Andre vs. ScurCrow
Critiques & Comments
# 18
Posted:
Jun 28 2010, 01:10 PM
Rofl... not to be a dick or anything, but you REALLY ought to finish something one of these days.
# 17
Posted:
Jun 28 2010, 12:48 PM
ROFL: I liked the pages you did have, but I thing the dark background detracted from your work, I would have preferred white to that yellow.
Dimension: This was pretty fun. I would just say keep working on anatomy and perspective they were a little off in places.
Dimension: This was pretty fun. I would just say keep working on anatomy and perspective they were a little off in places.
# 16
Posted:
Jun 28 2010, 09:55 AM
Dimension: I'm not sure what people are talking about artwise and it not being your strongest. This may be true but it's definitely not poorly drawn, the color is well done, there are some weird anatomy issues...but even the pros fuck that up sometimes. Storywise I guess Iw asn't into it. it started out interestingly enough and then just fell flat I kept waiting for something to happen...then poof. I think conversational comics should follow the same arc as fighting, or dramatic comics. This comic seemed to meander with an uninteresting conversation then climax at the ear bite. I guess I would have expected a larger reaction from Andre than "Ffffffffffff..." (considering the giganticness of the bite in his ear...I mean seriously have you ever had your industrial pierced...or your conch? that shit fucking hurts no matter how badass you are...) I guess really all that was missing for this comic was context. I feel like I'm eves dropping on people I don't know in the middle of a conversation that started 30 minutes before I showed up. Despite that...the art was super tough I liked it actually...(especially page 2....except for that weird diagonal panel...that didn't add anything to the overall design of the page) Greatwork my vote goes to you..
Rofl: This started out great although pretty muddled I see the intent of the work and with a bit of refining this could work well. The writing was good as usual I generally like your comics. I wish there was more. wish wish wish wish wish wish...nope..
Rofl: This started out great although pretty muddled I see the intent of the work and with a bit of refining this could work well. The writing was good as usual I generally like your comics. I wish there was more. wish wish wish wish wish wish...nope..
# 15
Posted:
Jun 27 2010, 11:17 PM
Dimension - Very clean and simple artwork, yet polished like a finely detailed automobile. Definitely nothing to complain about there other than the last page. I like the simple plot giving a bit more info into the character's persona. Enjoyed it.
Rofl - Hmmm. 1 week may have been to much to ask. Understandable. There's always something that comes up. I'm glad you posted something other than defaulting though. The story could use some work; pacing, although I was curious as to why the character was so angry and would have liked to have found out. That's a good thing. The artwork aint too bad, a little work on some areas and perhaps some time to plan it out a bit and it probably would have been a lot better. Gotta take points away though, the battle guidelines were agreed to and not met (3 pages.)
Rofl - Hmmm. 1 week may have been to much to ask. Understandable. There's always something that comes up. I'm glad you posted something other than defaulting though. The story could use some work; pacing, although I was curious as to why the character was so angry and would have liked to have found out. That's a good thing. The artwork aint too bad, a little work on some areas and perhaps some time to plan it out a bit and it probably would have been a lot better. Gotta take points away though, the battle guidelines were agreed to and not met (3 pages.)
# 14
Posted:
Jun 24 2010, 10:39 AM
@Rofl- Dude, yeeeeessss, those two pages were looking so nice, man! Definitely finish this if you can <3 I really like how you draw Scurcrow and his expressions/sayings had me laughing.
@Jho and Angie: I understand what you guys mean. It originally was actually supposed to be 4 pages (excluding the banner page thing) but I was worried that it would be /toooo/ random if it were anymore fast paced. Like, I just reread my side and page 4 the Andre's dialogue felt very, uhhh very sudden to me. I will totally try to work on my pacing though. I'll also go with more than a 1 week deadline next time; this was harder than i expected. XD Thanks for the feed back~
@Jho and Angie: I understand what you guys mean. It originally was actually supposed to be 4 pages (excluding the banner page thing) but I was worried that it would be /toooo/ random if it were anymore fast paced. Like, I just reread my side and page 4 the Andre's dialogue felt very, uhhh very sudden to me. I will totally try to work on my pacing though. I'll also go with more than a 1 week deadline next time; this was harder than i expected. XD Thanks for the feed back~
# 13
Posted:
Jun 24 2010, 10:24 AM
Rofl-you probably shouldn't say you're gonna default then upload silly, I almost put this up without thumbing because I thought you didn't turn in. I can't say much about the story because there's not much here, but artistically I think you should do more like this. I feel like when you start introducing color into your work you get too focused on it over making nicer drawings. But when you do stuff more like this you're kind of forced to focus on your lineart and I think that would really help you.
Dimension-Definitely not your strongest art wise, since this was a 1 weeker you probably would have benefited a lot from just doing 3-5 pages instead of 7 so you could have focused more on your quality. I do agree with Jho about the pacing, a lot of this could have been condensed and would have saved your quality. Story wise it was cute but I felt like you didn't really do much to branch out.
Dimension-Definitely not your strongest art wise, since this was a 1 weeker you probably would have benefited a lot from just doing 3-5 pages instead of 7 so you could have focused more on your quality. I do agree with Jho about the pacing, a lot of this could have been condensed and would have saved your quality. Story wise it was cute but I felt like you didn't really do much to branch out.
# 12
Posted:
Jun 24 2010, 09:05 AM
woops sorry, i mean 2 EVENTS in one panel? sometimes action/reaction doesnt have to have their own panels if they're not too important
# 11
Posted:
Jun 24 2010, 09:02 AM
rofl what you have is pretty good, shame you didnt finish.
dimension, nice attempt on bg and good lineart, i have to say the story isnt really getting to me, i understand you want to make a slice of life thing but comparing the script ratio to the drawing/pages it seems too stretched. and the pacing becomes too slow.
one way to exercise this is to not have each baloon have its own panel, try combining 2 baloon words at once in one panel, be more dynamic. i can see your story could end in 4 pages (excluding cover) and it probably reads better.
overall, good job
dimension, nice attempt on bg and good lineart, i have to say the story isnt really getting to me, i understand you want to make a slice of life thing but comparing the script ratio to the drawing/pages it seems too stretched. and the pacing becomes too slow.
one way to exercise this is to not have each baloon have its own panel, try combining 2 baloon words at once in one panel, be more dynamic. i can see your story could end in 4 pages (excluding cover) and it probably reads better.
overall, good job
# 10
Posted:
Jun 24 2010, 05:54 AM
Ah, sorry I'm defaulting this. I thought it was due today as opposed to yesterday. I'll be submitting this in BB.
# 9
Posted:
Jun 23 2010, 11:30 PM
Oh, and to clarify. The story is complete, but I didn't get to finish the last page quality-wise.
# 8
Posted:
Jun 23 2010, 02:36 PM
William, that may not happen... ;-;
Sorry I uploaded what I have, I didn't get a chance to proof read, I'd work on this more, but I'll be out of the house for the rest of today.
Sorry I uploaded what I have, I didn't get a chance to proof read, I'd work on this more, but I'll be out of the house for the rest of today.
# 7
Posted:
Jun 23 2010, 12:08 PM
I demand satisfaction.
# 6
Posted:
Jun 16 2010, 06:01 PM
[/quote] No no, my guy's not ScruCrow, that's Dimension's.[/quote]
Heeey, my guy's not ScruCrow either. My guy is ScurCrow.
Good luck to you too RolfQu!
Heeey, my guy's not ScruCrow either. My guy is ScurCrow.
Good luck to you too RolfQu!
# 5
Posted:
Jun 16 2010, 03:27 PM
William_Duel: Oh shit! It's Scurcrow vs....that other guy. The one who pussied out from the sentai tourney....yeah him!
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# 4
Posted:
Jun 16 2010, 03:23 PM
Oh shit! It's Scurcrow vs....that other guy. The one who pussied out from the sentai tourney....yeah him!
# 3
Posted:
Jun 16 2010, 03:19 PM
Alright, good luck to you, Di!
# 2
Posted:
Jun 16 2010, 01:43 PM
Well now....what do we have here?
# 1
Posted:
Jun 16 2010, 12:43 PM
oh, boy...here we go D:
Scar Match
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1 week
Ended:
Jul 1st, 2010
Votes Cast:
27
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Winner:
Dimension
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