Ronin vs. Stripe

Ronin vs. Stripe

Ronin vs. Stripe

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Kuro
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# 32   Posted: Mar 30 2009, 11:14 AM
yeah, your character looked pretty nice in action but everything else felt lacking to me. at least for someone of your skill set. the backgrounds & the fonts were already mentioned a couple of times. and like squid said the climax of the story was kind of wasted when it's shown so tiny & kind of tacked on to the bottom of a page like that. it would have served you much better to draw that action out larger to give it more importance. also too the continuity in the first three panels were a little odd. like he's slouching, then he's sitting upright & then you go back & reuse the slouch. that kind of thing. be wary of that in the future, & try to get away from reusing images while you're at it too.

squid
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# 31   Posted: Mar 29 2009, 07:32 PM
I liked this, fun short story.

I don't like the page 2 layout... something about the bottom panels... they were so small they had little impact... at least the panel of Ronin crashing though the window should've been close-up or something.. I think.

sometimes the style of the backgrounds is inconsistent with the foreground... like on page 3, where the lines are thinner on Ronin and Stripe but thick in the background. And, the cityscape on the page looks unfinished.

I also agree with Joshua about the font choice. Pretty nice job otherwise, though.

JoshuaEliGilley
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# 30   Posted: Mar 27 2009, 04:40 PM
Def. nice shit ninja, good job on the fighting/action.  However, I feel that the serif font didn't really compliment the style at all. BLAMBOT.COM or hand written would help.

americanninjax
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# 29   Posted: Mar 27 2009, 04:30 PM
Thanks ya'll. Yeha it was pretty basic in the end. I figured since Entervoid isn't just a 'hey look who's better' kind of place, but rather a place to better yourself in sequential art I'd experiment with doing a color comic in flash. I tried a few different formats and just made sure I got done the 3 pages necessary.  I just happened to do them like 4 times haha.

BornLoser
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# 28   Posted: Mar 27 2009, 11:36 AM
Ninja: Great art for the characters. I feel the backgrounds could have done with abit more work. Overall a good comic both art and storywise for its short duration.

Fox24
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# 27   Posted: Mar 27 2009, 03:58 AM
ouch people are meeeeeean. good stuff ninja

Phill
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# 26   Posted: Mar 27 2009, 02:30 AM
Oh ronin... do something soon for us OK?

Ninja: Not bad mang, wish you would of brought Stripe out sooner cause you've got an awesome style. But... I can't help but feel that you could of done more with this compared to your other works on DA. The story was OK, but honestly it's nothing I haven't seen before. Still though, not bad and I'm loving your style here.

americanninjax
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# 25   Posted: Mar 27 2009, 12:44 AM
No worries on my end Ronin. Thanks for offering up the challenge. Maybe things will go better next time!

ronin-soul
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# 24   Posted: Mar 26 2009, 05:13 PM
Something will be up sometime in the near future. I don't really care about defending myself at this point, but I AM sorry Ninja. Don't worry though, you will get to see something soon.

Darius Corry
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# 23   Posted: Mar 26 2009, 03:24 PM
Ninja, Awesome in all it's simpleness.

Ronin, if Revolver is true and RE is responsible, I'm somewhat empathetic. But to deny of us of the greatness is unforgivable.

Red
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# 22   Posted: Mar 26 2009, 02:44 PM
Ronin, that's sooo weak dude! Put down the RE5 and do some WORK. JEEEEEZ.

Stripe, your art is super awesome nice man! The only thing is that I wasn't really wowed by the story, but damn the art was nice.

Coldstream
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# 21   Posted: Mar 26 2009, 11:55 AM
Good stuff American Ninja... been admiring your work on DA for a while!!

Angie
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# 20   Posted: Mar 26 2009, 10:45 AM
And Ronin, you had until almost 2 PM today to get this in when I woke up. The site was up at 2 am before I went to sleep last night. If there were any technical problems that caused your default, you should have emailed me and Wei your pages. Otherwise,  you got to be the first person to default on their own extension they gave themselves. Oh boy.

Angie
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# 19   Posted: Mar 26 2009, 10:36 AM
The deadline was extended, last night was the true deadline. And yes, a human body has to put up the comics, they don't go up automatically and me and Wei aren't always up at 3am to put the comics up. So sometimes you have to wait.

Aluísio C. Santos
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# 18   Posted: Mar 26 2009, 07:50 AM
It will probably be up soon

americanninjax
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# 17   Posted: Mar 26 2009, 02:00 AM
So ready for some naivety? I uploaded my pages on the 19th, but they're not showing now that the due date has been extended and passed. It still says 'past due' up on top even though I submitted by the original date...am I f'n something up on my end?

Angie
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1937 comments
# 16   Posted: Mar 19 2009, 04:45 PM
Ronin had technical issues with getting an extension done, Toast fixed it and just now put the extension through.

americanninjax
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# 15   Posted: Mar 19 2009, 03:37 PM
annnnd done. I never want to draw stripe again LOL. Time to create a new character.

justarhymes
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# 14   Posted: Mar 9 2009, 06:46 AM
that was like the only comic lysol ever finished though lolololol

Monday
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# 13   Posted: Mar 8 2009, 11:28 AM
angieness: You better not try to cancel this time Stripe haha last time you had a battle you were fighting Lysol and it got canceled.
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keyword is Lysol.

JoshuaEliGilley
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# 12   Posted: Mar 6 2009, 08:35 AM
Ronin always takin on the heavy hitters!!
FUCKIN ROCK THIS SHIIIT!!!



Coldstream
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159 comments
# 11   Posted: Mar 6 2009, 08:00 AM
Cool stuff!!

Aluísio C. Santos
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735 comments
# 10   Posted: Mar 6 2009, 07:54 AM
Woa, sweet stuff

BADSTARHAIL

americanninjax
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# 9   Posted: Mar 6 2009, 04:01 AM
angieness: You better not try to cancel this time Stripe haha last time you had a battle you were fighting Lysol and it got canceled.
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haha. I didn't cancel last time. Lysol had some stuff to deal with and I agreed to drop the fight. So I guess I did cancel but I dididn't wanna.

Craqued
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# 8   Posted: Mar 6 2009, 01:31 AM
whaaa oh man, thisll be sweet

Qyzex
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# 7   Posted: Mar 6 2009, 01:10 AM
Good luck this time. Hopefully this one sees itself to completion, for both sides. :3

E.W. Schneider
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# 6   Posted: Mar 6 2009, 12:47 AM
What the fuck, how did this slip by?

Dude, awesome shit, good luck to you both.

voidstone333
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# 5   Posted: Mar 5 2009, 10:20 PM
nice really nice for the two well lemme see whos gonna be the toughest go go go

Kon
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# 4   Posted: Mar 5 2009, 10:08 PM
OMG. STRIPE VERSUS RONIN.

SATAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAN

aribooboo
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# 3   Posted: Mar 5 2009, 07:39 PM
I took one look at stripe's design sheet and fell in love. Now let's see what that pussy can do! C:<
Nice to see some more from you, Ronin! Make this good~

Angie
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1937 comments
# 2   Posted: Mar 5 2009, 07:27 PM
You better not try to cancel this time Stripe haha last time you had a battle you were fighting Lysol and it got canceled.

Monday
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933 comments
# 1   Posted: Mar 5 2009, 07:16 PM
whoa STRIPE ? like 05 STRIPE ?

you're LONG overdue for a first battle !

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Drawing Time: 2 weeks
Ended: Apr 1st, 2009
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