Damn, angie... you made me log into my void account after, what... a YEAR? just to comment on this hahaha I must say you\'ve really stepped up your game since your first comics. seriously. you\'re making me consider trying to join again.

as far as crits go, I don\'t really have anything to offer that anybody else hasn\'t already said. I know that\'s not at all helpful lol

can\'t wait to see what your next battle has to offer, dude

Angie this confirms it, i think i\'m in love with you. fantastic pacing, great job. cant wait to kick your ass in battle.

Thanks for the crits dude! Yeah, I was trying to go with some more interesting panels and layouts on this like pages 5 and 7. Since I primarily read manga it\'s no surprise my panels are square in some way or another, so it\'s a tough habit to break. The pregnancy test wasn\'t really meant to be the total focus, I was trying to give the impression that she was waiting for the alarm on her cell phone because that told her when it was time to look at the test. I think I could have had another panel of her like reaching for it or something to make it more clear what was going on prior to page 6. I was just trying to be kind of careful since I wanted there to be suspense for the reader so they would find out the results of the test along with Angie. I did look at reference pictures of pregnancy tests so that\'s what they look like haha I\'ve never had an electric toothbrush so I wouldn\'t know if there\'s any similarities.

Well, Angie isn\'t supposed to be bad or good, she\'s meant to be more of a neutral character. To her credit the cops shot at her, and from her perspective they did it without reason. She\'s just struggling to have a normal life but shit keeps kind of getting piled back on her. I\'m hoping to do a few BBs after the Scarlett match to try to thoroughly cover some of Angie\'s past and reveal what has made her who she is. After the BBs you might get a better feel for why she did what she did to those cops and what kind of character she\'s meant to be. I\'m very glad that her action of killing the cops made you question the kind of person she is though, it was my intention to make the VCPD officers seem like actual human beings and kind of make the audience feel for them. That\'s because it\'s really all too often the VCPD are portrayed as just evil furry hating robots or something.

16 pages... is a PROLOGUE?  Wow.  6_9  

Definitely an \"A\" job.  All the colors and textures are fully realized and gorgeous.  And like was said before, \"emotional roller-coaster\" is an accurate description of the story.  I dunno what to think of Angela now... at first I was thinking, \"poor Angela!\"  And then she goes out and relieves her stress by - killing three cops?  Is she \"good\" or \"bad\" or something else entirely?  But yeah, I definitely can\'t wait for the rest of the story.  

Now for the nitpicks: that one panel with the cell phone and the pregnancy test didn\'t have either item completely in the frame, so if you were trying to focus on the test, it kinda failed - it was really easy to miss (and maybe I thought it was an electric toothbrush because I could only see the bottom half of it).  If you were trying to keep it ambiguous on purpose, there might have been a more graceful way to do that.  
Also, in the page where she\'s looking at it, it looks like a gray rectangle that could be anything.  I sort of wanted another panel in there, too - she went from crouched on the ground doing nothing to fully standing up and holding something without any evidence as to how she got there.  It kind of threw me.  
And this isn\'t so much a nitpick as a suggestion, and your comics are easy to read and it\'s easy to tell what sequence things are in, but - all of your panels are rectangles rectangles rectangles.  I think you\'re ready to start experimenting with more creative layouts, like different shaped panels, bleeds on your establishing shots, etc.  Your pages are so densely-packed with gorgeous colorful artwork, I think you could make your comics even easier to read and give your panels some room to breathe in between if push yourself in yet another direction.  
It looks like you really killed yourself to get your artwork to the level it\'s at, now you could do the same for your paneling.  Should you be brave enough.    

Anyway, a splendid job.  Be proud.  

haha I figured I said it somewhere but it was late so my lazy butt didn\'t feel like rereading if I\'d repeated myself XD

I think you already gave that away with a previous comment.

 \"And Psycho Sean, the kid on my DA isn\'t Suit\'s fortunately XD\"

haha yep Angie is pregnant with Suit\'s child at the moment XD I should have added another panel before or after page 6 to make it just a tad more clear that she was staring at the pregnancy test. I also tried to make her look heavier since she\'s several months along at this point. You guys will see whether the baby will be kept or not in the fight!

P.S!!!!!

ZOMG! I didn\'t really think about it when I read it, but re-reading this has me totally realizing-

PREGNANCY TEST.
ANGELA IS PISSED.

Is she pregnant?? Will she keep it? Stay tuned!

I really cannot express my joy at this. ;_; You definitely stepped it up a level in this comic, the coloring and action were absolutely gorgeous. And your backgrounds always blow me away~

Like some other people said, the only thing you need to really work on is your lines. Sometimes though the coloring is vibrant and alive, the lines can seem a bit cold and not as lively as the coloring.

But overall you did an amazing job, I can\'t wait to see the fight.

Chica...Freaking Amazing. The line widths are fantastic....colors AMAZING!! You are so battling me with Silas when he arrives on the Void scene. Can\'t wait for the actual battle!! Later DAys!!!

Jesus Jackhammering Christ Angie

Action, Silent Pages, Super Processed pages you can really push your self with this work D:

same with Kozi, can\'t really crit without sounding too analytical. But work your lines more, the one thing that stood out to me was the curvature on Scarlett\'s shoes. If you can study the problems in that, you can potentially improve on how you do organic curves.

Thanks guys! I was pretty nervous about this BB since I was really unsure of how people would take the main character being silent the entire time. I\'ll really try my hardest to have the actual battle maintain the same quality. I know the main battle probably isn\'t going to be as long as this BB, I\'m thinking it\'ll be about 10 pages. Which will hopefully give me plenty of room to work on keeping the quality about the same . I can\'t guarantee the actual battle will look as good since I had no time limit on this, but I\'ll certainly bust my ass to try!

You really went for it! And this is only the prolouge. The bar is set pretty high for your battle Angie. =)

Your art continues to be cream of the crop and the action scenes were pretty good to me. I really like that you\'ve kept your fights linked together. It\'s always better for the reader when they feel like they know the character.

I\'m on a total \'girl power\' trip, so reading this has me totally stoked about the fact that there are some AMAZING female artists on VOID. <3
While I agree your action scenes are a sticky part for you, I really admire that despite your lack of skill you still draw it. You still keep at it and make a point to include it. It could be so easy to just go, \"Y;know, I know I\'m not too good at this,\" and just work around it, so much kudos to you on not only that, but the leaps and strides you\'ve made since joining VOID and your awesome art

I could nitpick and separate the wheat from the chaff on this BB, but a good comic is a good comic despite the kinks and chinks. Rock on.

Wow, that was really impressive!! You keep surprising me with your incredible improvements, everyone should work as hard as you do. I can\'t wait to see what happens next!!!!

to tell you the truth, at first i wasn\'t so fond of your style of art, but i\'ve grown to fucking ADORE it <3 for real, for real, it\'s different and it feels fresh everytime i look at it. loved your use of textures too.
And your story line was hella gripping and i love what you did in page 8! i got goose bumps! XD i\'m hella looking forward to what happens to Angie next! =]  

Thanks for the comments guys! Yeah, action is still my achille\'s heel but I think I\'m slowly but surely getting it, so I\'ll try to keep those things in mind in the actual battle. And I agree Marley, I\'ll try to keep that in mind for the future, still trying to tweak my pacing and stuff.

And Psycho Sean, the kid on my DA isn\'t Suit\'s fortunately XD I would like to have Angie fight Suit one more time somewhere down the road just to offer more closure and give Angie a chance at a more suitable revenge. Only time will tell though

Fuck, that was a rollercoaster of emotions for me. you brought angie into situations like some people would have, well not as extreme, but with unknown feelings about who they are and how to handle themselves. But, I fucking didn\'t expect her getting knocked up, well on on your dev account, you did have a comic showing like 5 years later with a kid, but I never thought suit would be the father!!!

... I sence a rematch with suit sometome in the future, but until then, great progress, you really used a beyond battle the way it should like what kotori ky said, other artists should make more beyonds after big battles they have more often.

RATING of AWESOMENESS: 5/5

...oh, and I LUV BooBs!

Awesome color work Ang and your sequentials are looking good. You kept my intrest throughout. Your action needs a little work. For exam. |If someone has enough strenght to rip an arm off tearing bone, musle and flesh-the person getting his arm ripped off is not just going to stand there unless hiss foots nailed to the ground. And even then his body would strech towards the pulling. she would have had tobrace one hand on his shoulder or chest and pull on therist of the victum with the other with enough strength that the counter action wouldcause the arm to rip off. This is just a nitpick thing and would add drama and a stronger sence of realism to the action. Thumbs up on the color and overall mood of the work though! Keep it up!!

Nice work angie! It looks like you put 150% into this and thats awesome.

The only issues I had were small clarity problems. On page seven there are the repeat top panels of the person opening the door. I think it might have made better sense if there was a wider panel that included something familiar in the scene, so that your reader knows exactly where this door is opening. The other thing is on page 10 it would have been perfection if you zoomed out on the birdseye panel on the 10th page.

Otherwise again this is great work! Keep it up!!
 

I agree. Almost all of the crits or comments that I had regarding things like color, shading, and layout I mentioned to you before and I don\'t really see the need to do so again. I\'ll just go with the \'this looks damn good, I can see you put a lot of work into it, and you\'re improving a lot with your action and placement of characters within the scene.\' :}

To be a LIIIIIITTLE nitpicky I\'d say that I would have liked a few of the speech bubbles to not get cut off by the panels. Having things pop out and overlap the panels is a useful tool and often will bring the eye to it.

I\'m going to give you props on continuing the mental issues and scars that Angie has to carry over from the Suit match. I think all too often writers don\'t consider the longer term effects some things will have on characters, provided they\'re sticking to a continual timeline. Taking into account your character\'s personality and abilities, watching her reaction to her situation was interesting and I enjoyed it. It showed more of her and who she is and what she does, which I find to be a lot of the point behind BBs. It\'s a chance to develop and delve more into a character and you did that really well.

now this is how to use the \'beyond battles\' option! awesome work. looking forward to the next chapter. ;3

till next...

Hope you guys enjoy! This is obviously serving as a prologue to me and Neko\'s upcoming fight. There was a slightly different version of page 15 I mailed to Wei that didn\'t get put up that was slightly bloodier and had the rain since I accidentally uploaded a version without the rain haha ah well, it\'s no biggie

http://img443.imageshack.us/img443/2010/page15bm6.jpg

the other version if you guys wanted to see it

YEAAAAAAH YOU DID SO MUCH MORE WORK THAN I DID I FEEL BAD SOMETIMES. xD;