Sentai Tournament / Miss Lemon vs. KID ATOM

Sentai Tournament / Miss Lemon vs. KID ATOM

Sentai Tournament — Miss Lemon vs. KID ATOM

by Kon

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squid
Artist
421 comments
# 29   Posted: Feb 8 2009, 02:03 PM
DK- I think you should have put more stars in the sky in that first panel, because when Kid Atom called it a "sea of light" I was like, "what sea? There's like twenty stars there..." But mostly it was a good comic. :3

Kon- Nice inks... you have a very interesting sense of humor... it kind of lost me, though. ^^ But I thought the fusion thing was funny..

amazingdavid
Artist
441 comments
# 28   Posted: Feb 5 2009, 09:40 AM
Kon: Man..sometimes your stories are shear nonsense and that amuses me.  It's like watching the Cantonese sub of "shaolin Soccer" ...if you watch it you will know what I mean.  anywho the art was a little confusing sometimes, but overall was pretty strong. Keep at it man.

TODK: BRILLIANT! I would buy this comic. Seriously, all I kept thinking through this was "I wish this was a book...I'd totally buy it"  your writing is top notch and kept up a good pace...no lolligagging. The action was well drawn the characters felt real and had their own distinct voices.  I hope to see more from you...my only complaint is CLEAN UP YOUR FUCKING PAGES!! there were pencil marks and smudges and dirt all over these things..maybe Im being anal but seriously it was distracting...

ChrisAdrift
18 comments
# 27   Posted: Feb 4 2009, 11:42 PM
Kon--Ha, nice story :)  
Ah, darn it, that's what it is...what angieness said about varying line thicknesses and/or using tones.  
Also, page 4:  The bit in the bottom corner showing Kid Atom going into the mech:  Could use a panel border around it.  I went back and forth between 4 and 5 a couple times before I understood what was going on there..at first I thought he got away or something and was falling through the sky.  
Other than that, I like the art a lot.  Some great energy and fun to it.  

Dark Knight--Some more great energy to your art, too.  Engrossing story, and some really nicely drawn action.  

These were really a couple of kick ass entries :)  

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 26   Posted: Feb 3 2009, 12:59 PM
Kon-I'm really glad that you have started to step away from the solid blacks a bit, your stuff is a lot easier to read now. I'll echo what others have said before me and say that you need some variation in your linewidths. If you don't want to go that route, you can give your work some toning either digitally or with markers to help differentiate objects from one another. Story wise I didn't really get into it since it felt like you jumped around quite a bit.

TODK-I'm happy to see you back in action on Void and I really hope that this time around you're able to give the tournament your all. I really enjoyed the interaction between the characters and this was one of the few Sentai Entries I really got into. My one complaint though is you need to do a better job cleaning up your stuff! It sucks to see all these random pencil lines that shouldn't be there.

jv7x
Artist
99 comments
# 25   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 05:31 PM
Kon: I have to agree that some work on your line weights would do wonders for your art.  I had to go back and reread your pages a few times to figure out what was going on.  I'm not a huge fan of random comedy but a few of the lines made me chuckle.  Nice work there.  Plus, it should be said somewhere that I really love Miss Lemon's design.  I think in the end tho, stopping where you did was the biggest disappointment and one that effected my decision the most.  

TODK:  I got to say I was floored by your comic.  The story was great, art was great, everything was great.  I totally loved it.  I'm always surprised about how great storytellers can cram so much goodness in so few pages.  Keep up the great work and I see you winning this thing.  

Awesome work, the both of you!
JV

Jetaime
Artist
100 comments
# 24   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 02:09 PM
kon: i think it would help your art a lot to separate the foreground and background elements. things like having a sort of white halo around the foreground parts where the background lines can't go (you do this a bit already), or using thicker lines for the foreground and thinner lines for the background. doing this will help you emphasize the parts of each panel that you want us to focus on. the story was pretty crazy, but i didn't have any trouble figuring out what was going on. i thought it was hilarious that mr. squeezer just grabbed kid atom and stuck him up his butt.

TODK: excellent pacing and paneling, energetic artwork, and fun story. strong comic all-around.

carlito
Artist
375 comments
# 23   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 12:42 PM
Kon- I was lost. Also, it was 6 pages and didn't feel like anything happened, and what did happen I didn't understand.

DK- Man, I'm glad you came back. I had only seen your stuff in color, but the black and white was beautiful! Loved your comic.Can't wait for next round. Don't end up defaulting like last time either! I think you might of won that one or at least got to the final if you didn't default

King_Pong
Artist
601 comments
# 22   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 11:42 AM
time is something there is very little of in france.

Kon
Artist
194 comments
# 21   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 11:27 AM
I feel like doing the "YOu'll see on next roouund" was a bad thing. I should've added the transformation. Plus the last page was pretty finished. Ran out of time because I live in France and that I couldn't access my scanner too late, so I couldn't finish that one last page.
Anyway, I'm glad the humor worked a bit, I thought it was way too random x)

luniara
Artist
528 comments
# 20   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 11:07 AM
Short and Sorta Sweet:

Kon: Really random, but I felt there was no humor or anything to it once it ended so abruptly. Ran outta time?

DarkKnight: Good pacing, great expressions and I love your inking.

sawbones
22 comments
# 19   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 10:38 AM
BK, you're always a winner in my eyes. The last two pages were a little confusing visually, though - but not enough that I couldn't figure it out.

Kon
Artist
194 comments
# 18   Posted: Feb 2 2009, 09:11 AM
Okay, I must admit that what you did was way more interesting that my comic. It's like ATOOOMIC.
Your drawings were pretty good, I must admit I was confused at first on the last panel when Kid atom is looking for his girlfriend, I still wonder if she was uncounscious because of the blow or if she was running away. I loved the humor, it was great. I really like what you did with my lemonade girl, she was a beauty.
I think you really kicked my ass here.

All my love,
Miss Lemon.

Delani
Artist
14 comments
# 17   Posted: Feb 1 2009, 10:55 PM
Colin stole my thunder...

Qyzex
Artist
670 comments
# 16   Posted: Feb 1 2009, 08:21 PM
~orgasms~


Oh wait... that wasn't supposed to happen...

The One Dark Knight
Artist
128 comments
# 15   Posted: Feb 1 2009, 06:02 PM
UPLOAD COMPLETE

all women in a five mile radius will now orgasm

Kon
Artist
194 comments
# 14   Posted: Feb 1 2009, 01:28 PM
UPLOOAAADED.
Apparently it worked angie, I hope you can check for me to tell me x)

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 13   Posted: Feb 1 2009, 09:19 AM
It seems people are having issues uploading battles at the moment. If you have problems, email your pages to me and Wei. You can find our contact info here http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=3218.0

Kon
Artist
194 comments
# 12   Posted: Jan 28 2009, 04:02 AM
I can tell you only one things Kid atom... I HOPE YOU LIKE SOME LEMONADE ROBOT FUSION

Baratacom
Artist
36 comments
# 11   Posted: Jan 26 2009, 09:49 PM
However wins, the outcome is obvious: atomic lemonade.

So we all win.

carlito
Artist
375 comments
# 10   Posted: Jan 26 2009, 12:59 PM
Welcome back DK

Good luck to you too Kon.
This should be sick

Baratacom
Artist
36 comments
# 9   Posted: Jan 26 2009, 12:39 PM
However wins, the outcome is obvious: atomic lemonade.

So we all win.

Aluísio C. Santos
Artist
735 comments
# 8   Posted: Jan 26 2009, 04:14 AM
Squeeze my lemon baby!

Sageby
Artist
13 comments
# 7   Posted: Jan 26 2009, 03:43 AM
Hit that like your name is Tsar Bomba. Both of you!

Kon
Artist
194 comments
# 6   Posted: Jan 25 2009, 11:18 PM
You don't know it but you love the lemoooon.

The One Dark Knight
Artist
128 comments
# 5   Posted: Jan 25 2009, 10:30 PM
VIOLENCE

Delani
Artist
14 comments
# 4   Posted: Jan 25 2009, 10:08 PM
Tom, you're too cosmic to lose to a lemon!

Kon, I don't know you, but I secretly want you to melt Tom's face.  Can you do this please?

Good luck!

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 3   Posted: Jan 25 2009, 09:31 PM
Awesome homeslice

Qyzex
Artist
670 comments
# 2   Posted: Jan 25 2009, 09:29 PM
FUCK YEAH. TO THE EXTREME

E.W. Schneider
Artist
1057 comments
# 1   Posted: Jan 25 2009, 09:28 PM
ROCK FACES YOU TWO.

Comic Details -

 
Type: Death Match
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Feb 8th, 2009
Votes Cast: 50
Page Views: 1611
Winner: The One Dark Knight
 

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