Thanks, I probably would\'ve thought up a better story if i had the time. Usually I spend the first week just thinking up a story, but this one I just started drawing whatever came into my head. Good practise i reckon.

Saint pio you rock please continue i get exited each time i see your stuff here.
this one was a bit hard to follow thou story wise but the art side is really improving
fast.You should practice anatomy, that said i liked the clumsyness it makes some of
the characters have that their anatomy is incorrect good work !

Hey, thanks everyone who read this and commented and stuff, I appreciate it. I\'m sure jaws did something for this. Just some people must have a problem with submitting in incomplete art or something. Look forward to the bb.

cool battle Saintpio :3 This was pretty nice for having drawn in it in the time you had.

I think you can keep on using your handwritten text, but make it a bit neater....it is hard to read sometimes. ^^;

I echo the comment about defaults. It DOES seem like half the battles now have a default in them. It\'s ridiculous.

Saintpio: This was a nice story comic. You always deliver when it comes to the creative side. I disagree with Angie (sorry!) about the text. I think it fits the overall style of your artwork. If you had generic comic type text it would look awkward and boring.

Saintpio-I enjoyed the story and I like the direction the Shepherd is taking. You\'re still having some problems with your anatomy and perspective, they are improving though. I really want to see you step away from the hand written text, while it works in some panels, most of the time it comes off as sloppy and can be difficult to read. Be careful with the black text on dark backgrounds. You seem to have had problems drawing those cars which is understandable, they\'re very tricky to draw, but try looking at reference images and making it a specific car instead of generic boxy things.

 D:<  Bad Defaulter!!! BAD!!!  *wacks you with a newspaper*

Can the defaults stop, please? 4 out of 5 battles should not have defaults. I understand that life happens but you have to roll with the punches and get the comic done. I\'ll crit your side in a bit Saintpio

Good Luck!  Do well!

Submitted. Had to hand it in early cause theres some people taking over my room for the next week. Hope it\'s alright.

oh, but it is \"cumin\" !!!

wowzerz O.o didn\'t see this coming XD

good luck guys!