Marcelo Reyes vs. Aesimi & Beethoven

Marcelo Reyes vs. Aesimi & Beethoven

Marcelo Reyes vs. Aesimi & Beethoven

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rabbitrabbit
Artist
334 comments
# 22   Posted: Apr 24 2008, 10:30 PM
So Ae & Bee\'s side\'s not going up, I guess.  I hope it comes back as a Beyond Battle, at least.  :<  

Ariboo, I love your stories - how they aren\'t just Character A beating Character B senseless, but also not strictly madcap-looneytunes humor.  The art\'s cute, and I\'m glad to see you not shying away from backgrounds.  :3  There\'s still stiffness in the anatomy and such, but that gets ironed out with practice.  And Tanuky\'s first cameo!  HOT STEAMING YES!!  8D  

aribooboo
Artist
282 comments
# 21   Posted: Apr 24 2008, 06:15 PM
thanks for eveyone who commented and voted! =] I\'ll get out of my comfort zone and try to switch up the camera angles. Now that you guys mentioned it, i DO see that their bodies seemed older; i\'ll try and work on that too!

angrygurl: hahaha \"Love\" is like my favorite song so i HAD to make him sing it! plus, it was SO appropriate for this, i think XD and i\'ll be sure to look that song up haha

Kuro: i guess we do it cuz...it\'s cute because it makes the chars seem so innocent and deffenseless ( ...well..that sounds more PATHETIC than cute, but still!! haha )

I\'m glad all of you thought it was cute ( i noticed that only the girls/women said \"aaaawwww\". i KNEW it was gonna be like that hahaha <3 ) If i made you have flash backs about your childhood or remeinded you of younger kids, then i\'ve done my job ;D ( that\'s usually ALWAYS my goal <3 )

thanks again everyone! =] and thanks P-elica! (again, everyone, P-elica finished on time but couldn\'t submit it cuz the site was all fucked up that day ;_; just wanna clear that up XD )

Kuro
Artist
581 comments
# 20   Posted: Apr 24 2008, 04:53 PM
what\'s the issue with pelica\'s?

aribooboo- nicely done. what\'s with this disturbing trend of girls taking furry/halfbreedy type things home & washing them? this one, the one with nightmare & pi-e (i think). seriously haha nice art though. nice colors. just a little bit more consistency with the anatomy & maybe varying the looks of the characters between one another & like josh said, make them seem a bit younger. maybe change up the angles a bit too. you spin around them horizontally ok, but maybe start rotating it up & down some more & getting less straight side to side.

-J

JoshuaEliGilley
Artist
462 comments
# 19   Posted: Apr 22 2008, 05:28 PM
Good job ari,

well crafted and entertaining. I liked the panel where Marcelo and Beethoven were all screwy-eyed from the flea bath!
Aside from what has been said, only critique I have is that your character and Aesimi, who are younger people, (like teenage right?) They look like adults to me proportion-wise, maybe study some anatomy books where they note the proportions that change from childhood to adulthood.

Ok, i guess page 10 they look like younger people, maybe it\'s the perspective in other places that makes them seem way tall?

Nibbles
Artist
193 comments
# 18   Posted: Apr 21 2008, 08:51 PM
*squee-splosion!*

ablondin
Artist
33 comments
# 17   Posted: Apr 19 2008, 12:35 PM
I thought it was okay. Colour was okay on the characters, but the background colour seemed bland, but dialogue was good. I think you should study the movement of the human body and the joints and stuff because you\'re poses seemed a little stiff at some points. I think the layout could be improved to better understand what the characters may be doing/feeling. Also the backgrounds could really use some work. A lot of the objects and buildings in the background seem to lack basic perspective. Keep up the good work.

Kiljax
16 comments
# 16   Posted: Apr 18 2008, 05:06 AM
Great ending.

Someone needs to tech Marcelo some ACTUALLY scary stories...

Great work on the colouring, as usual, Marcello. I loved the \'scary stories\' face, it cracked me up.  I can\'t really suggest much to improve your skills other than trying some perspective bending...

Aesimi - Hope to see your side soon, I heard you had some trouble with the site... Hopefully you\'re messenging  Wei right now so it gets cleared up.

angrygurl
1 comment
# 15   Posted: Apr 17 2008, 07:46 PM
I just wana join in the \"aww\" chorus. yeah this battle was really cute, there isn\'t much i want to tell you that hasnt already been metioned. Only.... watch where you place Marcelos tail, at times it seems to be coming from the middle of his spine.
Also interesting song choice, i never expeted marcelo to be a keyshia cole fan, i thought he\'d be listening to like Supermercados - Que calor  or something.

Red
Council
660 comments
# 14   Posted: Apr 17 2008, 06:00 PM
aww your comics are so much fun to read! Art was lovely and consistent and you draw the cutest noses ahaha. I was laughing the whole time, you are really good at funny dialogue! I really enjoyed it, keep making comics forever and ever plz <3 and thanks for the cameo!

squid
Artist
421 comments
# 13   Posted: Apr 17 2008, 05:03 PM
Ari that was pretty much perfect. I laughed at Beethoven\'s closing line; the comic couldn\'t have ended better for me.
I think the only crit I have, and I may have mentioned this already (If I have, please forgive), experiment with different facial and body shapes. Your figures don\'t seem all that much different... the best way to get ideas, I\'ve found, is to study yourself and the people around you.
I see that you\'ve been working on the other, already-mentioned weak spots in the artwork, so all I have to say is keep at it! I look foreward to more Marcelo, haha :D

aribooboo
Artist
282 comments
# 12   Posted: Apr 17 2008, 04:23 PM
just so you guys know, P-elica was done on time, but she couldn\'t upload cuz the site was all fucked up, you know, the other day?
Wei pleeeeeeeease put hers up~! she was done on time! D:

( and thanks for the crits you guys, i\'ll work on anatomy and try different things out; i\'m still trying styles out. yeah, Angie, i was worried about the text\'s color, but i decided just to leave it; bad move XD I\'ll try and take everything you guys have suggested and put them into my up coming comics! =]  )

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 11   Posted: Apr 17 2008, 02:39 PM
Aribooboo-I just opened your first page and immediately had to tell you, please don\'t use red text directly on top of a background. The red text assimilates with the medium/light tone of the background which makes it difficult to read. Anywho, onto the rest of the battle! I found the story and the expressions very adorable and I\'m glad to see you experimenting with new textures and such in your coloring. I\'m also glad to see that you moved the camera around more this time, keep doing that! But be careful with the stiffness of your poses and the emptiness of your backgrounds. Try to fill those backgrounds with nice little personal touches to give them more life. I\'m glad to see you working on things people have suggested in the past and the improvement shows, keep going at it.

Pelica-that makes me sad

Artspace
5 comments
# 10   Posted: Apr 17 2008, 02:26 PM
I enjoyed the story, it was very cute.  And the kiss at the end is adorable--I was literally going \"awww!\" to myself when I saw that.

Your coloring is great, although I think some differences in texture would be good also.  For example--differences in luminosity, so that hair and skin aren\'t equally as shiny.  Everyone else already covered the other critiques, so that\'s it for me!  Good job!

Dimension
Artist
489 comments
# 9   Posted: Apr 17 2008, 12:35 PM
Aribooboo-Aww, the story was very cute! I also think your coloring has improved! I really like this comic, I think it\'s on of my favorite of yours. :3
Hmmm...Careful with your anatomy. On page 8 Marcelo looks odd...I think it\'s his torso and arms. His hands also looked Webbed sooo work on that. :)
Other than that, I think you did a great job!


Kozispoon
Artist
1207 comments
# 8   Posted: Apr 17 2008, 11:04 AM
Young love <333 AWWWW

Loved the story. I love seeing fellow Voiders befriend each other and do wacky things besides fighting and this is no exception. :) Your character anatomy seems to have improved and I like that your panels aren\'t  just waist up anymore. Watching Marcelo and Aesimi get to know each other and be kids was a very refreshing read- even with Beethoven\'s colorful commentary interrupting every so often.
Awesome stuff all around yo. Rock it and roll it

aribooboo
Artist
282 comments
# 7   Posted: Apr 16 2008, 06:54 AM
( i\'ll comment on my own battle to not mess with anyone else\'s ).....

TESTING TESTING TESTING! XD

( i\'m hella stupid, but i just wanna see if everything is working now, after yesterday... )

aribooboo
Artist
282 comments
# 6   Posted: Apr 13 2008, 08:18 AM
UPLOADED!
hm..i finished this faster than i thought i would. ( but that doesn\'t mean i rushed it, i put enough work into it )

I think this is the only comic i\'ve done so far that i\'m really satisfied with <3 I hope you like it P-elica ( and everyone else XD ) and i can\'t wait to see yours!

Rtv!
Artist
603 comments
# 5   Posted: Apr 10 2008, 03:58 AM
uhm....yeah

aribooboo
Artist
282 comments
# 4   Posted: Mar 18 2008, 03:53 PM
let\'s git it on [in the bed]!!! XDDDD

Dimension
Artist
489 comments
# 3   Posted: Mar 18 2008, 01:34 PM
Whoo hoo, do your best guys :D  

rabbitrabbit
Artist
334 comments
# 2   Posted: Mar 18 2008, 01:12 PM
HOT BUCKETS OF WIN AND YES!!  

Pelz
Artist
36 comments
# 1   Posted: Mar 18 2008, 10:02 AM
X3 Eeeeee!

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Drawing Time: 4 weeks
Ended: Apr 24th, 2008
Votes Cast: 33
Page Views: 2701
Winner: aribooboo
 

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