
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215 comments
# 2   Posted: Nov 6 2010, 10:10 AM
Had to dust off the pencils, Seems like it would be fun no matter the outcome. Reavz does great work and would love to see his work about P. So Let's get it on.... not like that since your character is a guy.

E.W. Schneider
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1055 comments
# 1   Posted: Nov 6 2010, 04:06 AM
Wow! One battle right after the other, huh, Reavz?

It's great to see you back in the ring again as well Fox24. Good luck to the both of you!

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 3 weeks
Ended: Dec 3rd, 2010
Votes Cast: 23
Page Views: 1489
Winner: Reavz
 

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