jhalton-you're still having some problems using tones as a background substitute, try to rely less on them in the future so you can get more bg practice in. I thought you had some cool layouts going on in this and I really liked page 5. Story wise you kind of jumped around a bit and I got pretty confused but I did like the ending.

Wiggen-art wise this was looking pretty good, you had some nice coloring in this. But you should never cheat and reuse backgrounds across 4 panels, that's just lazy haha Granted I can understand not wanting to redraw those buildings again, perhaps moving the camera around would have made the opening more exciting and you wouldn't have been able to reuse the backgrounds 4 times. I didn't care for the abrupt ending but obviously you ran out of time, I hope to see you do a little more with your BB that's coming up.

@Jhalton: the backgrounds you had looked nice, but I felt that  here needed to be more. Also the toning on page 2 was way too much for me D: I really liked how you used brush strokes in some areas like at the top of page 3; it looked pretty nice. Hmmm... The story was ok, I thought the ending was funny XD

Wiggen: pretty good, also lacking on the backgrounds though, except for on that first page where they look nice. I like how you drew Crow and the dynamic angles worked well. Good job!

Thanks guys, it's meant to be confusing though. Just wait till next time, it'll all be cleared up. I'm trying to make each one of these tell a story in order so it's more than just random battles.

crow I like the art that you did in the comic altho it was a bit confusing at points

todd bogart liked the sequentals but it was kindda short for me too wouldda been nice too see those first pages you burned

j- im feeling your b/w approach. placemtn is decent.Kinda lost me with the mind trip shock slightly. But over all cool.

Wig- love the clean color execution,but me short tho!

hey nobody's commenting.....

I wanna know what you think or if any experts have any tips

line tool? No, just pens and rulers.

But yea, maybe next time I'll just do all black and white, the screens are giving me a lot of problems since it's for web.

Thanks!

jhalton, still weak on the backgrounds. and the one point where it seemed like you did an ok job (perspective still seemed a little skewed) with line tool to get some detailed buildings, you covered it with the screentone & it killed it. again this felt overprocessed with huge shortcuts taken with photoshop & inconsistent line work. try to rely on your traditional skills more to tell story.

wiggen, the art was nice, but using more backgrounds would help you too. story wise though this all seemed like a middle with a slight recap. and while starting mid action sometimes makes for a nice beginning; having that & a rather sudden, uneventful ending didn't really work for me.

My first impression was to balk at it, but  I had a good long think about it at work this morning. So somewhere, somehow, the Pothole thing will happen.

And yeah, such a weird coincidence. It makes me feel less creative somehow. Maybe if I started writing actual stories instead of random encounters. I realized this morning, that my comic isn't much better than two guys randomly duking it out. Oh well. Food for thought. Has anyone caught the grammar error on the fifth page yet?

Haha, why not run w/ this story? I did set it up way down the line for you, like you said. But wouldn't that be a crazy story arc?

As for your pages, awesome!. I love how you drew my character, especially in the first page. I do think it's funny that our fight scenes both revolved around crow decapitating todd.....maybe that was too expected, but a funny coincidence.

If anyone's confused by the dream sequence, be patient, I'll add a beyond battle soon to explain more about it

I don't have time for anything too in-depth, but AWESOME Halton. So far I feel like my competitors do a better job portraying Todd than I do. The ending is also pretty lol, but no way I'm taking it as canon!

Uploaded. But, please, don't get too excited.

depends on how old you are

What now? Does that make me a cougar?

Also, my character's already dead. Killing him again seems redundant.

hahaha, i'll just tell em u seduced me for them.....since I just realized ur a girl after all.....

but why would u kill ur own character and call him lame?

Oh thanks a lot Halton, now I have to change MY ending or people will accuse me of breaking into your house and stealing your secret files.

BOTH ARE UNDEFEATED(well you know....)

WHO'LL TAKE THEIR FIRST L?!

i'm sure you're hilarious in your own mind.
though i'm pretty sure wiggen's a girl.

good luck wiggen

i'm gonna call his character lame and kill him in an excessively melodramatic scene.

o no! i just gave away the ending!!!!

Man I'm anxious to how this will work.

good luck guys, and like joshua said. Have fun

*insert wisecrack here*

nice match up, have fun kids!