Jira vs. Winter

Jira vs. Winter

Jira vs. Winter

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by Vain

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Sleezmeister
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40 comments
# 18   Posted: Mar 25 2009, 04:00 PM
poor popsicle...

Darius Corry
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# 17   Posted: Mar 25 2009, 01:08 PM
blackfire- Man, I always love where you're headed, but you just never make it in time. Trust when I say I know how it is to stack your plate a little more than you realize you can handle.

Vain- Welcome! Great debut. I remember seeing you in the Inc. forums and thought he was cool (pun intended). I'll continue to stay tuned.

Ronin Inc
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# 16   Posted: Mar 25 2009, 12:37 PM
Thx for the crits everyone!! Still working on making my time managemtn flow better, Angie and Josh hit the nail on the head. I often plan too much battle and have no where near the speed to complete that magnitude yet. but I will keep at it, thx again for the support! :D

Aluísio C. Santos
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735 comments
# 15   Posted: Mar 25 2009, 06:43 AM
I have to say that Death by Popsicle is the most rad kill yet to be seen on Void so far

Vain
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# 14   Posted: Mar 25 2009, 12:53 AM
Hey

Thanks all for the comments and crits and cheers BFD for the battle I only wish you had done more I really enjoyed the way you portrayed Winter!
Overall I think I learned alot from doing this mainly that I need to plan out my story and make it flow better I tottally agree with everyone's comments about it being jumpy and sorta hard to follow hopefully my next battle will show improvements in the story and art.

Angie
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# 13   Posted: Mar 24 2009, 09:10 PM
blackfiredragon-Work on your time management dude! You could have done a lot more with the drawing time you had, so please work on that in the future.

Vain-Very nice for a first battle! I liked the grit that the textures added to your backgrounds and loved your expressive characters. But the story really lost me because you kind of jumped around, first he's eating ice cream then all of a sudden people are dying and Jira shows up the end. I would also like to see you slow down a little and tighten up that lineart some because coloring can only do so much to save lineart. Other than that the comic was looking very nice.

JoshuaEliGilley
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# 12   Posted: Mar 24 2009, 04:33 PM
blackfiredragon:

You have some good drawings in here, shows you have skills, just try to get faster, or find some inspiration cause 4 weeks is a lot of time to get 3 pages done. I tend to plan too much story myself, then I use up my time planning and don't have enough to actually do the comic. Focus on finishing the minimum next time, even if it can't tell a complete arc(although thats always nicer). IMO that would be a step in the right direction.

Vain:

Pretty slick, I laughed at winters demand to see the frozen goods! Nice paneling and clear story-telling, color/texture were used well overall.  The blood splatter looked kinda weak, I think the color was too transparent maybe.. also, the cop was missing his wound on the next page.
You've done a good job establishing your character/personality, would've been nice to see a little more of that with Jira, but overall It was entertaining  Cool ice-regenero power too, ya got me interested in the next chapter. Def. impressive 1st battle.

Anthonybaiz
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138 comments
# 11   Posted: Mar 22 2009, 10:40 AM
whats up with the Ice arm?i Like the idea, but a little confused about the whole thing.

kirei-kuro
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# 10   Posted: Mar 21 2009, 09:26 AM
blackfiredragon: My apologies, but this really wasn't that great. I like you art overall, but you had basically NO backgrounds after the first few panels. Also, the announcer girl looked really awkward in that "Ready - FIGHT" pose. Also, like Dimension said, the length was a problem, and the simplicity and concept were pretty weak and uncreative.

Vain: Pretty funny first battle! I guess it's just my personal sense of humor, but it wasn't as funny to me as it was to Sean and Dimension. I liked the sort of flat, bleak colors you used. However, the perspective was a little off. Also, the storyline was kinda random - it didn't flow very well for me. Like, he was in the store, then he was suddenly outside, then he was suddenly meeting Jira on the street.
Even so, I like Winter pretty well. I think he'd be a good match for my char. Mamoru (when I load 'im. XD)

Dimension
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# 9   Posted: Mar 19 2009, 06:22 PM
@blackfiredragon:  Too bad you couldn't finish man, the first few pages looked nice. The story was really simple though and came off as a bit uncreative.

@Vain: Sweet first battle! :3 Winter seems like a pretty interesting and fun guy. You had some nice colors and backgrounds going on, but the perspective was off many times. The characters felt more out of perspective though, they seemed too small or too big even while they're supposed to be at a certain distance (like that cop). I think this was a nice comic overall and I hope to see more soon!

Ronin Inc
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# 8   Posted: Mar 19 2009, 05:49 AM
LOL!!!! Vain that battle was friggin HILARIOUS!! Im diggin the color choices as well man, keep it up!!

Ronin Inc
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# 7   Posted: Mar 18 2009, 09:32 PM
Uploaded!! Same time management issues though...apologies for the short length everyone! I meant for this battle to include A LOT more. Oh welll, shoulda-coulda-woulda, right?

Sleezmeister
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# 6   Posted: Mar 18 2009, 08:18 PM
HOLY EXITEMENT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Vain
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11 comments
# 5   Posted: Mar 18 2009, 03:08 PM
uploaded :D

Aluísio C. Santos
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735 comments
# 4   Posted: Feb 18 2009, 03:47 PM
Ice and ninjas!??!
WINN

IWIHASCOE
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178 comments
# 3   Posted: Feb 18 2009, 03:00 PM
I failed Vain with my busy life ;_;

JoshuaEliGilley
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462 comments
# 2   Posted: Feb 18 2009, 02:32 PM
YEAH YEAH YEAH!!!

Dimension
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489 comments
# 1   Posted: Feb 18 2009, 02:29 PM
good look with this battle dudes~

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Drawing Time: 4 weeks
Ended: Mar 25th, 2009
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