Invitational Tournament 2010: Round 1 / Auvre vs. Ridley von Clayborne
Critiques & Comments
# 25
Posted:
Aug 9 2010, 02:03 AM
Wow. Look at how close this ended. Good show by both of you.
# 24
Posted:
Aug 7 2010, 02:26 PM
I really liked both comics.
RaraHoWa: Your comic was tasty to the eyes, and flowed well. Plus, great boobs:)
Runic:Great variety in panels and perspective. Also the story was pretty good.
I have to hand it to both of you, for the short time to complete these you whooped ass in the digital painting area.
RaraHoWa: Your comic was tasty to the eyes, and flowed well. Plus, great boobs:)
Runic:Great variety in panels and perspective. Also the story was pretty good.
I have to hand it to both of you, for the short time to complete these you whooped ass in the digital painting area.
# 23
Posted:
Aug 7 2010, 08:17 AM
I don't think Runic's bgs were weak at all. You don't need bg details going on in every single panel. Sometimes you need that kind of visual rest on the eyes. Sometimes cramming to much detail into every panel detracts from simple emotional panels. Overall I think Runic's comic was an easier read because of this. Rara tried to cram a few too many elements onto the pages which made eye flow too chaotic in some instances.
# 22
Posted:
Aug 6 2010, 08:27 AM
Thanks for the comments.
I know the backgrounds were weak but [excuse excuse excuses]
I'll work on them next time. As well as improving my character.
I know the backgrounds were weak but [excuse excuse excuses]
I'll work on them next time. As well as improving my character.
# 21
Posted:
Aug 3 2010, 11:45 PM
It's 50/50! Hoshit!
# 20
Posted:
Aug 3 2010, 09:13 AM
Oh god, Rara, Auvre's face in the last panel of your comic was PRICELESS. Really nice art on both ends of this competition, it's gonna be a close match.
# 19
Posted:
Aug 2 2010, 09:06 PM
Art on both sides of this match were really good. It was hard to decide on one over the other. Looks like it'll be close, like Cherubas said. Good luck to you both.
# 18
Posted:
Aug 2 2010, 07:50 PM
This one is insanely close. Can't wait to see which way it goes in the end. Good luck to both of you!
# 17
Posted:
Aug 2 2010, 06:16 PM
Wasn't too impressed here honestly.
Rara: Art was good, but damn there's way too much going on in your pages, nice backgrounds though. Story was OK, nothing too impressive, but good enough for a first battle.
Runic: Art was good here, but your backgrounds are weaksauce. Story was the same as the other one, but I think this one had a bit more structure to it.
Vote goes to Runic.
Rara: Art was good, but damn there's way too much going on in your pages, nice backgrounds though. Story was OK, nothing too impressive, but good enough for a first battle.
Runic: Art was good here, but your backgrounds are weaksauce. Story was the same as the other one, but I think this one had a bit more structure to it.
Vote goes to Runic.
# 16
Posted:
Aug 2 2010, 10:36 AM
You guys both did pretty much the same stories. I didn't really find either terribly appealing.
Rara: Colors look good, though your panels are awkwardly laid out. Like the first half of page 1 feels sort've jumbled. Page 2 and 3 look a lot better. Be aware of your line weights and try to make them more subtle, the big thick lines all around the out side of your characters makes them look like paper cut outs, and not like they are IN that environment.
And I dunno, maybe it's just me, but if you are going to draw huge demon breasts in every other panel why bother trying to cover, hide or even pretend that her Vagina isn't there? It was weird on page one that she didn't have anything there. haha.
It was funny enough. A good comic in a week.
Runic: I don't have a lot to say on your comic. Good job for finishing. The colors were nice, paneling looked good, I just wasn't into the story or characters very much.
Welcome to void, do a lot of battles!
Rara: Colors look good, though your panels are awkwardly laid out. Like the first half of page 1 feels sort've jumbled. Page 2 and 3 look a lot better. Be aware of your line weights and try to make them more subtle, the big thick lines all around the out side of your characters makes them look like paper cut outs, and not like they are IN that environment.
And I dunno, maybe it's just me, but if you are going to draw huge demon breasts in every other panel why bother trying to cover, hide or even pretend that her Vagina isn't there? It was weird on page one that she didn't have anything there. haha.
It was funny enough. A good comic in a week.
Runic: I don't have a lot to say on your comic. Good job for finishing. The colors were nice, paneling looked good, I just wasn't into the story or characters very much.
Welcome to void, do a lot of battles!
# 15
Posted:
Aug 2 2010, 08:22 AM
Both went with a similar aproach and very complete render, both apealing in their own way. Two really great entries, the only edge I see is runic's humor that gets me a bit more, but damn am I jealous of you both XD
# 14
Posted:
Aug 2 2010, 06:28 AM
Yeaaaaaaaah! I tried to stay up late to see Rara's pages but I submitted to sleep.
Now I have but a moment to comment before I take a drive up up north for a few days. (Not to worry, I will vote and comment on the other battles too!)
Rara! Yessssssssss! I love your pages! You've got Ridley's attitude down perfectly!... as well as her, uh, assets.
I agree that this will be close. I want you to progress as much as I want to!
Anyway. I adore your expressions and story and how complete it looks overall. I don't really have any nitpicks to share other than I feel threatened by your talent.
I am so glad to have been paired up with you. I made a new friend!
Now I have but a moment to comment before I take a drive up up north for a few days. (Not to worry, I will vote and comment on the other battles too!)
Rara! Yessssssssss! I love your pages! You've got Ridley's attitude down perfectly!... as well as her, uh, assets.
I agree that this will be close. I want you to progress as much as I want to!
Anyway. I adore your expressions and story and how complete it looks overall. I don't really have any nitpicks to share other than I feel threatened by your talent.
I am so glad to have been paired up with you. I made a new friend!
# 13
Posted:
Aug 1 2010, 11:45 PM
Any excuse to draw tits is a good excuse.
Rara: That face at the end was hilarious. There were a bit of proportion hiccups going on, but mostly great work here. Keep the anatomy tight and your backgrounds detailed and I think it'll go a long way in improving the art.
Runic: Really digging these awesome colors and the fluid poses. I can't wait to see what else you can do. The anatomy was spot on and the quality you produced in just a week is amazing. I'm hella jealous.
Awesome fight guys!
Rara: That face at the end was hilarious. There were a bit of proportion hiccups going on, but mostly great work here. Keep the anatomy tight and your backgrounds detailed and I think it'll go a long way in improving the art.
Runic: Really digging these awesome colors and the fluid poses. I can't wait to see what else you can do. The anatomy was spot on and the quality you produced in just a week is amazing. I'm hella jealous.
Awesome fight guys!
# 12
Posted:
Aug 1 2010, 11:37 PM
Honestly, I didn't expect bewbs from anybody until the third round.
lol srsly awesome match guys.
lol srsly awesome match guys.
# 11
Posted:
Aug 1 2010, 11:26 PM
OH... GOD...
FINALLY... GOT IT IN... THAT WAS... WAY TOO CLOSE...
Thanks, guys! This battle's gonna be uber fucking CLOSE, mang! Hope yous guys enjoy~ And I'd like to thank Drew very much for being an awesome opponent and pal!
FINALLY... GOT IT IN... THAT WAS... WAY TOO CLOSE...
Thanks, guys! This battle's gonna be uber fucking CLOSE, mang! Hope yous guys enjoy~ And I'd like to thank Drew very much for being an awesome opponent and pal!
# 10
Posted:
Aug 1 2010, 11:54 AM
Uploaded my pages!
# 9
Posted:
Jul 30 2010, 02:02 AM
Lot of potential here. Kick some ass!
# 8
Posted:
Jul 28 2010, 11:32 AM
Good to hear you're well and rested after your previous comic drawing project, Runic. Looking forward to both your entries :3
# 7
Posted:
Jul 28 2010, 12:25 AM
I expect this matchup to be fun to look at. Don't disappoint
# 6
Posted:
Jul 26 2010, 12:21 PM
Phew. My hand has rested from my long-ass chapter finale over at WfA. Time to get crackin'! *High five for Rara!*
# 5
Posted:
Jul 26 2010, 12:20 PM
Welcome to both of you.
This should be really good!
I mean, REALLY good!!
This should be really good!
I mean, REALLY good!!
# 4
Posted:
Jul 26 2010, 08:35 AM
This is gonna be awesome:)
# 3
Posted:
Jul 26 2010, 12:50 AM
Welcome to void you two, just remember to do your best, the minimum is a mere 3 pages too! And yes I am going to say this to everybody.
# 2
Posted:
Jul 25 2010, 10:34 PM
GOOD LUCK YOUR TWO! MAKE IT SEXY!
# 1
Posted:
Jul 25 2010, 09:15 PM
Hope to see some lovely stuff!
Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Aug 8th, 2010
Votes Cast:
48
Page Views:
2305
Winner:
Runic
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Thank you very much, Drew, for battling me; you're an awesome, worthy opponent and epic new buddy!
And thank you, VOID members, for the constructive crits! I would have been dissapointed without these helpful hints. I'll learn from these and from my mistakes, and hope to get better at cmicking. C:
But this isn't where I stop! I have to be working soon, but now's the time to start doing regular VOID fights! Now I'll have more time to put in detail about The Desert City of VOID that Auvre lives in.