Katinka, I tried to enjoy the story but it seemed very random and hard to follow, that coupled with the unfinished art made me unable to read it.
Pi, Was there a preceding comic to this? The story seems kind of random and unfinished because we don't get any kind of background on why this is going on, what makes the diamond worth this woman's finger. When it ended, I just said, "oooookaaaaay.... is this it." It just seems like an excerpt from a larger story. The art needs some more anatomy and perspective work, but I really enjoyed the mood of the piece.
Katinka vs. Dr. Pye
Critiques & Comments
# 16
Posted:
Sep 30 2009, 12:24 PM
# 15
Posted:
Sep 29 2009, 01:05 PM
DOH! It was a typo, Pio. =D My bad!
# 14
Posted:
Sep 28 2009, 09:59 PM
Krissy I think that despite your circumstance you needed to come at this knowing that you could establish a well rounded schedule to finish. A page a day isn't a bad target- since it can be pulled off digitally in a few hours with the way you work. Speed was never your strong point but when you get to stop and make things shiny you make far better deciscions than when you're rushing for minimialism. As for motivation that's a completely different thing- if you're doing void as a casual thing then it would behoove you to find a good pace of working. Your story was otherwise interesting but its a shame this hasnt gotten passed the thumbing stage.
Pi I dont think I read the desperation for large diamonds well enough but I read it nonetheless. Writ wise it felt minimalistic I wish you could have fleshed out the Katinka element a bit more- as of right now things feel lackluster content wise. People dont usually do the minimal pages thing until they've already done 10 in their planning stages and cut it down. Otherwise- your black and white balance here is leaps better than your last and overall you did very well. I would like to say that this was one of your more serious entries- but I do miss your writing.
Keep with this pace but next time plan to do more concept wise before coming out with however many pages you decide to come out with.
Good luck next time guise.
Pi I dont think I read the desperation for large diamonds well enough but I read it nonetheless. Writ wise it felt minimalistic I wish you could have fleshed out the Katinka element a bit more- as of right now things feel lackluster content wise. People dont usually do the minimal pages thing until they've already done 10 in their planning stages and cut it down. Otherwise- your black and white balance here is leaps better than your last and overall you did very well. I would like to say that this was one of your more serious entries- but I do miss your writing.
Keep with this pace but next time plan to do more concept wise before coming out with however many pages you decide to come out with.
Good luck next time guise.
# 13
Posted:
Sep 28 2009, 09:48 PM
Lune; I'm Pio. Were you refering to me ?
I just needed to post that real quick... crit incoming.
I just needed to post that real quick... crit incoming.
# 12
Posted:
Sep 28 2009, 11:33 AM
Krissy: I am rather disappointed. I agree with Koko. 2 days? C'mon. It's very hard to tell just what is going on in the pages, let alone make out what the story is about. I kept having to go back to make things out. You have a natural talent and I can see it shows by the fact that you are in the lead just from taking a pen and scribbling on your tablet in a hurry. I give you that. (Though I am still astrounded people are actually give you props for it). I realize no one but yourself can make you work harder, so this is beating a dead horse. I understand if life happens, so I won't sit here and go on any further.
Pio: I am not so much disappointed. YOU FINISHED and I could tell what was going on. Koko kind of said what I wanted to, so all I can say to you is - thank you for the effort. <3
Pio: I am not so much disappointed. YOU FINISHED and I could tell what was going on. Koko kind of said what I wanted to, so all I can say to you is - thank you for the effort. <3
# 11
Posted:
Sep 28 2009, 10:49 AM
Wow....
This was kind of a diappointment, for the first time I find myself agreeing with Kotori. I had zero Eye-dea (hehehe) what was going on in Nekos, it was just scribbles , I can see that neko does have skill because the stuff that was legible looked like the begnnings of awesome, and even the illegible linework scribbles had the feeling of someone who knows how to wield a brush or pen....but alas it was just kinda meh. And the accent, the way you wrote it reminded me of how John Malkovich sounded as KGB in Rounders (if that reference was too innocuous...look it up...) an Pi I was just bored by yours..at least it was short. If there had been 8 pages of that I think I would have not made it through. I've never really been a huge fan of super obvious photoshop filters strewn about drawn pages, If you're goign to incorporate textures and what not make sure they are seemless.
meh... I dont think Im voting on this one.
This was kind of a diappointment, for the first time I find myself agreeing with Kotori. I had zero Eye-dea (hehehe) what was going on in Nekos, it was just scribbles , I can see that neko does have skill because the stuff that was legible looked like the begnnings of awesome, and even the illegible linework scribbles had the feeling of someone who knows how to wield a brush or pen....but alas it was just kinda meh. And the accent, the way you wrote it reminded me of how John Malkovich sounded as KGB in Rounders (if that reference was too innocuous...look it up...) an Pi I was just bored by yours..at least it was short. If there had been 8 pages of that I think I would have not made it through. I've never really been a huge fan of super obvious photoshop filters strewn about drawn pages, If you're goign to incorporate textures and what not make sure they are seemless.
meh... I dont think Im voting on this one.
# 10
Posted:
Sep 27 2009, 07:40 PM
My apologies to all the disappointed readers. Honestly, I was worried my last few battles were too focused on story, and I was always either rushing to finish or not finishing at all. I wanted to use this battle to prove (to myself, if anything else) that I could complete a comic on time and to standards I could be satisfied with. I originally planned this comic to span 7-8 pages, but I caught myself and hacked it down early so I could finish. To be honest, I still don't have the practice to do completed work at the speed most artists here can, so I wanted to use this battle for such practice.
Again, I'm sorry to anyone who found it boring, and I don't want to make excuses for the comic. It's boring, and I know it is. I don't really like posting notes about a piece this early in the voting, but I felt like I needed to clarify my position on this. If you weren't entertained, please score me accordingly. But I really would like to improve in all areas of comic making, and that especially includes the illustrating part, which I've always felt was my biggest weakness.
Again, I'm sorry to anyone who found it boring, and I don't want to make excuses for the comic. It's boring, and I know it is. I don't really like posting notes about a piece this early in the voting, but I felt like I needed to clarify my position on this. If you weren't entertained, please score me accordingly. But I really would like to improve in all areas of comic making, and that especially includes the illustrating part, which I've always felt was my biggest weakness.
# 9
Posted:
Sep 27 2009, 05:24 PM
Neko: Being told you did this in 2 days doesn't help make it any easier to read. I couldn't get a grasp of the pacing or whatever because I spent too much time just trying to figure out what the hell was going on. It was messy. It was confusing. And it was a disappointment. It took me, literally, three read-throughs to figure out what the hell was happening and I had to explain the scar to someone else on AIM who had no clue what she had done to him. If you just want a story crit, yes... it could have been pretty good if you had actually worked on it. As it is, you didn't and it shows and killed the whole thing. A real pity.
Pi: At least I could make sense of yours in one read. Jack is right that it was, over all, very dull... especially given the very dynamic characters you had to work with. It was, at least, finished and clean and legible. That got a very firm up on the chaos of your opponent's pages. But you are a better storyteller than this. Katinka is a vivacious character full of fire and attitude. I didn't believe that she was the character talking to Dr. Pye for awhile. If you want to do such a scar there could have been much more interesting ways to do it... Katinka refusing and zombies holding her down while some shambling horror bites her finger off or something... anything... Dr.Pye's powers give him so many options that I was truly disappointed in the blandness here. Come on, challenge yourself and push the envelope more.
Overall: I was disappointed in general. But at least Pi's was legible and finished. He gets my vote, as a complete work shows more time and effort than the other, unfinished, piece. Come on, guys, give us something to be excited and horrified by. >:|
Pi: At least I could make sense of yours in one read. Jack is right that it was, over all, very dull... especially given the very dynamic characters you had to work with. It was, at least, finished and clean and legible. That got a very firm up on the chaos of your opponent's pages. But you are a better storyteller than this. Katinka is a vivacious character full of fire and attitude. I didn't believe that she was the character talking to Dr. Pye for awhile. If you want to do such a scar there could have been much more interesting ways to do it... Katinka refusing and zombies holding her down while some shambling horror bites her finger off or something... anything... Dr.Pye's powers give him so many options that I was truly disappointed in the blandness here. Come on, challenge yourself and push the envelope more.
Overall: I was disappointed in general. But at least Pi's was legible and finished. He gets my vote, as a complete work shows more time and effort than the other, unfinished, piece. Come on, guys, give us something to be excited and horrified by. >:|
# 8
Posted:
Sep 27 2009, 05:13 PM
My comic was done all in two days. 8D I'm not saying to keep that in mind while your critiquing--but I'm more looking at I dunno. Pacing as far as what I want to get poked and prodded on. I know the art is subpar already as far as what I'm capable of.
# 7
Posted:
Sep 27 2009, 04:44 PM
Kris, very funny, good storytelling. I wish you'd had more time to finish this thing up nice and tight, but it's done well enough to be mostly legible. I enjoyed it.
Pye, it was well made and drawn, but extremely boring. Katinka offers a lot of fun opportunities for character design, which you sort of ignored completely, and the story itself didn't really go anywhere. Girl goes somewhere, wants something, finger gets cut off. There was no real flair to it, the dialogue was as spartan as the story. Every story can be broken down to a simple statement, it's the details that make them interesting, and here they were lacking.
Pye, it was well made and drawn, but extremely boring. Katinka offers a lot of fun opportunities for character design, which you sort of ignored completely, and the story itself didn't really go anywhere. Girl goes somewhere, wants something, finger gets cut off. There was no real flair to it, the dialogue was as spartan as the story. Every story can be broken down to a simple statement, it's the details that make them interesting, and here they were lacking.
# 6
Posted:
Sep 26 2009, 09:45 PM
Upped and Loaded.
# 5
Posted:
Sep 21 2009, 08:46 PM
looking forward to this you guys
# 4
Posted:
Sep 21 2009, 08:38 PM
im a big fan of doc. Pye
# 3
Posted:
Sep 13 2009, 09:12 PM
YAYYYYYYY We missed yooooou! 8D
# 2
Posted:
Sep 12 2009, 02:36 PM
Oh! This will be interesting!
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Sep 12 2009, 02:20 PM
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