Seevah- That was a godd intro, but it was really just an intro.
It was spare even for 2 weeks, and I'm not the background guy, but you really needed some backgrounds. The colors didn't help it feel any less empty to me. I usually like your stuff a lot though, so maybe give yourself a longer deadline next time and watch the time management.

Betito- Like I've said before, you just keep growing as an artist and you're trying a lot of new stuff here. I liked the interesting layout and panel breaks. Liked the colors and the angles. Only gripe I had was with the lines being a little muddy, which I understood with the watercolors but then Page 8 and the top part of page 9 were so dark & clean and different line wise then the rest of your comic. Making it all look more like those pages would up the quality for me.

Betito: The bottom of the second page just made my day Great job

Philip: Is true! My perspective sucks haha! I will work on that.. and I keeping working on my anatomy, I will try do better.

Dimension: I like more pencil and watercolors too, I was testing here

Thank you very much for your critics and comments! n_n

@Seevah: yeah, I think a longer amount of drawing time will help you out. Quality wasn't very strong and the story was pretty incomplete. I like this character a lot though, he's a very fun and original dude. Work with a longer deadline on the next one

@Betitio: Well firstly, thank you for the cameo! You drew Scur a lot in there and got his personality down pretty nicely too, you're awesome. XD

I really like how you drew Mr. Tofu; his expressions and gestures were really fun. I think your pencils work better for your coloring  style than yours inks,  it suits it more. Your page layouts are really good and dynamic, it really helps make the story more interesting. I do agree that the perspective/foreshortening in some pages looked rather off; it was too exaggerated in some places.  The story was was alright, the grammar mistakes did distract a little bit, but not a whole lot. Again I like the pencils, but I feel that they could of been cleaned up a bit more in some pages. Nice work with this though!

Seevah: GIVE YOURSELF MORE TIME FOR THESE COMICS!! Seriously, no more 1 week or 2 week battles. I love the character of Mr. Tofu as he's quirky and I want to hear another story. However, your quality is really slipping and it's hard for me to really critique something that isn't finished.



Betito: Now this is a real step up for ya so far. My only true complaint is your perspective, and Martin's facial anatomy. For the perspective, well, last page is a perfect example of this as it looks like Martin is just sinking into quicksand or is standing in a hole. Brush up on some anatomy practice in the VCU forums because that's almost unforgivable and really drives the quality way down. Your colors are pretty good but I think they could be a lot better, everything was very bright here, and I think you could of evened things out by going with some darker tones (especially for the battle against the Tofu block), I dunno, you should ask Angieness for more about that as I hate coloring.

Overall it was pretty good, and get some help from Kotori for your grammar as well, I know english isn't your first language, but you should still work on it.

Very thanks Mrnoitaull,Fox24 and Mister Kent!!  n_n

Seevah - Your character design and expressions are good as usual
Betito - I love your rendition of Tofu (and bonus points for the cameos, especially the TL Bot cameo! So huggable!)

Martin you are killing it sir. Your stuff is great. and Fu well, your always entertaining to find out what you put.

Man Betito, you're getting to be dangerous battle by battle!
Love it!

Uploaded! :O
Alfin terminé

Good luck guys!!!! Buena suerte Betito!

Thanks for challenge me Seevah! Good luck! =)

Que divertido! n__n