Ayako & Fluffbucket vs. Ben

Ayako & Fluffbucket vs. Ben

by endjoi

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by squid

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Icon for Ben60.4%
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Kozispoon
Artist
1211 comments
# 31   Posted: Dec 9 2007, 11:17 PM
Critques have been more than covered and all the points I wanted to make have already been mentioned, soooo...

ENDJOI- Hilarious. You have a way of making WTF punch lines that work and I dig. :)

SQUIDMAN- \"Hahaha, I dunno how much you\'ll like my character, then; her whole shtick is being incredibly annoying all of the time.\"

oh my... 0_0 Fair warning.

ransak-the-reject
Artist
25 comments
# 30   Posted: Dec 9 2007, 10:23 AM
This was hilarious.

Endjol, your entry was a bit short and blah blah blah, but I\'m sure it\'ll be better next time.

I loved the unique style and humor SQUIDMAN, keep \'em comin. It\'s like painting comics and it\'ll be fun to see where you go from here.


squid
Artist
421 comments
# 29   Posted: Dec 6 2007, 10:28 AM
Thanks Angie, I\'ll certainly give my best to make sure all my battles are as good or better than this :3 Hopefully better, for the most part.
heheh, okey dokey Z.

Aluísio C. Santos
Artist
735 comments
# 28   Posted: Dec 5 2007, 02:30 PM
Haha about the flowy thing is that everything looks like so much brushy, but it\'s okay, i\'m just being silly.

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 27   Posted: Dec 5 2007, 01:50 PM
Endjol-aw man I was really looking forward to this. I know you can do better than this! One thing I\'ve noticed throughout most of your battles is you tend to rush them. Slow down and spend more time on them. The cuteness will only take you so far :(

SQUIDMAN-damn, very nice entry dude! This is far better than your intros so I\'m very impressed!  I do think for this you could have made the characters a little darker to keep them from blending into the background so much. There\'s just not much difference in tones between the foreground and background which can make it confusing. Other than that the battle was very solid, I hope you can maintain this kind of quality in all your battles!

sakket
2 comments
# 26   Posted: Dec 5 2007, 09:06 AM
squidman has successfully re-kindled my desire to get into this durn website. *goes back to drawing*

squid
Artist
421 comments
# 25   Posted: Dec 4 2007, 12:57 PM
Hahaha, I dunno how much you\'ll like my character, then; her whole shtick is being incredibly annoying all of the time XD
I appreciate your comment!

Wolcik
Artist
492 comments
# 24   Posted: Dec 4 2007, 11:52 AM
Endjoi :
I expected more from you, as I saw that you\'re capable to give more... the story is pretty funny, but the art ruined half of it for me :(

SQUIDMAN :
I\'d say that you have a clean win here, but I guess it\'s not about this. I\'m really suppriesed and glad to see such good first entry :) Thones looks amazing, and I don\'t see too many flows with art since the expresivness of lines hides most of possible errors from me XD
Storywise I had much laugh since (it\'s pretty long story too) - starting from part when this actor is already bitten to blood and director wants more, and Ayako with that arm looks pretty cute XD I like the way Ben was at graveyard, but it annoyed me the way she acted like a brat to take her revange, althoug she gave some strong kick the winner was Fluffbucket (clapping for him winning was a good conclussion) XD

squid
Artist
421 comments
# 23   Posted: Dec 4 2007, 06:40 AM
yes, I\'ve been told by others that I need more black... I\'m still pretty new with a brush, so that makes it a little more difficult for me (and is why some of the lines are too light).. but it is something I\'m working on.
Z, I don\'t understand why you think the lines are \"TOO flowy\".. could you explain?

Thanks again guys

Aluísio C. Santos
Artist
735 comments
# 22   Posted: Dec 3 2007, 08:22 PM
Real nice entry!

Endjoi: I\'d really like something finished on your end, but it\'s okay, since you\'re at least fighting again! I loved the way you did Ben, very characteristic.

Squidd: Awesome stuff! Both in humor, plot and art. I feel that the lines are a bit too flowy, but that might be the style or tool. Are you using a brush? Also, I\'d love some black lines instead of gray, but gray is fine! In other hand, while it\'s actually cool, in some panels, it almost blend with the tones, including both character and background alike.

Good luck you guyze!

endjoi
Artist
77 comments
# 21   Posted: Dec 3 2007, 02:54 PM
Squidman:  HOLY CRAP I LOVE YOU.  just so you know.  Your battle totally made my day.  

also, much apologies for the rushed entry, I thought I had another day and discovered an hour before time was up that that was not the case....  thanks for all the feedback!  I\'m still feeling a little rusty, and your comments help tons.

Monday
Artist
964 comments
# 20   Posted: Dec 3 2007, 02:01 PM
Goddammit Squidman Ben makes me wet. I love those fucking lines  the poses and anatomy .Style is really whimsical. And the humor is very native to your protagonist. This is a fully fleshed out work and I cannot wait to challenge you in the ring. One minor complaint is that your greys are grey try stretching out the tonal range a tad so that there be some blacks on your pages. But damn if i\'m not gonna be scared shitless when I challenge you.

Endjoi, glad to see you back, your run on humour is working here and I enjoyed seeing the quip of Ayako\'s life, characterisation is fine too. However i cant really say much for the art since it seems rushed. line variation here is probably your problem as well as general layout. Though its still an interesting read.

squid
Artist
421 comments
# 19   Posted: Dec 3 2007, 10:28 AM
OMG I love it Endjoi XD Especially the \"eat your soul\" panel--I liked your brush-work there. I was pretty much laughing all the way through.

Phil--What I wanted to show was Ayako getting self-important because she\'d become rich and famous, so that was kind of like her saying \"This is MY graveyard now and I want YOU out.\"

Thanks for the comments! keep the crits coming, eh? :D

Phill
Artist
895 comments
# 18   Posted: Dec 3 2007, 01:44 AM
I rather liked both entries.

Endjoi: I really wish you did something more with this. I know you\'re capable of awesome things with your comics. This however... well, there\'s always next time.

Squidman: A great first entry on void, the art was great as previously mentioned and I loved how you toned this as well, the story was just a bit strange for me, like when Ayako told Ben to leave the graveyard because she was bothering her. I\'m not sure if she would of been upset from defiling the graves either. I\'m not sure, that just seemed way out of character for me. But other than that I was really impressed with this, I look forward to your next entry!

sheldon
Artist
141 comments
# 17   Posted: Dec 2 2007, 05:42 PM
endjoi: i can only assume you banged this out in a couple of days. which is fine, but this entry was pretty weak. the art, the dialogue, the story in total was really flat. no build up, no climax y\'know? one thing i can suggest, if you just want to hammer out a comic, draw on super small pages. like half of a 6x9 or something. that way your sketchy inks will condense into some nice solid lines, and you might improve a little more on your composition. better luck next time.

squid: thoroughly enjoyable. this flowed perfectly, and your tones are GREAT. the kick on page 9 is by the far the best panel in that comic. no real clear winner, but a solid conclusion. an all round great job. keep it up.

aribooboo
Artist
282 comments
# 16   Posted: Dec 2 2007, 04:31 PM
Endjoi: haha i giggled with yours and I love Ben\'s expression on the cover page XD the whole thing was hella cute <3

Squidman: shit, i loved all your expressions! i could tell how they were talking by the look on their face. your panels were so clean too, i love them! Ben seems like quiet the trouble maker, but she\'s cute while she\'s doing it; you can\'t be mad at her XD

both of you guys did hella good, i loved them both! =]

sakket
2 comments
# 15   Posted: Nov 28 2007, 07:47 PM
GRAH! *been looking forward to this battle for weeks*

endjoi
Artist
77 comments
# 14   Posted: Nov 24 2007, 11:59 PM
shit shit shit!!!!!!!

uploader not working!!!!!!!!!!!!!  serves me right for taking this down to the wire, as always.....

QtRNevermore
Artist
286 comments
# 13   Posted: Nov 24 2007, 11:34 PM
woooot..can\'t wait for this...just say fluffbucket at his tail fluff on accident.  :p  

squid
Artist
421 comments
# 12   Posted: Nov 21 2007, 11:11 AM
Uploaded, hope you guys like it.
Enjoi, sorry for drawing Fluffbucket\'s tail wrong... I thought it was like a devil tail until I checked the sheet again and realised there was a puff ball on the end >_>

Monday
Artist
964 comments
# 11   Posted: Nov 21 2007, 07:15 AM
CANNOT WAIT CANNOT WAIT CANNOT WAIT

v
Artist
42 comments
# 10   Posted: Nov 15 2007, 02:38 PM
coolbeans

jesse
141 comments
# 9   Posted: Nov 9 2007, 04:11 PM
EEEEEEEEE! I missed Ayako SO MUCH.

<3

Kiljax
16 comments
# 8   Posted: Nov 7 2007, 12:46 PM
A newcomer and a come-backer! This is gonna be awesome.

alberto311
Artist
374 comments
# 7   Posted: Nov 6 2007, 07:56 AM
pain and punishment. Yay more battles!!!!!

Aluísio C. Santos
Artist
735 comments
# 6   Posted: Nov 4 2007, 04:35 PM
N-N-N-New b-b-battles!

Monday
Artist
964 comments
# 5   Posted: Nov 4 2007, 01:41 AM
This shall result in heavy biting :p

Kozispoon
Artist
1211 comments
# 4   Posted: Nov 3 2007, 04:39 PM
Whoo! Bens first battle =D Looking forward to seeing some awesome

Mamoru
Artist
95 comments
# 3   Posted: Nov 3 2007, 04:31 PM
KOMMERADISH!!! I MISS YOUUUUUUUU

Go break a leg End, and welcome back

aribooboo
Artist
282 comments
# 2   Posted: Nov 3 2007, 01:34 PM
good luck to both of you guys! =3

Phill
Artist
895 comments
# 1   Posted: Nov 3 2007, 01:12 PM
HOLY CRAP! Endjoi\'s back!

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Ended: Dec 9th, 2007
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