House of W: Under Fire / Worltex

House of W: Under Fire / Worltex

House of W: Under Fire — Worltex

by Wolcik


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Wolcik
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# 8   Posted: Mar 15 2010, 04:42 AM
The point of showing all those charaters I made and killing them without telling much about them beisde the fact that I wrote about them in forum is that I don't have time for NPCs while I should be focusing on my characters and people I battle. Their purpouse in this story was to die unremembered.
I'm not 100% how HoW will change, but it won't be HoW anymore - new name, new place and new rules.

michaelharris
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# 7   Posted: Mar 15 2010, 02:15 AM
I think you should have given us smaller installments. While this is really important to you, it's kind of hard to sit through this long complicated epic. I would try to write as if you don't know the story. I would also look at several different types of writing. It seemed a lot like bad anime storytelling. There are a TON of people running around who we don't really know who they are nor what they do or the purpose they serve.. There is a lot of overdramatic foreshadowing. Tons of dramatic narration that doesn't really feel natural. The dialogue is so busy telling the story, that it doesn't sound like real people talking. I am not saying these things are bad by themselves but its like taking all the elements of storytelling I personally hate and putting them together in a way I have seen done over and over and over again.

I have no idea who the people are in chapter 4. I didn't really want to go back and sift through everything to find out.

I would start with smaller scale stories with less going and less characters and try to get a hold of that. If I am not mistaken, English isn't your first language, and there is still a lot of misspellings running around. I kind of feel like you are a freshman in writing school and you are trying to write the Lord of the Rings trilogy. I would like you to start smaller. Try to write as if you don't know the characters and keep in mind that very character needs to be introduced so we know their name

Qyzex
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# 6   Posted: Mar 14 2010, 12:45 AM
I didn't quite get the plot... and your action scenes get confusing.

But I do like your figures. And they keep getting better

Wolcik
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# 5   Posted: Mar 13 2010, 06:54 PM
Other than constructive critiques are also welcomed. Just saying whenever you liked the story, and what part was interesting or not helpes me a lot in writting departament XD

I bet if you read it to vote you have at least small opinion - Let's hear it!

Wolcik
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# 4   Posted: Mar 11 2010, 10:17 PM
Well, the reason why this story covers death of most Gatekeepers is because there was too many of them and giving them all background stories would take too much time to draw - I had the thought out, but never on paper.

The quality is also reduced by the fact that most of pages were drawn more than half year ago. I just retraced them with pthosohop recently - some were drawn from start with only tablet.

William_Duel
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# 3   Posted: Mar 11 2010, 10:03 PM
Though the page count and dedication you've shown here is admirable the quality here is not up to your usual snuff I think.  One of the major problems in following the story here is that you made one of the antagonists (the betrayer) a guy we don't know much about in the first place.  By the end I understand that he's some sort of ghost entity that inhabits an artificial body made by Wolcik who was turned by Pye but it is rather confusing and there's nothing that was established beforehand.  Maybe a bit of background would have helped.  But good job on the effort and the epic scope you're trying to produce for your storyline.

Wolcik
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492 comments
# 2   Posted: Mar 10 2010, 04:40 PM
Uploaded whatever crap I've done - now moving on to Scarmageddon XD

William_Duel
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# 1   Posted: Feb 27 2010, 02:14 PM
FIRE!

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Drawing Time: 4 weeks
Ended: Mar 17th, 2010
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