Queen of VOID 2006: Round 1 / Ayumi vs. Ty

Queen of VOID 2006: Round 1 / Ayumi vs. Ty

Queen of VOID 2006: Round 1 — Ayumi vs. Ty

by Marley

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by Mase

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Rtv!
Artist
603 comments
# 43   Posted: Sep 18 2006, 10:35 PM
I ment to say \'how you play with black, whites and gray\'. No racial shit intended, lol.
Keep up the good stuff.

Rtv!
Artist
603 comments
# 42   Posted: Sep 18 2006, 10:33 PM
SHorty
You really had me re-reading the first 3 pages, i like the long shot where Ayumi puts each of her clothing on, brilliant. Those empty spaces, the exact opposite of what i do..the cram the shit out of it with content. You on the other hand gave it a cinematic flourish by actually making the reader pass a few seconds scrolling, again..brilliant. Sweet Estrella cameo too.
The part where Ayumi meets Ty is also an enjoyable and memorable moment. Ty\'s roll over elbow caught my eye too. Glad to see more oldskoolers coming back.

Mase
Yours flowed pretty good as well, although it felt short.
I love that page where Ayumi and Ty face off with a desk inbetween em. I like those fukking freeze frame movie images ALOT, that was hot. I also like how you play black and whites and some of the angles you pick. I cvould actually hear Ty speak in my head with that Jamaican accent  you slapped on there.
The fight behind the closed door didn\'t bother me too much as i was mostly paying attention to the secretary\'s responses and dynamic body language. In this fight the way you ended it, i can only speculate what the fukk happened behind that door till the story continues. I love it, keep me on my toes!

Marley
Artist
259 comments
# 41   Posted: Sep 18 2006, 11:02 AM
Thank you so much matt, and I totally agree with you about my fight scene being a little awkward and abrupt. I\'ve done very few fight scenes in my comics and its one of the reasons why I came back to do battles. I want to practice my fight scenes some more, since they are my weakest.

I really respect people who do great technical fight scenes because its seriously damn hard work!!!

MaxximumMATT
Artist
84 comments
# 40   Posted: Sep 17 2006, 11:17 PM
Okay.. i\'ve just got to comment on this one. It being so epic and all.

I tried very hard to analyse how i voted on this fight... partially because i felt if i wasn\'t careful i would end up being biased towards shortfury because of how much i\'ve enjoyed her PAST battles and am glad to see her back, but also because BOTH of these fighters are amazing and i don\'t want to be one of those people who gives A+\'s across the board for no other reason than that they liked the IDEA of the fight.

Shortfury... You have always had a unique style and it seems to only have increased during your hiatus from Void. The use of negative space.. the drawings of your characters.. everything was done nicely. Plus for a comic in B&W never once did i think it felt incomplete. As the story goes.. lovely pacing. the negative space lent to that as well. I also enjoy scenes like the one with Ayumi and James in the beginning- it had a very \"we\'ve been together a long time and are comfortable with each other\" feel to it. Kind of matter of fact and not about gratuitous nudity. That actually adds alot to a story... it says alot about the characters for someone who may not know who they are.. says alot about their relationship. That there is good storytelling. Estrella was kinda human- seeming... but that\'s cool. The way she just appears at the right places still gives her that Estrella feeling. The weakest (using that word loosely) point may be the action. Now as your style tends to do it was very realistic and i didn\'t have a problem with it not being super crazy action shots or impossible matrix moves.. but i felt Ty went down a bit quick after all the build up. Coulda been more... epic... being Ayumi\'s come back and all. Other than that.. i liked the story you went with here and how you portrayed it.

Mase! Colored, nicely rendered.. very realistic looking characters.. your art is crazy sweet for the most part in this one! I must say. real nice. Easy to follow.. the whole nine yards. BUT.. easy as it was to follow i think story-wise something like this would be better delivered better with a bit... more. I think there needed to be a bit more to confrontation between the two. You should\'ve seen them fight if only so you could\'ve had the internal dialogue of Ty that would show her awakening more brilliantly. The way it\'s done (bam!bam! behind a wall and then she\'s awakened) is a bit too simple. It wasn\'t boring... it just wasn\'t very deep either because of that. I can tell you have more for us though... practice your storytelling a bit and you\'ll have challengers crapping their pants.

Great fights both of you. See you both in the ring sometime. :) (runs off before people realise he\'s giving critique to people much more talented than himself)

Iketeruguy
Artist
220 comments
# 39   Posted: Sep 15 2006, 08:03 PM
Marley, you have gotten a lot better.  Your style has really been refined since I last saw you.  I can see Spikes\' influence in your backgrounds.  They\'re very clean, have a lot of character, and are shown at some nice angles.  The pacing was brilliant.  I really liked the \"page breaks\" as Spikes called them.  They really broke the story down well.  Great, great flow.  You\'ve really impressed me with this.  I have to say, seeing you and James back makes me want to follow suit.

Mase, I liked your coloring, and you had some good panels, but it felt rushed at the end.  I thought the sound of fighting from outside of the office was a nice touch, but not at the expence of actually seeing the fight.  Overall, I think you did a good job.  The more you keep it up, the more refined you\'ll get.  Your style still looks like it\'s growing, so I wouldn\'t be surprised to see a dramatic difference in a little while.  Keep up the good work!

Marley
Artist
259 comments
# 38   Posted: Sep 14 2006, 01:49 PM
ALRIGHT NOBODY LOVES ME NOW THANKS!!!

Guys its time for some chamomile tea, and some lavender candles. Please let the rest of this debate be exchanged in pms or aim. PLEASE PLEASE

Pong you are entitled to your opinion. Thats why there are all kinds of comics for all kinds of people. Just send it to james somewhere that isn\'t on here. I\'m going to see if these comments can get deleted.

Mase I apologize for the crazy =(

sheldon
Artist
141 comments
# 37   Posted: Sep 14 2006, 02:57 AM
hahahahaha goddamn.

pong got destroyed. there\'s no \'trying to look cool\' after a rebuttle like that.

Marley
Artist
259 comments
# 36   Posted: Sep 14 2006, 12:13 AM
On the boobs. The way I tried to portray this was not in a exploitive manner. More like a \"when people are in a relationship often they sit around in their undies or nude.\" Plus bras are really uncomfortable incase nobody knows =P I really enjoy when comics portray sex and nudity as frank. Just something that happens. Not an event that the entire cycle of your story is dependant on, or used for a cheap thrill. I kind of wanted to emulate that for their relationship.  <3

physic
Artist
67 comments
# 35   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 11:06 PM
hmmm i swore i posted on this, oh well guess i got to do it again, maybe i didnt hit submit
Ayumi\'s fight was drawn decently but it felt boring, and some parts seemed useless, it had good storytelling (art)but the action didnt really sell for me. while technically it was strong, didnt sell the story really. felt stiff, the begining part even with the boob shot, seemed like do i really need to see this?
Mase felt a little better but it had problems, like the fight scene behind the door the payoff wasnt as good, but it did feel a little more entertaining and engaging, I think they were really close, im gonna vote just based on how each rated in each category, i wont even do teh math of who i think won.

Kamicheetah
Artist
30 comments
# 34   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 04:20 PM
ohoh.. lemme clarify bout the wide space thing. D: I\'ve always had that problem with wide shots when I look at them like I\'ll be staring at a tree in a background like \"Why do I need to see this damned tree..?\" So that\'s like personal opinion. Don\'t wanna give the wrong impression. <:[

Kamicheetah
Artist
30 comments
# 33   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 04:16 PM
;o; Yayy \'unretired\' Ty! <3 She\'s onna my favs. For sure. Iunno, I liked both sets of sequences. I kind of liked the bit of back story going on in Mase\'s. It wasn\'t a motormouth convention it was short and gave you the basic idea of what was goin\' on. My only complaint is yeah really short. ;; but that\'s not really botherin\' me too much cause Ty.<3 Yeah I\'m biased. Shutup >:[

Shortfury! I ususally HATE realistic detail on comics but I like yours. For serious, You handle expressions wonderfully. I gotta admit alotta the frames seemed kinda empty to me. Not like they lacked backgrounds or something just alotta space with not much going on. It made me drag my eyes a bit around the pages but all n\' all, still good stuff!

BSLuGeth
Artist
49 comments
# 32   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 03:53 PM
...I guess I\'m crazy, but I liked Ty\'s fight more. The flow was easier to follow, and it accomplished setting the backstory down smoothly. I didn\'t mind the fighting behind closed doors, laziness or no, it was effective and that\'s all that really matters.

The flow in Ayumi\'s fight was...choppy. The background art was slick, and the angled fight shots were more difficult (props for that) but it felt more mechanical. The road back to glory is great impetus, that I really dig, but halfway through it lost something for me.

Haha, great job both of you.

Marley
Artist
259 comments
# 31   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 11:36 AM
AWE DAMNIT!!! I WAS LOGGED IN AS JAMES. That was me who posted last =P

James
Artist
90 comments
# 30   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 11:35 AM
Mase that was really awesome! I love how you draw ayumi, and that color transition while she\'s talking from blue to red was super hot!! Thanks for providing such an intense fight!

I wish I had more time to tone and make the pages a little more dense <3 It took two days for me to scan it all on the dinky scanner, so i kinda ran out of time =P

Thanks for the love you guys!!

Dive
Artist
13 comments
# 29   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 11:21 AM
Egad, it looks like the best fight happened in the first round.  Both of these are great, but its going to take a lot of thinking on how to vote on this one.  Great job you two.

Mase
Artist
81 comments
# 28   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 10:43 AM
Ayumi had to fight Ty in order to \"reactivate\" her powers.  Sorry to those who found it confusing.  I\'ll probably just get rid of her powers anyway - too ambiguous.  
Marley - great fight!  Love that Ong Bak back elbow - I\'ll have to use that one.  I hope you go all the way!

Scarn
Artist
54 comments
# 27   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 10:30 AM
Shortfury - you\'re story was very entertaining, and an impressive size! Though it looks like you could work on your legs more, ayumi tended to have short - awkward legs.

Mase - well done on the colouring! the fourth page is my fav. as well, but more for the way you drew ayumi, than for the colouring.

This was a VERY close battle, but I always feel that my vote is wasted if I don\'t pick a winner, so I went with Shortfury\'s Ayumi, for her great story-telling. Gratz!

jesse
141 comments
# 26   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 09:17 AM
Oh wait. It says it on the Battles page.

jesse
141 comments
# 25   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 09:17 AM
I CAN\'T TELL WHO\'S WINNING!

Curse this strange double-BB-format.

Molotov
Artist
174 comments
# 24   Posted: Sep 13 2006, 02:57 AM
Mase: I Understand the pain that is coloring the thing... and that panel with ayumi jumping to        secretary Ty was the best one for me... I like alot the way you draw man I really do...

Shortfury: wow thats all Im gonan say... wow

PONBIKI
Artist
183 comments
# 23   Posted: Sep 12 2006, 05:44 PM
awesome fight the both of you i had to go with ayumi..not because she drew up a kick ass Estrella but the pacing the style man theirs to many good things about it...mase it was good but you lacked in the entertaining with a fight behind a closed door showed a bit of lazyness.
good job though you have nice pacing too and art.
mar great job.

ImaGEEnat!On
Artist
128 comments
# 22   Posted: Sep 12 2006, 05:21 PM
Shortfury, That was fucking brilliant! Freakin\' good job mate, especially the art...I love thAt simplistic art that you do! ACE!

Mase- Great art, but nonetheless the story is kinda cunfusing.
Great freaking battle guys!

James
Artist
90 comments
# 21   Posted: Sep 12 2006, 05:19 PM
shit! nice, its up

mase: nice touch with ty being \'retired\'. it was a little too short and the ending kinda fizzled out, but you had some decent frames in there. i wish you also kept up with the backgrounds/environments... you couldve added so much more personality to tys working environment! still a decent entry, keep it up.

marley, you already know you have complete mastery over pacing and compositions. i first thought you were being overtly ambitious with 15 pages, but now that i read it all consecutively its fucking perfect.... not too long, not too short. it floed like an iceberg. BITCHES TAKE HEED! draw more page breaks like in this fight!!

luniara
Artist
528 comments
# 20   Posted: Sep 12 2006, 05:15 PM
Mar- GIRRRRRRL, I fucking LOVE you. You will always be someone I look up to! The story, the WHOLE FLOW of it is amazing! 15 pages is PERFECT for what it was. Ayumi doesnt need a damn tournament for us to know shes totally the queen of void. I\'m totally proud of this entry!

Mase- It\'s totally wonderful to see you submitting a fight again. Old school at it\'s best right here. I love the art, but the story is a bit confusing at the end. I coulda went for a nice fight scene from you- not seeing it from behind closed doors and sound effects.

Great entrys guys!

King_Pong
Artist
601 comments
# 19   Posted: Sep 12 2006, 05:05 PM
Shortfury: there\'s something captivating about your simplistic and neat art - but alas there was just too much blank empty space for me in this one.  Nice story, but I think 15 pages was a bit in excess for what it was.  A good solid entry.

Mase: Good art for the most part, but I wasn\'t really interested in the story in this.  It didn\'t seem to \"catch\" and in all not much was happening - most of the fighting is simply suggested by sound effects behind a blank, boring wall - instead of being illustrated.

Marley
Artist
259 comments
# 18   Posted: Sep 11 2006, 07:54 PM
FINISHED GRAAAH FREAKING MIDGET SCANNER BE DAMNED!!!!!

This is gonna be hot <3 GOOD LUCK TO YOU MASE!!

physic
Artist
67 comments
# 17   Posted: Sep 11 2006, 06:42 PM
ah yeah whats up with that

Krissy
Artist
105 comments
# 16   Posted: Sep 10 2006, 10:26 PM
I\'m curious to know why this match is extended two days longer than everyone else. Is it a glitch?

Mase
Artist
81 comments
# 15   Posted: Sep 10 2006, 12:05 AM
One page to go - IMPACT IS IMMINENT!

Molotov
Artist
174 comments
# 14   Posted: Sep 9 2006, 02:17 PM
start the rampage already...

Mase
Artist
81 comments
# 13   Posted: Sep 8 2006, 10:20 PM
Just had a last-minute story changing idea...gonna be a long weekend!

Marley
Artist
259 comments
# 12   Posted: Sep 8 2006, 02:57 PM
<3

ITS GETTING CLOSERRRR!!!! Your ready mase!?!?

This tourney is gonna be epic =P

luniara
Artist
528 comments
# 11   Posted: Sep 8 2006, 02:26 PM
Mar- you BETTER friggin win this thing.

If you don\'t though- SHIET- you\'re still queen of fuckin Void.

Rax
Artist
117 comments
# 10   Posted: Sep 3 2006, 01:57 AM
HAWT!

Hellis
Artist
240 comments
# 9   Posted: Sep 1 2006, 10:15 AM
.... This is a match made in hell or heaven


I hope for blood

Marley
Artist
259 comments
# 8   Posted: Aug 31 2006, 11:00 AM
OH NO! Don\'t do that wei. That nipple gives him the inner eye!

Wei Ingnan
Artist
597 comments
# 7   Posted: Aug 31 2006, 08:07 AM
Shortie...if you don\'t win this I am gonna come over there and cut off James\' third nipple

chunkplex
Artist
184 comments
# 6   Posted: Aug 29 2006, 06:29 AM
Say it isn\'t so...two of my favourite contenders going toe to toe...Too bad only one moves on. Good luck you two

TypoDemon
Artist
144 comments
# 5   Posted: Aug 28 2006, 05:26 PM
xD i CANNOT wait to see this

gl both!

Toxic Toothpick
132 comments
# 4   Posted: Aug 27 2006, 08:53 PM
oh for crying out loud...

DanThe57
50 comments
# 3   Posted: Aug 26 2006, 01:56 AM
this tournament is bringing back all the oldies

Krissy
Artist
105 comments
# 2   Posted: Aug 26 2006, 01:09 AM
Do it!  DO IT LONG AND HARD. <3

justarhymes
Web Dev
637 comments
# 1   Posted: Aug 25 2006, 09:54 PM
This is a very sexy match-up.

Comic Details -

 
Type: Tournament Match
Drawing Time: 2 weeks
Ended: Sep 18th, 2006
Votes Cast: 73
Page Views: 1398
Winner: Marley
 

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