Sentai Tournament / The Anaconda vs. Kigan Rider

Sentai Tournament — The Anaconda vs. Kigan Rider

by (Pi)

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JoshuaEliGilley
Artist
462 comments
# 21   Posted: Feb 7 2009, 10:04 AM
Pi:
I liked this and I think your anatomy is improving for sure. Lot of dynamic poses here and you pulled them off well even the wrestling moves! Only one looked wonky was "rider spear" just because I think you would see more of a 3/4 view of the torso if he punched like that, instead of the profile view as is.
Overall one of the best comics I've seen from you art-wise, story-wise it didn't intereast me as much as your others.

Baratatata:
DAMN DUDE, URA PAGE MONSTER!!!  I'm feelin the thick n chunky lines and like what you're doing with the tones. looks cool.  Some more complex scenes get garbled though (like panel 4 pg. 9), so try varying weights at least on those.
I liked the story, good depth of character, lots of pages but not too much text, good balance there. Impressive first battle!!

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 20   Posted: Feb 6 2009, 09:12 AM
Pi-Remember to send thumbnails to both me and Wei since I didn't get your thumbnails until way after I'd put the battle up. I really want to see you step away from doing tournaments and special events for a while. Because while you have some solid writing, you always end up planning too big and being unable to finish. You should really buckle down and just do an awesome 4 weeker that's on par with that last BB you did for Dr.Pye. Your anatomy is improving but you still have a ways to go. Also try to be careful with your font choices and layout because the ginormous attack name in the middle of the art didn't work so well.

Baratacom-I was impressed that you managed to keep consistent quality and finish a comic this long in a week. There were a few pages that were kind of unnecessary and hurt your pacing. Like having a whole black page devoted to just step step step implies that this guy is having like the longest walk ever. It would have been better to just like have a big pretty establishing shot then cut to a panel of him walking or something. The other huge black page where he says "I won't lose" could have been pulled off better. Like maybe just have him in the process of dying or yelling or something and it kind of fades into the back and THEN you see the "I won't lose" and blackness.  I'd also like to see you tone down the toning a lot, maybe lower the opacity of it so it doesn't overwhelm the lineart as much. Other than that it was pretty solid, the story was pretty good and you gave me a chance to get more attached to the characters than some of the other entries.

jv7x
Artist
99 comments
# 19   Posted: Feb 3 2009, 06:06 PM
CRAP!  I just spent 15 minutes typing up comments and they got erased.  Ugh!  I don't have the patients to do all that over again so I'm just gonna do the highlights.  Sorry.

Baratacom:  Impressed by so many pages and consistent art.  Disappointed about some of the quality on some panels.  Think you could have used the zip tone a bit more sparringly.  

Thomas:  Lot's of improvement since the last time I saw your art (like 3 years ago).  Very vanilla story like any opponent could have been substituted in there and it wouldn't have mattered.  

Crappy comments I know but I lose all will to type after I've done it once and failed.  
JV

squid
Artist
421 comments
# 18   Posted: Feb 3 2009, 05:09 PM
pi- I liked your drawings. The comic seemed good for a short story, even if kinda cliche. I really wish it hadn't started with "VOID CITY....." just because a lot of comics around here seem to start similarly. @-@

barata- I like your art style... it's kinda that "controlled sketching" type of style. XD Maybe needs more backgrounds though. I understand they were in a desert, but I still think it was lacking. they weren't always getting the same amount of attention as the characters.
I don't think this comic needed to be 20 pages, though... There was too much verbal back-and-forth were they should have just gotten to the point.
Also.. it seemed to be unintentionally funny sometimes... like the "STEP STEP STEP" page which transistions to the shoe saying "step"(at least it looks like it). and then the Anaconda saying "I won't lose" and then the next panel is a cemetary. XDDD I also have a weird sense of humor.
but yeah pretty nice job.

ChrisAdrift
18 comments
# 17   Posted: Feb 3 2009, 04:08 PM
Pi--Interesting stuff.  Some nice, clear action too.
I actually prefer the un-inked panels, though.  The drawings lose some life between the pencils and the inks, and the pencils actually look more solid, anatomy-wise, than the inks.  I think if you could refine and clean up your pencils just a little more, you could just stick with them without the inking.  
Also, the wrestling move call outs are cool, but they really stuck out against the art.  Try playing with the font some more, or just hand lettering them.  

Baratacom--Interested to see where your story might go next, too.  Some solid drawing and anatomy, but first thing I really gotta say:  lay off the dots, or just be more careful how you place them.  It's cool to use them for contrast and shading, but there should be more difference between the size and spacing for different objects, and the groupings could be shaped better in certain places.  Really, I'd just get rid of 'em since I don't think you need them.  
Also, when the action gets going, it gets harder to tell what's happening.  The inking gets way too sketchy and muddy.  Just watch out for that and make sure we can tell which parts belong to which characters.  Other than the muddy fighting and all the dots, I really did like the art.  

Faux
Artist
32 comments
# 16   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 07:31 PM
Pi- interesting, very entertaining story. Why wouldn't Anaconda let Rider into Void though? *tilts head* Great action scenes and movement, I liked the dialogue, and my advise for you would be to clean up your lineart a bit so it's not so sketchy. Great job!
Barat- I liked how you began and ended the battle with those big black screens saying I won't lose, but I think the one with “step step step” was unnecessary, a transition panel would have worked just as well. I would cut back on using that one, sparse dot screen tone and use a straightedge when doing the backgrounds. Also having Rider say "as if" kind of makes him sound like a pubescent girl, or Shadow Kat; and the dialogue of "here I come" "here he comes" seemed a bit repetitive to me. Other than that, awesome battle! I love the expressions you use, personality you give your characters, story, and fight scenes!

Baratacom
Artist
36 comments
# 15   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 02:35 PM
Hey there Pi, really cool story!

Really liked how you portrayed Kigan, really gloomy and regretful, perhaps even more than I intended him to be, but don't sweat it, it came off pretty cool, reminded me of the atmosphere in Kamen Rider Black whenever Shadow Moon was around (yes, it's a compliment).

Just one thing is that the ending seemed kinda rushed, couple more attacks would help this, not to mention that it wasn't completely clear that Kigan's henshin belt was damaged (kinda hard to notice), some more focus on this fact alone would've helped it overall.

And thanks for the compliments everyone, especially Pi's, I was a bit afraid of not getting the character right, but it was pretty cool to draw Anaconda nevertheless!

Kon
Artist
194 comments
# 14   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 12:27 PM
+1 Perca.

Pye> It's getting better, I can feel it. I just think Sentai Tournament was a bit unfair for you, you were against some really strong opponent. A newcomer that no one suspected. I must also say that it look really unfinished, I'm quite sad about it. Looks more like roughs than the actual thing.

Bara> I didn't expect that at all, good work for you're first entry!

IWIHASCOE
Artist
178 comments
# 13   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 11:46 AM
Can't believe people are no commenting on this...

Ok, I won't crit you bara, I already did ir, you know what i think.

Pye - Man I think your anatomy and consistence are getting better and better. Even with the unfinished lines, I can see a huge improvement, your action scenes are pretteh good, rock on! I was a bit meh about the story though, sounded a bit too cheesy for me, but since sentais are super cheesy, I understand. I think it sounded a bit too dramatic, maybe it's just me. I was expecting a bit more lucharam!!!! feeling, I think that's why. Overall, sad thing u could not finish but at least u made the plot in a way we can tell and enjoy.

Good luck both of you. Keep the improvement coming forever!

(Pi)
Artist
475 comments
# 12   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 11:38 AM
Jeezus fuck, B, if that's what you can do in a week, I can't wait to see what you can do with a month. Couldn't have written Marco better myself.

(Pi)
Artist
475 comments
# 11   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 04:44 AM
uploaded. i'm looking forward to baratacom's as well.

this was a really fun battle to do, even if i didn't really finish it. after hacking out the script, chopping down the fight scene, and cutting it down to the bare minimum, i still couldn't find something i could be satisfied with at less than six pages. even if i don't go on, i still like what i did, and it was really neat to do just action for a change.

thanks for the match, b, even if kigan rider is a bitch and a half to draw.

Baratacom
Artist
36 comments
# 10   Posted: Feb 1 2009, 04:21 PM
Posted.

Can't wait to take a look at Pi's entry.

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 9   Posted: Feb 1 2009, 09:19 AM
It seems people are having issues uploading battles at the moment. If you have problems, email your pages to me and Wei. You can find our contact info here http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=3218.0

bicentennial man
Artist
55 comments
# 8   Posted: Jan 26 2009, 08:36 AM
very nice indeed

bicentennial man
Artist
55 comments
# 7   Posted: Jan 26 2009, 08:36 AM
very nice indeed

Baratacom
Artist
36 comments
# 6   Posted: Jan 26 2009, 05:07 AM
Ok guys, let's do this.

LEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEROOOOOOOOOOOYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY-

Aluísio C. Santos
Artist
735 comments
# 5   Posted: Jan 26 2009, 04:15 AM
This is gonna be sexy

Sageby
Artist
13 comments
# 4   Posted: Jan 26 2009, 03:40 AM
Good luck both!

Delani
Artist
14 comments
# 3   Posted: Jan 25 2009, 10:14 PM
D:  I fear!  The sheer awesomeness may destroy me!

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 2   Posted: Jan 25 2009, 09:33 PM
GOOD LUCK KIDS

E.W. Schneider
Artist
1070 comments
# 1   Posted: Jan 25 2009, 09:30 PM
GOOD LUCK YOU GUYS! GOOD FIRST BATTLE BARATACOM! SHOW US HOW ITS DONE PI!

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Death Match
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Ended: Feb 8th, 2009
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