Invitational Tournament 2010: Semifinals / Ridley von Clayborne vs. Sketchy

Invitational Tournament 2010: Semifinals — Ridley von Clayborne vs. Sketchy

by Runic

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Runic
Artist
52 comments
# 25   Posted: Sep 20 2010, 06:58 AM
Bummer. Congrats Dan and good luck!

Runic
Artist
52 comments
# 24   Posted: Sep 19 2010, 07:45 AM
Oooo! Intrigue!

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 23   Posted: Sep 19 2010, 07:38 AM
Yes, in the instance there is a perfect 50/50 tie both will move onto the next round.

beardedMenace
Artist
55 comments
# 22   Posted: Sep 19 2010, 05:26 AM
@angie - True enough.  I think I leaned too much on the demon side of the character, as well as wanting somewhat of a menacing figure.  Kind of the same way Ashley Hart was kind of stiff, her character was more grounded in reality, so I tried to use less exaggeration.  Here I But jes, with practice this is something I will figure out.

Charlie
Artist
731 comments
# 21   Posted: Sep 18 2010, 11:59 PM
Well if that was the case I think it would probably be split into two battles.

Shojin
Artist
92 comments
# 20   Posted: Sep 18 2010, 10:38 PM
Runic - Ridley has always been a fun character.  Though it was a bit quick, I didn't mind it all that much.  Nice use of Sketchy's skills.  I look forward to seeing what exactly happened to Cheyan.  Loved the ending to the comic. XD

Dan - I like how you incorporated Ridley's story line into your comic.  I look forward to seeing the conclusion to this. The overall quality of your work keeps increasing as we go along.  We all need to work on backgrounds and stuff so I won't hark on that.  I look forward to seeing what you'll do next.



Just out of curiosity since this match up is so close now.  What happens in a tournament situation if it does end up 50/50 at the end of the voting period?  Do they both get tossed into the finals and it becomes a 4-way?  I'm wondering if a situation like that has ever cropped up before.

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 19   Posted: Sep 18 2010, 08:32 PM
haha oh god, I have a hard time with females too so I'm in the same boat as you, but I do know some things that should help. There's of course the obvious draw more of them so you'll get better. Well the one thing specifically that I noticed was was her nose was kind of ginormous and her face was more angular which typically makes for a more masculine character. If you were drawing a female that was designed to be a little more masculine it'd work, but most ladies fair better with a more soft and curved line. It probably would have also helped to tone down how muscular she was since she's pretty buff. While yes, females can be muscular too, it's kind of a character by character basis and Ridley didn't really strike me as a weight lifter or something.

beardedMenace
Artist
55 comments
# 18   Posted: Sep 18 2010, 12:36 PM
Runic - Kudos for having a full, colored comic!  Resolved quickly?  Sure, but we're only seeing part of the story.  Beats my cocktease of an "ending".  Whether you move on or not (it's a close match!), you better s'plain what's what.  And hey, Sketchy got some lady action, I'm sure he appreciates that.
Color and shading were nice, but the lines felt somewhat inconsistent.  Ridley looked pretty nice throughout, but I feel Cheyan and Sketchy looked a bit wonky now and then.  Slow it down a little bit and focus a little more on the structure and proportion of your characters.

@Cherubas/Jim Valid - Yeah, apparently I can manage busy city shots, but simple interiors elude me.  I'll topple the BG Demon one of these days, I swear!

@angie - Any similarity to an actual DBZ ep/movie is purely coincidental, I watched DBZ for about a month, only catching parts of the Majin-Boo stuff, so my experience ends there.  The whole "Find out next time" is really the only thing that stuck with me, as you can tell.   The female face does elude me, I admit.  I'll chalk it up to having 0 female characters in my library.  I shall do my best to level those lady drawing skills.  Any tips?

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 17   Posted: Sep 14 2010, 06:39 PM
Runic-the coloring was a lot better this time around, I definitely like this look a lot more over the more painterly stuff you were doing. Things felt a lot cleaner and polished on this comic. I do have to agree that the conflict was resolved rather quickly and abruptly. One thing that may have helped a lot was having her and Sketchy almost get to her and have the story finish in your next comic. Since I know you're lacking time in a 1 week battle it'd have worked better to carry the story over to one more comic. I don't think that you should be disappointed in your entry, you did well. You just have to learn from your mistakes and move forward since Void is for learning.

bearededmenace-I'll start off by saying that I wasn't disappointed in the lack of pages. As a fellow page count whore I know how much that shit wears on you so I think it's totally fine to cut down the amount of pages you use. Plus more pages does not always equal a better comic. I was amused that the whole comic felt like that one Dragonball Z movie where Android 18 fights Mr.Satan in the tournament and was glad to see it wasn't my imagination since you finished the comic up with the whole DBZ reference. I know I got on you for your women in the second round i believe and the problem is still kind of evident here. Like Ridley doesn't feel stiff but it looked like you weren't quite sure how to draw her face. Like with your male characters it looks like you're never afraid to go cartoony with them but with your female faces it feels like you're trying to be cartoony but you're not comfortable enough to go all out.

Runic
Artist
52 comments
# 16   Posted: Sep 14 2010, 10:32 AM
Thanks guys!
The storyline is not resolved yet. I still have things in mind. Still have one round left.
But now I am disappointed at my entry after reading what you guys said. D: I agree with you.
Oh well.

JimValid
Artist
43 comments
# 15   Posted: Sep 14 2010, 01:19 AM
Runic:
 I'm a bit disappointed at the way the whole "Cheyan is missing" storyline has been resolved. I also felt that her reaction to Sketchy's proposal of finding Cheyan was a little un-enthusiastic; especially considering that shed been so angsty about Cheyan being missing throughout the entire storyline. The other thing that bothers me is, ultimately, Ridley didn't really do anything herself to find her. Art-wise, i also felt that this comic was a bit flat compared to your previous works. It was an entertaining entry, but overall i'm a bit disappointed. Still, this leaves me quite eager to see what you are capable of accomplishing in a larger time frame. One week to make a comic isn't much time.

BeardedMenace:
As usual, very entertaining. A bit disappointed in the length of this one, but the idea being proposed here with the inclusion of Runic's "Where is Cheyan?" story, is interesting. Art-wise, there is nothing i could really say that i haven't said before of your art. It's clean, it's expressive and it's amazing you can continually churn out work of that quality. If i am to complain about anything to do with your art this time around, it would be that your backgrounds are a bit lacking this time.

Cherubas
Artist
175 comments
# 14   Posted: Sep 13 2010, 10:05 PM
RUNIC: All those pages, and in color, I can tell you realized Dan's no joke and you gotta pull out all the stops. Lulz. I enjoyed the tale. It was entertaining. I do feel that the rescuing of Cheyan was resolved really fast, which is a shame because the rest of the comic did a good job of making me care about the character and such. At the same time, I realize that the amount of story you managed to produce is pretty good for a week, so I won't fault you for that. At times Sketchy seems to have no arm bones, like a bendy toy. I think he would have been better consistently having elbow joints. For what SEEMS like such a deceptively simple character design, it's surprisingly difficult to make a Dan-level drawing of Sketchy, so you have my empathy there. Overall, good stuff, entertaining, colored, good backgrounds, just watch your pacing. No one likes it when you really get going and suddenly there's an all-too-brief climax with very little said afterward. It just leaves you feeling dirty and ashamed.

DAN: ...Oh Dan... Your art, as always, is very clean and fun to look at. And I make... Page 2, Frame 3 of your Boek vs Sketchy comic, I make that face just about every time I see Boek drawn by you. It's a bit of a personal honor for me to see Boek in this comic, hahah. Oddly enough, in the first draft of my comic for our battle it was Sketchy who explained the birds and the bees to Boek, to explain that he'd grow out of his superhero phase but Boek was going to be too terrified by the phrase "your balls will drop" to pay attention to the rest. End of Boek comments.

The size was a little disappointing. (Anyone thinking "that's what she said" please shut your head in a car door now) It might be a bit selfish, but I like Sketchy tales to be lengthy, fun-filled, Owen-Wilson-Free adventures. This felt more like a um... Thing that's shorter than an adventure. I understand you were busy though, so I won't harp on that. There could have been a lot more background dressing up. Page 4 in particular though the ropes seem to warp in and out of existence throughout the comic. Yes, backgrounds are my own biggest weakness and I see the irony in giving background criticism to anyone else, but that just makes me an expert on what NOT to do in backgrounds, right? Also... "Goober"? I... Oh Dan...

Anyway, really good job you two. I was thoroughly entertained. It looks like this one will be pretty close. Good luck to both of you! Keep up the great work!

Fred
Artist
550 comments
# 13   Posted: Sep 13 2010, 03:53 PM
Runic; yay! Happy ending! Her conflict seems to be resolved pretty fast in the overall, but on the other hand, its a good use of sketchy's possibilities. Good job!

Dan, even with half a story you're hilarious. Perticularly liked Boek's line and the way you made Ridley lean forward when she stands to balance her wings, a detail not everyone would think about.

Runic
Artist
52 comments
# 12   Posted: Sep 13 2010, 09:07 AM
Some after thoughts!
Dan! I love your lines/style/and expressions! It's a shame it was only half of your story and I can't WAIT to see the other half! The whole ring-side match up was a great idea and you even fit in Cheyan to give Ridley a real reason of being there. It works well. = D
I admit I was shocked to learn that you were my opponent. But I just got to work immediately afterwards and had so much fun drawing Sketchy!
Unfortunately, I cannot portray him as well as you can! BUT I TRIED! ;D

In regards to my pages. Where Cheyan was will be addressed next time if I make it to the final round. (If I don't, perhaps a beyond battle is in order.)

Really though. One week to do all of those pages was quite the challenge. I hope I could step it up next time!

Runic
Artist
52 comments
# 11   Posted: Sep 13 2010, 07:16 AM
BAHAHAHA! Oh Dan. I love you.

beardedMenace
Artist
55 comments
# 10   Posted: Sep 12 2010, 06:52 PM
Pages uploaded and thumbs sent.  Only half the story this week, sorry folks.  All time and energy could afford me this week.  Please to enjoy anyway!

Runic
Artist
52 comments
# 9   Posted: Sep 12 2010, 10:28 AM
My pages have been successfully uploaded! Now to send off my thumbnails! = D

beardedMenace
Artist
55 comments
# 8   Posted: Sep 8 2010, 06:09 PM
William_Duel: Don't fuck up.
Quote


Words of wisdom.  Thank you Will.

And Rubes!  Giving away my secrets?!  I trusted you!!

William_Duel
Community Manager
943 comments
# 7   Posted: Sep 8 2010, 04:17 PM
Don't fuck up.

Cherubas
Artist
175 comments
# 6   Posted: Sep 8 2010, 04:16 PM
Heaven help us all...

Runic
Artist
52 comments
# 5   Posted: Sep 8 2010, 03:36 PM
What if I miss?!

Cherubas
Artist
175 comments
# 4   Posted: Sep 8 2010, 03:33 PM
Watch out, Runic, Dan has a mean left hook. The trick is to wait for his pants to fall down and then punch him in the belly button for the instant KO.

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 3   Posted: Sep 6 2010, 07:02 PM
awesome matchup! good luck!

DrasticFantastic
Artist
165 comments
# 2   Posted: Sep 6 2010, 09:03 AM
Oh yeeeeeeeeeeeees....

Runic
Artist
52 comments
# 1   Posted: Sep 6 2010, 08:18 AM
wat
FFFFFFFFFF! @_@
Holy crow!

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Tournament Match
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Sep 19th, 2010
Votes Cast: 38
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Winner: beardedMenace
 

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