Kars vs. Arena

Kars vs. Arena

Kars vs. Arena

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PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 25   Posted: May 6 2010, 04:00 PM
I was probably rushing because I didn't even get to finish the last 4 pages........ XD

carlito
Artist
375 comments
# 24   Posted: May 6 2010, 10:19 AM
Kars- You're improving every fight. Keep at it, it's starting to come together a little bit at a time.
You keep hearing it, I know... that your stuff still looks too empty, but it really does.. Spot blacking is good, I saw you tried out some on page 3.. but then you kinda gave it up, and if you're gonna do spot blacks, no sketchy, sloppy blacks! Fill that junk in! Solid! Page 3 the silloettes and shadows and fills? Lay that solid! Black, black! No spaces. No sketchiness. Then, if you want.. add some shade or lines or crosshatch to it.
I Like how you're progressing though. Best comic from you yet.

Pyras- Your stuff looks pretty empty too, and you're trying to hide it with grey but it's not really working, it still looks really empty. You need some line width! The perspective in all your backgrounds (what few there were) is really weird. Even when there are backgrounds it seems empty & flat.
 Color hints were pretty cool throughout. Page 5 panel one was sweet, and page 9 looked really good... but otherwise, I feel you're rushing. Slow down! Get away from the computer some, work traditional maybe, and SLOW DOWN.
 Less pages. More quality.
Keep at it though, and polish that stuff up. You do have a lot of potential art wise.

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 23   Posted: May 5 2010, 09:38 AM
a trade, eh? XD

Mister Kent
Artist
945 comments
# 22   Posted: May 4 2010, 09:59 PM
That was a nice collaborative story - good effort, you two!

TDK - I definitely see improvements in your art. I think your biggest success in this comic was giving the characters personality. Kars especially - it can't be easy to make a relatively featureless skull so charismatic, but you did (Pyras as well!) I'd like to see you work on anatomy in future comics, and really refine Kars' costume, as well - sometimes it doesn't look "all there" - it's a great costume, so I'd like to see it look really 3-dimensional.

Pyras - I enjoyed your storytelling, and the way you worked in Koba and the Orphanage in. I like seeing your color pieces - makes me want more more more COLOR! I'm not one to talk, but I'd like to see you color more. But that's because you're good at it and I'm greedy. Also, I think it would help in certain battles, such as this one. Good work though

Ichigo Nakamura
2 comments
# 21   Posted: May 4 2010, 03:40 PM
I love both comics, and the history was quite good

tdk: the finger joke is quite known and I laugh a little when Arena don't fell in it, your background still being quite poor, but in some frames are many things with many details, and the inking is bad, it seems like you do it quickly and with no care, also some of it qet out of the frames, like in page 2, I love the face of Kars in page 7 frame 6, it's lovely,  I also like the sailor shirt and the face of arena trying to run from the clothes, jejeje, keep trying your best

Pyras: lovely drawing and shading, but whart happens with the last 4 pages!? it seems the time wasn't enough, also I love the color you put on the powers or the lights of the weapon of the other guy with Koba. also good thing is the diferent type of letter or colour in each character bubble, I love how it ends, Kars fighting the two guys and arena crying out of danger, I was wanting to cry, but its really lovely

good work you 2

carlito
Artist
375 comments
# 20   Posted: May 4 2010, 08:19 AM
You get what you give.
I'll crit you guys if you crit our battle.

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 19   Posted: May 3 2010, 01:17 PM
Just 1 critique? :(

Ten Dead Kings
Artist
269 comments
# 18   Posted: May 2 2010, 06:52 AM
The finger joke wasn't too lame, right? Right?

Ten Dead Kings
Artist
269 comments
# 17   Posted: May 2 2010, 06:44 AM
The finger joke wasn't too lame, right? Right?

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 16   Posted: Apr 29 2010, 10:15 PM
Kuma's head was actually bigger in the 1st page, and I shrank it thinking it was such! XD

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 15   Posted: Apr 29 2010, 09:45 PM
Don't bother looking for typos with Koba, and only one character has all the typos.

William, concerning page 6(4/13) are you talking about layout of the panels? It didn't seem to be in reverse when I read it, then again I made it..

William_Duel
Community Manager
924 comments
# 14   Posted: Apr 29 2010, 06:29 PM
Alright Pyro, this was a pretty good comic, nicely paced, dialogue wasn't bad and the characterizations were pretty on mark.  I'm tickled pink by the inclusion of the Orphanage.  Sweet deal.  But you do suffer from some bad habits here and there.  Most of them take place with Kuma and the way he's drawn.  He just has some wierd anatomical issues here and there and general inconsistencies.  The biggest example being his first appearance where I'm not sure if his head is too big or his chest too small.  Funny enough, I believe your female anatomy is much stronger than your male anatomy.  Something to think about.  And page 6, which you labelled 4/13, the bottom half of the page, the flow of action doesn't make sense as if we suddenly switched to manga and are reading in reverse.  Ah, kinda odd.  I'm not gonna fault you for the last three pages being 'unfinished' because they're pretty much done just lacking your usual greys.  Arena is fun to follow though keep it up.  Ah and I guess I know which three typos you speak of, but it's not much fun if I point it out, but I assume the ones I'm looking at are each in one instance with Koba, Kars and Arena.

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 13   Posted: Apr 29 2010, 01:32 PM
You didn't miss it, that's a mystery for another comic. :X

William_Duel
Community Manager
924 comments
# 12   Posted: Apr 29 2010, 12:22 PM
tdk, I can see you actually pushing yourself a bit, though the changes are minor I believe I can see the signs of effort showing through.  It's good that you're pushing yourself to add details, albeit little ones to your backgrounds (ah backgrounds are my bane, I still need to practice those too) but again, more shadowing, more blacks, you have some but it's minimalist and it becomes a sort of 'Where's Waldo' kinda thing when looking for where you've added shading.  Again, push it and add it to some of the basic places where one would find it, like for me the most obvious place would be under the chin on the neck, like Arena could use a shadow here and there.  Also you need some variety on your line widths, Kure's got an interesting tutorial where he addresses this in one section:
http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=9968.0
So check that out, line width is cool.  But if you don't wanna add the blacks then my recommendation would be to add greys.  Start out little if you don't wanna go overboard but add some grey shapes here and there while remembering to following the contour of the shape  you're shading.  But keep it up man and keep practicing.  

And I'll do Arena's side next but just one question, maybe I missed this somewhere... When did Arena learn to speak English?

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 11   Posted: Apr 29 2010, 10:27 AM
In the horde of intentional typos, there are 3 unintentional ones. can you spot them?

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 10   Posted: Apr 28 2010, 10:30 PM
tdk: At first I was like :|...... but then, I lol'd :D

that was really funny, great job!

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 9   Posted: Apr 28 2010, 10:23 PM
I hope when people see 'makeup', they know I'm not talking about cosmetics XD

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 8   Posted: Apr 28 2010, 10:11 PM
Uploaded. I have many regrets. :(

Ten Dead Kings
Artist
269 comments
# 7   Posted: Apr 28 2010, 02:15 AM
Uploaded. I have no regrets.

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 6   Posted: Apr 22 2010, 02:01 PM
When it doubt, fill it out!

I think the biggest problem your comics has is that they feel like coloring book pages: If you don't want to dive into color then at least fill the spaces with different shades of grey. :)

Ten Dead Kings
Artist
269 comments
# 5   Posted: Apr 22 2010, 10:13 AM
I actually finished early. For once.
Now I just gotta figure out how to get rid of all that "white space."

alberto311
Artist
349 comments
# 4   Posted: Apr 20 2010, 05:05 PM
Looking forward to this one.

carlito
Artist
375 comments
# 3   Posted: Apr 1 2010, 08:13 AM
Good luck you two.

Wolcik
Artist
492 comments
# 2   Posted: Mar 30 2010, 12:43 AM
Looking foroward to it. Good luck XD

JoshuaEliGilley
Artist
462 comments
# 1   Posted: Mar 29 2010, 03:58 PM
TDK, LET'S SEE LESS WHITE SPACE!!

PYRAS, LET'S SEE SOME KICK ASS GLOWING MASK HOLES!

;) have fun dudes!

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Drawing Time: 4 weeks
Ended: May 5th, 2010
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