Edgar Grimsette vs. Aesimi & Beethoven

Edgar Grimsette vs. Aesimi & Beethoven

Edgar Grimsette vs. Aesimi & Beethoven

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by Pelz

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Sid_Bane
Artist
53 comments
# 16   Posted: Jun 21 2010, 02:48 PM
-Angie- Okay, I'll definitely remember to do that if something like this occurs in the future.

-Elio- Thank you. I've been kind of popping around between different styles of color, but I will keep that in mind. And if I return to this somewhat brown-tone style of coloring, I will bring in some lighter tones.

-William-  Wow, thank you for bringing that to my attention. I can see where a variation of camera shots would add more of a visual interest to this.  
I also started practicing children earlier this week, so I'm going to continue doing that.
 
Thanks for the critiques.

William_Duel
Community Manager
929 comments
# 15   Posted: Jun 18 2010, 01:33 PM
So krat, this was an excellent comic.  There is a constant danger though of
crosshatching and shading to the point of clarity loss, but I think the format you have is what saves you and the reader from
this problem.  Though for the sake of variety and interest, it could have used some variation because 80% of the comic is really head on, head shots of
edgar.  There are very few wide angle shots in the comic and I think the addition of some could have been used positively.  For example, I think those four
box shaped panels at the beginning were excellently done not only to show us the white hair he plucks, but to set mood.  When he tears the fur from his hands
also has a greater emotional tone to it because of these features.  So basically what I'd saying is,
use more of that.  I found issue with Aesimi's anatomy when it was present, though cartoony, it's still malproportioned, so draw some more kids.  There are
also times when the shapes of things are kinda odd, but I assume those are things that improve through experience, like the sandwich.  It's shape is
pretty hard to distinguish and without the dialogue, it would have been difficult to surmise what was going on.   Pity we couldn't see the last two
pages.  I enjoyed the overall dark ambience the comic has.

I always enjoy the Aesimi/Beethoven comics, and this was fun too.  Though you were hurt, most probably, by the lack of shading.  Page 6 really stuck out to
me, because we have a real instance of depth here.  Beethoven's arm is coming out of the panel and practically into the real world, since he casts a shadow
on the gutter and there's actual lighting on his arm.  This stuck with me for this reason and for its intention, but its such a rare instance in the comic
that it kinda shows us that this is what the rest of the comic is lacking.  The linework is a bit of a step backwards, and could stand to be cleaner.  Your
facial expressions are as always very lively though.  Keep on truckin'.

Elio
48 comments
# 14   Posted: Jun 15 2010, 01:21 PM
Krat, your comic was striking and was very interesting. The colors were a little too dark, and could use more whites to get things a popping. Too bad about the last two pages.

Aesimi, I love your character. Your comics are funny and flow nice. But your drawings are very 'chopping'. While the lettering is very crisp. You need to try and balance. Are you drawing big enough? Maybe switch digital brushes or something, whatever it is, smooth your lines!

Rad work both of you.

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 13   Posted: Jun 15 2010, 07:07 AM
Ahhh in the future definitely post that you may upload more later so I know not to put it up early

Phill
Artist
895 comments
# 12   Posted: Jun 15 2010, 02:06 AM
They were working a moment ago. I'll comment on these comics soon.

Sid_Bane
Artist
53 comments
# 11   Posted: Jun 15 2010, 12:54 AM
The "image broken" is kinda my fault. I was trying to finish up coloring pages today and for the most of the day I was busy and then in the evening I had an event to go to. Since I wasn't able to get the last pages colored before said event, I figured I would at least submit the first eight pages which would still give the story at least somewhat of an ending, albeit an rather ambiguous one (at that point I mentioned the comic was uploaded because I didn't think I would have anymore time to work on it). I thought the event would go for most of the evening, but it finished a lot earlier then I thought. So I went back home to finish up the last two pages and try to upload them before the deadline. So when I got the last two pages done, I went to the uploader to put up the last two pages, and then found out that the comics had already been uploaded.  

So, really, it's my bad timing. Sorry about any confusion caused. :/

Cracking Skulls
Artist
346 comments
# 10   Posted: Jun 14 2010, 10:31 PM
Yeah page 9 and 10 of krats comic won't show up for me either. I'm sure it'll get fixed soon.

Ten Dead Kings
Artist
269 comments
# 9   Posted: Jun 14 2010, 10:09 PM
Is it just me, or is pages 9 and 10 of Krat's side broken?

Pelz
Artist
36 comments
# 8   Posted: Jun 14 2010, 03:03 PM
D: I uploaded too!   XD There's still more I wanted to do, but... bluh.   Went back to the style of some of my older comics...  x_x Tried to do more background stuff, but...  Yup, I'm nervous too. ._.

Sid_Bane
Artist
53 comments
# 7   Posted: Jun 14 2010, 02:54 PM
Uploaded.

Ffffff. I'm really nervous about this one. :/

ThreeFatesAngel
Artist
26 comments
# 6   Posted: Jun 4 2010, 11:16 PM
Yes~!! *bounces up and down like a giddy school girl* ^-^

Mister Kent
Artist
947 comments
# 5   Posted: May 26 2010, 12:59 AM
Aw! Dis'll be a cool battle

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 4   Posted: May 23 2010, 12:26 PM
Happy to see both of you back!

William_Duel
Community Manager
929 comments
# 3   Posted: May 21 2010, 03:31 PM
Sweet.  Edgar and Beethoven are an interesting duo to pair together.

Dimension
Artist
489 comments
# 2   Posted: May 18 2010, 12:35 PM
:D Yay!

I'm looking forward to this.

DrasticFantastic
Artist
165 comments
# 1   Posted: May 18 2010, 01:37 AM
Haha, oh my god all sorts of cool battles are popping up all of a sudden. This makes me glad.

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Drawing Time: 3 weeks
Ended: Jun 21st, 2010
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