King of Monsters Tournament: Round 1 / Dizzy and Big Brother vs. Leviathorah
Critiques & Comments
# 23
Posted:
Jul 30 2007, 11:10 PM
THAT WAS SO ADORABLE CHAIR
# 22
Posted:
Jul 29 2007, 08:22 PM
thanks for the crits and comments, everyone. big bro is dead but i\'ll definitely stick around.
# 21
Posted:
Jul 29 2007, 04:40 PM
fence: I usually HATE it when people incorporate tourney\'s into their story, but the way you did it was alright. Also, the whole 3 days into the future bit seemed kind of unnecessary. The art was pretty good. I like the way shade with ink, and your style is swell. I loved the way you portrayed dizzy. It was rad.
jetaime: You obviously know how to draw a good comic. Some of the tones were a bit distracting though. It wasn\'t finished, so it\'s hard to point stuff out regarding anything else.
jetaime: You obviously know how to draw a good comic. Some of the tones were a bit distracting though. It wasn\'t finished, so it\'s hard to point stuff out regarding anything else.
# 20
Posted:
Jul 27 2007, 02:15 PM
awesome, thanks guys! I appreciate the crits, I\'m definitely wanting to step up the next battle, especially considering who I could be up against.
and I\'m glad I did okay with Dizzy, I was afraid I might\'ve taken to much liberty or put her way out of character or something. hope to see you around more though Jetaime, you definitely have talent and I\'m still blown away when I go back and read your half!
and I\'m glad I did okay with Dizzy, I was afraid I might\'ve taken to much liberty or put her way out of character or something. hope to see you around more though Jetaime, you definitely have talent and I\'m still blown away when I go back and read your half!
# 19
Posted:
Jul 27 2007, 11:44 AM
jet: you are every bit a comic creator as any other published twat today. if not more. the pacing and style and basically everything was so fucking pro it made my eyes water. even though you didn\'t finish. it was a MARVELLOUS fucking effort.
fence: great job kiddo. some of the panels on the first few pages looked totally ametuerish and with a little more time i reckon you could have cleaned them up a touch. but its a solid completed entry and the dialogue was charming and cute without being retarded. great work.
fence: great job kiddo. some of the panels on the first few pages looked totally ametuerish and with a little more time i reckon you could have cleaned them up a touch. but its a solid completed entry and the dialogue was charming and cute without being retarded. great work.
# 18
Posted:
Jul 26 2007, 01:11 AM
Je t\'aime - You underestimated the time, nothing at ALL to do with the ability. I\'ve got say that your ability is on par with some of the top artists on the site. I love the amount of detail you pulled off, and I\'m always one to appreciate some good looking rubble. Your destruction and mayhem is amazing, and the action is amazing. The only thing I could see that was wrong with this comic was that there was no end. To nit-pick, the hand-written speech bubbles clashed a bit with the typed text boxes, but don\'t worry about the sound effects, because those blended in with your art wonderfully. Brilliant tones and altogether great art, I expect to see you with another fighter on the site pronto.
Fence - Excellent art and comic, well suited to your style of writing and whimsy. Nice cameo of your own fighter too. There\'s a couple of things that caught my eye though, so I\'ll lay them out. Firstly, and this is just a cinematic thing (meaning I don\'t think it messed up your comic much at all), is that you really shouldn\'t cross the \"line of action\" in a scene, that is, the line between the two primary subjects. What this means is that (like in your first page) if you\'ve got Elio on one side and Amelia on the other, you should keep them on their respective sides and not have them switch places until a new character is introduced to the scene, thereby creating a new line of action. The same goes for Dizzy and Merk on page 4. Page 9 was beautifully laid out, props for that one. It\'s a shame you couldn\'t color the whole thing, because it looked very snazzy in the first 2 pages. Very nice entry, I hope you keep rocking out like you do.
Fence - Excellent art and comic, well suited to your style of writing and whimsy. Nice cameo of your own fighter too. There\'s a couple of things that caught my eye though, so I\'ll lay them out. Firstly, and this is just a cinematic thing (meaning I don\'t think it messed up your comic much at all), is that you really shouldn\'t cross the \"line of action\" in a scene, that is, the line between the two primary subjects. What this means is that (like in your first page) if you\'ve got Elio on one side and Amelia on the other, you should keep them on their respective sides and not have them switch places until a new character is introduced to the scene, thereby creating a new line of action. The same goes for Dizzy and Merk on page 4. Page 9 was beautifully laid out, props for that one. It\'s a shame you couldn\'t color the whole thing, because it looked very snazzy in the first 2 pages. Very nice entry, I hope you keep rocking out like you do.
# 17
Posted:
Jul 25 2007, 08:25 AM
You 2 took it serious, hu? Both of you had some high quality votes and also professional look on the pages! That blew me away and I’m sure this will be one of the hardest to pick.
<b>Jetaime:</b> your details were amazing and I also liked the paneling a lot, You know how to make every page clear to understand. Your angles and lines are sweet and I wish I could see all the pages done.. Well, but I do know how hard life can be when you enter something new XD. From the story (and what I could get) I just think you gave a lil bit more importance to cameos than to your real adversary, that made lose the track a bit, but I guess that’s just me. Anyway, winning or losing, keep up the good job, and hope to see more from you.
<b>fence:</b> gasp, how could you develop your adversary that much in just a few pages?? I have to admit that I’m not a big fan of cameos (ignore personal taste), but that one suited perfectly to show how dizzy behavior was. I was amazed. Also, the paneling was clear and you managed to use the time travel power pretteh well, making the end of the story unpredictable. Congratz. About the text.. Some have said it before, but I do need to say too: it was hard to read in some points, and that made me lose a bit track on the flow too, because I had to turn back and read again some parts to get what was being said. Just use a bigger font and you’ll have my love furevurr XD. Can’t wait to see more!
Good luck for both of you!
<b>Jetaime:</b> your details were amazing and I also liked the paneling a lot, You know how to make every page clear to understand. Your angles and lines are sweet and I wish I could see all the pages done.. Well, but I do know how hard life can be when you enter something new XD. From the story (and what I could get) I just think you gave a lil bit more importance to cameos than to your real adversary, that made lose the track a bit, but I guess that’s just me. Anyway, winning or losing, keep up the good job, and hope to see more from you.
<b>fence:</b> gasp, how could you develop your adversary that much in just a few pages?? I have to admit that I’m not a big fan of cameos (ignore personal taste), but that one suited perfectly to show how dizzy behavior was. I was amazed. Also, the paneling was clear and you managed to use the time travel power pretteh well, making the end of the story unpredictable. Congratz. About the text.. Some have said it before, but I do need to say too: it was hard to read in some points, and that made me lose a bit track on the flow too, because I had to turn back and read again some parts to get what was being said. Just use a bigger font and you’ll have my love furevurr XD. Can’t wait to see more!
Good luck for both of you!
# 16
Posted:
Jul 24 2007, 10:59 PM
Jetamine: I\'m so happy to see Dopa drawn so wonderfully, even if he is unconscious!
Every panel was executed so professionally, and I\'m so sad that you couldn\'t finish. Half the reason I didn\'t/couldn\'t finish my entry was because of work as well, but the other half was realizing that I wasn\'t ready to draw comics just quite yet. Excellent show
Fence: This is why I love Void, two artists with completely different styles and completely different interpretations of characters battling it out! I could\'ve done with more destruction, but the way you coordinated the fight was to my liking.
These matches are as epic as I hoped them to be! Gold stars for both of you!
Every panel was executed so professionally, and I\'m so sad that you couldn\'t finish. Half the reason I didn\'t/couldn\'t finish my entry was because of work as well, but the other half was realizing that I wasn\'t ready to draw comics just quite yet. Excellent show
Fence: This is why I love Void, two artists with completely different styles and completely different interpretations of characters battling it out! I could\'ve done with more destruction, but the way you coordinated the fight was to my liking.
These matches are as epic as I hoped them to be! Gold stars for both of you!
# 15
Posted:
Jul 24 2007, 08:52 AM
Jetaime – You are a great comic artist. Your panels are nice and easy to read even with all the destruction, rumble and action. Some of the tones you are using seem distracting, I would experiment with other tones or maybe shades of grey. I only mention this because I would imagine printing out your tones might be troublesome. (cough cough pulpo) It is unfortunate you could not finish your battle, this was defiantly the making of an A+ entry. I enjoyed what you entered very much! Thank you for battling in my tournament.
Fence – I also love your comics too much! Immediately your strength is your drawings, humor, pacing, and the fact you draw a respectable 7 to 12 panels in one page, rather then just a lazy four. It’s giving me a lot to read and to get into, comic power! Great job!! Your drawings are really cute and your expressions are too funny. However, a few things I would give you to work on, is some details are way too small to make out (I think) I know this was just a quick tournament battle, but for printed work your line quality will need to be stronger just because printers would have a hard time with the sketchiness. And the text might be a little hard to read because it’s so small. Your defiantly one of my favorites on VOID, I’m confident you can be a professional with slightly cleaner work.
Thank you for battling in my tournament.
Fence – I also love your comics too much! Immediately your strength is your drawings, humor, pacing, and the fact you draw a respectable 7 to 12 panels in one page, rather then just a lazy four. It’s giving me a lot to read and to get into, comic power! Great job!! Your drawings are really cute and your expressions are too funny. However, a few things I would give you to work on, is some details are way too small to make out (I think) I know this was just a quick tournament battle, but for printed work your line quality will need to be stronger just because printers would have a hard time with the sketchiness. And the text might be a little hard to read because it’s so small. Your defiantly one of my favorites on VOID, I’m confident you can be a professional with slightly cleaner work.
Thank you for battling in my tournament.
# 14
Posted:
Jul 24 2007, 05:20 AM
Jetaime: The art was looking well with the pages that you finished, it\'s a shame you couldn\'t finish. I loved Weepy\'s monster cameo and wanted to see King Pong\'s.
fence: Loved your comic, always loved Leviathorah. I thought some of your lettering was a bit small and I wish all your pages were in color, but overall I loved it.
fence: Loved your comic, always loved Leviathorah. I thought some of your lettering was a bit small and I wish all your pages were in color, but overall I loved it.
# 13
Posted:
Jul 23 2007, 09:31 PM
fence, you have touched my heart! <3
the story was wonderfull. and such a sad but great ending~
jetaime, yours was good and could\'ve gotten a laugh outta me if completed. too bad
the story was wonderfull. and such a sad but great ending~
jetaime, yours was good and could\'ve gotten a laugh outta me if completed. too bad
# 12
Posted:
Jul 23 2007, 05:00 PM
I got a new job a week before the deadline. Most days were 8-7, but two of them were 8-9. Every time I got back, I just felt like hitting the sack. As the deadline neared, I cranked out some really crappy pages.
I’m already looking for a job with more reasonable hours, but I have no idea when that’s going to happen.
I loved your battle, Fence, and I’m convinced that I would’ve lost even if I completed my side. You nailed Dizzy’s personality, which is impressive because I really didn’t write anything about her besides when she’s from. Also, you made Big Bro adorable.
My favorite part was that Dizzy-Finnegan moment.
I anticipate you and NASB in the final round.
<smek>
I’m already looking for a job with more reasonable hours, but I have no idea when that’s going to happen.
I loved your battle, Fence, and I’m convinced that I would’ve lost even if I completed my side. You nailed Dizzy’s personality, which is impressive because I really didn’t write anything about her besides when she’s from. Also, you made Big Bro adorable.
My favorite part was that Dizzy-Finnegan moment.
I anticipate you and NASB in the final round.
<smek>
# 11
Posted:
Jul 23 2007, 04:31 PM
oooh no, I\'m sorry to see that you couldn\'t finish jetaime! I can understand, nearly being in the same boat myself. those pages you had were pretty ace though, good work on what you managed to do!
# 10
Posted:
Jul 23 2007, 04:30 PM
OH MAN FUCK YEAH THIS WAS AWESOME.
Shame you couldn\'t get finished Jetaime, it was looking badass so far.
FENCE THAT CAMEO WAS THE CUTEST THING I\'VE EVER SEEN, D\'AAAAAAWWWW.
*smeck*
tee heee Smellio.
Nice work guys, shame someone has to lose!
Shame you couldn\'t get finished Jetaime, it was looking badass so far.
FENCE THAT CAMEO WAS THE CUTEST THING I\'VE EVER SEEN, D\'AAAAAAWWWW.
*smeck*
tee heee Smellio.
Nice work guys, shame someone has to lose!
# 9
Posted:
Jul 22 2007, 11:37 PM
OH GOLLY UPLOADED
so I missed nearly a week of working on this D:
the pages get kinda weak I know, I tried to do the best with the time I had. I hope it\'s not to terrible!
so I missed nearly a week of working on this D:
the pages get kinda weak I know, I tried to do the best with the time I had. I hope it\'s not to terrible!
# 8
Posted:
Jul 7 2007, 01:19 AM
GO FENCE!
# 7
Posted:
Jul 5 2007, 07:11 PM
wow a death match, between two excellent characters. I look forward to this awesome battle.
# 6
Posted:
Jul 5 2007, 05:33 PM
omgomgomgomg
nervous D:
BUT EXCITED
nervous D:
BUT EXCITED
# 5
Posted:
Jul 4 2007, 11:02 PM
Whoa, whoa, so many death matches. I wish you both a good luck, still. Make it count!
# 4
Posted:
Jul 4 2007, 04:01 PM
Damn, such a shame one has to fall in this round… But hell, good luck you both, I\'m expecting AWESOMENESS! Mass destruction ftw!
# 3
Posted:
Jul 4 2007, 02:08 PM
LEVIATHORAAAHHHHHH!!! *screams while writing*
# 2
Posted:
Jul 4 2007, 01:52 PM
good luck, and have fun.
# 1
Posted:
Jul 4 2007, 11:41 AM
AUGH TOO MUCH AWESOME, ALL OF THIS.
(gooo spongey! haha)
(gooo spongey! haha)
Death Match
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2 weeks
Ended:
Jul 30th, 2007
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