Kojiro vs. Shrapnel Girl

Kojiro vs. Shrapnel Girl

Kojiro vs. Shrapnel Girl

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Rtv!
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# 7   Posted: Aug 9 2010, 07:07 AM
4:00
On that page where Haruka smashes the car window it still looks a bit static. I advise using different shapes of glassand have em spread out more for that extra impact.

Also try to make the folds in clothing more realistic, they somehow seem a bit wrinkled.
The pacing was topnotch. Nice to try something different for a change although i'm more a fan of your action sequences.
However, i haven't seen such a full fleshed out comic from you in a while.

But i can tell yer on fire.  As far as i know our best looking fight was against eachother.
Anything else...Monday already said it.

AJ - Shit happens. Would've loved to see to of my bros go head on. Well it's not the end of the world.
And to be honest, i think you beat me last time despite the votes :)

Atomicjohn
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28 comments
# 6   Posted: Aug 7 2010, 02:46 PM
Awesome. I don't think the fact that there wasn't any diologue detracted from the comic in any way. I really liked your take on Void City, espeacially the elevator shaft, and the car. The comic was very emersive and appealing. All in all I say great job!

Monday
Artist
958 comments
# 5   Posted: Aug 3 2010, 02:04 PM
Holy shit 4 ! This is your cleanest and most visually pleasing entry I've seen !
No fucking kidding you amped it to 11 and held it up against the microphone and amped up THOSE speakers to 5 [because putting it on 11 again would just shatter my brains]

I wished there was text or something- but I realized you fully intended for this to be a silent comic ! Ballsy but it worked out nicely in the end since silent comics generally require more page count.

Too bad AJ has comp problems - just put it up as a BB when you can
Good job 4 !  You're getting top scores for this.

Too

So here's what I'm thinking - you got your anatomy to a good place where I find it entertaining but there are still kinks to work out with your people shapes- I'm getting a kind of Aeon Flux vibe from your style and when your people distory I think it needs to look more intentional so as to exaggerate the action. I will cite page 5 last frame as one example of wonky anatomy that either needs to feel more placed with the action

michaelharris
Artist
352 comments
# 4   Posted: Aug 3 2010, 12:05 PM
This was fun, I would keep working on anatomy and perspective. The color is fine. My only complaint is that you didn't really put any effort into involving your opponent in the story.

AJ 武士龍
Artist
66 comments
# 3   Posted: Aug 3 2010, 11:35 AM
People, i'm sorry i could n't upload my part, because my laptop just died 2 days ago :'( ...it's something related to the graphic board or something...anyway, i'll submit when i get the chance to work on photoshop again.
Once again, sorry guys, sorry 4:00Am, i'll upload as a beyond battle man...

William_Duel
Community Manager
942 comments
# 2   Posted: Aug 3 2010, 08:32 AM
I just have to ask, that ravishing gentleman on Swallow's shirt.  Who is that?  He's sexy.

William_Duel
Community Manager
942 comments
# 1   Posted: Aug 3 2010, 08:28 AM
Wow that's eerie...the picture of the guy on the first page looks like me.

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