Master of Disaster: Marooned / Danielle vs. Julius de Mizaori vs. The Butcher vs. Belael

Master of Disaster: Marooned / Danielle vs. Julius de Mizaori vs. The Butcher vs. Belael

Master of Disaster: Marooned — Danielle vs. Julius de Mizaori vs. The Butcher vs. Belael

37.1%
801 points
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by Kumaru

34.9%
752 points
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by Nakia

0%
0 points
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by Santana

28%
604 points
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Jetaime
Artist
100 comments
# 22   Posted: Aug 10 2009, 10:44 PM
neo: i like how this one looks very clean and consistent. it looks like you managed your time very well. i wish the reveal at the end was a little more drawn out, or presented in a different way, because it could have used a lot more impact.

kumaru: very well done. i don't really have any complaints. just clean it up a bit next time and it's all good.

synje: this one didn't have enough "marooned on a mysterious island" for me. i think this might've been a more enjoyable read if you had more time to work on each page.

Phill
Artist
895 comments
# 21   Posted: Aug 7 2009, 04:06 PM
And people think my comments are horrible...



Neo: Out of everybody here, you've got the most consistent comic in both story and quality, but you still have that bad habit of filling your comics with needless text. I said it before, and I'll say it again: "Brevity is the soul of wit" meaning if you can do something without an abundance of text, DO IT!! The first page is a good example of this as you could easily establish that Danielle is stranded (granted an extra panel showing the scale of the island would of cemented it easily without the need for narration) and I could tell visually what kind of situation Danielle was in. Again, if you can tell a story without a lot of dialogue it'll really strengthen your story telling skills and give your artwork some room to breath in.

The story I thought was OK, I found the meeting between her and Belael to be a bit odd, after getting spooked by Butcher, you'd think a meeting with a stranger like Belael would bring about a feeling of caution instead of Danielle going immediately onto the defense. Other than that however this was a strong showing.



Kumaru: Art alone gains my vote, but I feel like you should of used more solid blacks instead of tones and the backgrounds sorta lost their luster towards the end. Story here was pretty good, but I'm sorta annoyed at the fact that there's a "To be continued" in your story and Neo's. Gives me the impression that you two didn't finish, and usually when somebody loses a battle, they never finish their story. But like William I think that you could of easily stretched out this story as what you had was the most interesting story in this round. My vote goes to you but it was a rather close one.



Synje: Dude, your comic wasn't crappy, I'll say that and stick to it no matter how many people think I'm an idiot for saying that. BUT!! It sure as hell isn't your best work bro and you know it. You should really consider spending more time on these pages as the first page looks great (Minus the blur tool there on panel two). I get the feeling that you had to rush on the last couple of days as the quality after that page took a real nose dive, try doing one page every couple of days, it's a good way of keeping your motivation up and prevents you from rushing in the end.

Story here had a lot of promise, I liked how you used island cannibals, but I think you could of used more island stereotypes to your advantage (Volcano sacrifices, pirates, etc...).




Overall I thought this was a good first round. Vote goes to Kumaru followed by Neo.

William_Duel
Community Manager
924 comments
# 20   Posted: Aug 5 2009, 05:21 PM
Neo: Not much more extra for me to say that hasn't been said.  I liked the way Kumaru tidied up the dream but I feel like it could have  been done with a less cramped space and I could see how some people might have difficulty interpreting that page with regards to space.  

Kumaru: I also enjoyed your comic and your slightly different take on the characters.  I like your sparing use of tones and I think it complements your comic well without overpowering your art.  The way you handled the water is also interesting.  While your small flashback to Danielle's and Kumaru's meeting is probably warranted, it's a bit short and perhaps could have found a place earlier in the story.  Or you could have even stretched it out more but I really did like your comic.

Synje: The quality at the start of your comic is not so bad but overtime it seriously begins to degrade.  Maybe you had time issues and such, which may have been resolved by having less detailed ropes or some such.  

Santana
Artist
123 comments
# 19   Posted: Aug 5 2009, 02:19 PM
Yes, much better. Thank you.

King_Pong
Artist
601 comments
# 18   Posted: Aug 5 2009, 11:43 AM
I could say more, but the general gist of it would be that you need to ink more carefully, learn how to do action lines correctly, draw backgrounds that aren't just squiggles, think out your panel layouts better and in general not half ass everything.

You made a crappy comic, you got a crappy comment.  Seems like a fair trade off to me.

Santana
Artist
123 comments
# 17   Posted: Aug 5 2009, 07:46 AM
Was that is? Was that really your comment? If you dont have anything else to say then maybe you should just the fuck up

King_Pong
Artist
601 comments
# 16   Posted: Aug 4 2009, 07:31 PM
Neo:  I just couldn't get into this story.  It started out ok, but by the time I was halfway through I couldn't figure out why I was still reading it.  There's a lot going on, and it's just not coherent enough to carry me through.  This is a shame because you caught me with the opening - but then you lost me.

Kumaru: Yours is probably the most coherent in this half of the match. Your story flows wells, and your art is interesting even though you're using a different technique than usual.  I liked how easy this was to read, and I hope to see more.

Synje:  don't quit your day job.

Unless your day job is drawing comics.

Santana
Artist
123 comments
# 15   Posted: Aug 3 2009, 08:26 AM
Dammit DANE

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 14   Posted: Aug 3 2009, 07:43 AM
Because Neoicarus' last 2 pages were manually uploaded by Wei the tournament can't go up until Toast can put it up because manually uploaded pages don't show up in the manager for us. He'll get to it ASAP.

NeoIcarus
Artist
115 comments
# 13   Posted: Aug 3 2009, 12:00 AM
To Angie and Wei: Had a small snafu. I already sent both of you some pages. Telling you here just to be safe.

carlito
Artist
375 comments
# 12   Posted: Jul 16 2009, 08:13 AM
Go Kumaru! Go!

Dahque
15 comments
# 11   Posted: Jul 15 2009, 10:26 PM
fowlie: A CUTE LITTLE GIRL TRAPPED ON AN ISLAND WITH 3 MEN?!?!?! THIS COMIC WRITES ITSELF!!
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Uh-oh.

fowlie
Artist
177 comments
# 10   Posted: Jul 13 2009, 05:29 PM
A CUTE LITTLE GIRL TRAPPED ON AN ISLAND WITH 3 MEN?!?!?! THIS COMIC WRITES ITSELF!!

Craqued
Artist
202 comments
# 9   Posted: Jul 13 2009, 01:37 PM
kriiiisss IM EXCITED. THIS IS GONNA BE GOOD I CAN TELL.

JoshuaEliGilley
Artist
462 comments
# 8   Posted: Jul 13 2009, 10:59 AM
Kick some ass dudes!!

looking forward to this meeting of styles!

King_Pong
Artist
601 comments
# 7   Posted: Jul 13 2009, 10:09 AM
I hope this doesn't turn into a defaultaster.

Yosai
Artist
74 comments
# 6   Posted: Jul 13 2009, 07:13 AM
this gonna get messy. :O

Santana
Artist
123 comments
# 5   Posted: Jul 13 2009, 07:11 AM
Hah, this is funny. Me, Nakia and Neo all went to the same school. If 4am was in here it woulda been an Art Institute Fort Lauderdale battle.

Best of luck to everyone, looking forward to everyone's entries

Aluísio C. Santos
Artist
735 comments
# 4   Posted: Jul 13 2009, 06:13 AM
Oh boy oh boy, I'm looking forward to pure disaster

Wei Ingnan
Artist
597 comments
# 3   Posted: Jul 13 2009, 05:50 AM
Tourney Thread Updated with new info     http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=10818.msg178923#msg178923

NeoIcarus
Artist
115 comments
# 2   Posted: Jul 12 2009, 11:28 PM
Hugah...huwah....huguahhhh *drools uncontrollably* Th...ank *gulp* yoouuuu....

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 1   Posted: Jul 12 2009, 11:10 PM
Good luck you guys! I wanna see what you come up with

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 3 weeks
Ended: Aug 10th, 2009
Votes Cast: 35
Page Views: 2137
Winner: NeoIcarus
 

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