Neo: Made me giggle, but page four found a \"ho-hum\" coming from my mouth. I think the plot it\'s self could have worked if there was more build up and less \"ohshitz I gotta submit somethin\'!!\" Like everyone else said, it could have been cleaner, with more effort, art-wise. More backgrounds/setting shots, less talking heads, maybe?

haven: I liked how...stylish this was, artistically. Some bumps here and there [does Danielle have helmet-hair? D:] but I give props for having glances of like, vehicles, but ++on the backgrounds, too. It would have been neat to see, say, various monochromatic layers of skyscrapers and buildings. I agree with angie that your action sequences could use more lead-up and follow-through, right now it\'s cut very choppy and doesn\'t seem to be the effect you\'re going for.

Neo - ....................no.  Even as pencils you could have cleaned and sharpened and punched them up more than this. And the.. please, we would much rather be SHOWN the action instead of being TOLD about them.

Haven - Nice. I like this tone style and Gord\'s narrative, very humorous especially the last page, un-toned as it is. Nice little contained story. Keep it up!

Neo-duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuude why you gotta be like that, thought we had something special! Not really but seriously, I adored your old matches, what happened here dude? I know stuff happens, but you had 2 months yo. If you just lost interest it would have been best had you just attempted to get the match cancelled. Please do something more complete next time, I know school and work can get in the way, I can relate, just maybe work on time management a bit to help you out?

Haven-I liked how slick your linework was but you could have pushed the camera angles and stuff a bit more. I think it would also help if you showed what was going on action wise a bit more, like you see a panel of a tongue then she has a wound, maybe have a panel showing the weapon hitting? I liked the pages that were blue and red, didn\'t care much for the brown pages, try to stick to colors that don\'t make it hard to see what\'s going on, that light brown was just too light and killed some details. Other than that was nice for a first battle, try and push your story and camera angles a bit more on the next match!

Neo - okay, I\'ve got to be honest...it seems like you didn\'t put any effort into this at all. The art didn\'t seem to be cleaned up much, the text was ugly, and...well...not that much happened. The fact that you used quick text bits to explain the story was really...lazy. I was looking forward to a battle like Danielle vs. Epo. Ah well. I hope you do better next time.
on the positive end, I did like your figures and expressions.

Haven - Some parts of the fight were confusing, and the story wasn\'t creative at all. However, your inks were pretty nice. The ironic ending brought up entertainment haha. It was a pretty good ending and tied up the story well.

im a bit dissapointed

Neo: Waaah, what was this. Your style is nice but you gave me a tiny bite of it. It was was bland with lack of  ink and proportions and interesting shots and angles an oh. HM hm.

Haven: Ahah, fresh. Sharp colors. AW Mister Gord, the vile pig! Nah nah, respectable man. I liked your angles. Especially the first one. Thank you, thank you.

Neo: Sweetie, I\'m going to be really blunt here... What. The. Fuck?? This isn\'t the first unfinished piece you\'ve tossed up that doesn\'t look like much effort was put into it at all. The condescending attitude in the fight has also gotten... old. You really should work on furthering Danielle\'s character. Does she have an over all storyline? Do you plan on going somewhere with her? Give us something to keep us INTERESTED, for pity\'s sake. ;_; Your previous battles were so good and have only gone downhill.

Haven: I loved the first page, with the city. The quality kinda slipped as the battle went on... and it doesn\'t really look like a purse in the final page. (And you mentioned in the chat that you hadn\'t toned the page... so I won\'t go into that. Oh wait, I just did. Hehe.) Over all, a good first showing for Gord... I\'d like to see you go further, though. Work on the human body proportions, perhaps, and the action/movement. (That\'s what I\'ve been trying to get going. Movement and flow are tricky things to get.)

waaah i want this to start T_T oh well.

If I dont see a single Haduken, I\'ll be very upset.
Don\'t disappoint you two, good luck!

good luck you guys!

Nick nack paddywack give a dog a bone, this lil girl went running home.

not if you have a knife wound...

Whooo! I\'m going to throw in soooo much punches, kicks and fireballs!

goggles.....or chameleons...?  D:
two of my most favourite things in the world. i can\'t decide   ;___;

TEAR IT UP YOU TWO.

GORD GORD GORD GORD

but gord is hitler.. .. .. :>

...No one uses a chainsaw on their first fight.  >_>

Just a thought.

cant all be punches kicks and fireballs... no that shows no class. not for my first battle... its so clihe!

GO NON COMFORMISTS

Haven.... do the moustache proud and erase its tarnished history!

OH SHI- Go go goggle girl.

You don\'t necessarily have to hit her...

Shooting, slashing, and stabbing in the face do not technically constitute hitting.

But hey, nice to see a newbie itchin\' for a fight.  Show us what you got!

shit stopped making sense yesterday. *commits suicide

i cant possibly hit a girl. maybe a nice civilized chat.

Congrats on getting in, Haven! Soooooo much improvement, mate.

I am so stoked