Merk vs. Jingles

Merk vs. Jingles

Merk vs. Jingles

by Qyzex

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691 points
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Kumaru
Artist
87 comments
# 25   Posted: Nov 15 2006, 10:33 PM
I was actually talking about his head-tail, but your design sheet clearly states that it changes so my mistake! S-sorry!!! (^___^;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;

Qyzex
Artist
670 comments
# 24   Posted: Nov 15 2006, 09:54 PM
thanks for the comments you two!

umn, Merk\'s \'hair\' (fur collar...right?) changes because he changes clothes, and goes emo.

but other than that, It\'s so very true that i need to work on a LOT of stuff...but who doesn\'t? i really appreciate the critique and I WILL take it to heart =D

Marley
Artist
259 comments
# 23   Posted: Nov 15 2006, 08:38 PM
qyzex - A good effort!! I like that you guys kind of teamed up on the story. Teamwork is cute. I would really like it if you started drawing comics in a more standard panel format. It doesn\'t have to be all square panels or anything, but more panel space would be nice. It also doesn\'t seem like you\'re spending much time on your line work which makes me a sad panda!!! Good effort overall, but you\'ve gotta work on your technicalities... Anatomy, perspective etc.

Dawg - I love your color choices, and the panels with merk slurping up soda on the floor crack me up. I want to see your line work refined a little more. More focus and variety in your line weights! When you draw think that every mark you\'re making on the paper is important.

good jerb guys

Kumaru
Artist
87 comments
# 22   Posted: Nov 15 2006, 04:33 PM
Qyzex - The... uh.. I guess because I didn\'t know Merk and Jingles were living together/friends/heist buddies/??? the first page really confused me because I thought... \"OH NOE, he\'s throwing out his challenge letter without seeing it, WHAT WILL HAPPEN!?!\" And then nothing happened related to that at all and... uhh.... I guess this is my problem?!? (*_*;;
ANYWAY- I have to agree that the ending was kind of really predictable and yeah, your panels are very disjointed and distracting and confusing as well. Just um... try using a straight edge? It just makes it hard to read? Also, why does Merk\'s hair change between page one to page two? Something positive though, I really like how you are striving to improve, this is a really good attitude! If you keep it up I can definitely see you succeeding...!

dawgmastas - Hey! The colors for this are good! It unifies your art nicely. The pacing plays out very well, although the dream sequence feels more like a just random page of destruction that is abruptly interrupted. Page three I also read the panels out of order (panel three first instead of panel two)because I\'m following the speech bubbles. You could fix this maybe by putting the third panel up on the same... row.. as.. the second one. and... giving the fourth panel and entire row to itself. The eating-off-floor sequences are effectively disgusting.

It looks like a lot of effort was put into both of these, keep it up, guys!!!

Qyzex
Artist
670 comments
# 21   Posted: Nov 14 2006, 11:47 PM
Spade... i love you for that comment. I agree with you, but I have to say two things in my defense, that arn\'t excuses, but explenations. The \'women\' in the Larathen and Spandex panel are younger girls.  and there are no sidewalks because it\'s a theme park....and from what I\'ve seen, in general, the big roads don\'t have sidewalks...though...I might just be going insane.

DefSpade
Artist
27 comments
# 20   Posted: Nov 14 2006, 10:36 PM
Qyzex:
FIRST PAGE- when you change the tint the lines, Merk merges with the background, which isnt good, either choose a better color scheme or just dont tint. You also have to work on your backgrounds and perspectives. The path to the mansion and the pool do not vanish to the same point, the trees and mansion are also too perfectly snug on the horizon, which makes the 5th panel wonky.
SECOND PAGE- in the second panel, the door doesnt look like it attached to the frame. And with the solid black lines, the subject stands out more from the background. The perspective in the 5th panel is good, it just looks wierd because the border is wiggly and tilted.
THIRD TO EIGHTH PAGE- mainly perspective and backgrounds.... and on the second panel of the 5th page, detective and larathen look like giants compared to the two girls. BTW, nice detective cameo :D
NINTH PAGE- eh... more perspective, backgrounds and proportions: the 2 buildings in the back looks itsy bitsy, seeing as the building jingles is next to is right across the street. Also, no sidewalks.

Dawg:
FIRST PAGE: panels 4 and 5, i have no clue whats really going on, its hard to tell if thats jingles or his partner. And the fires look like spikes, but the 6th panel\'s figure does look very nice.
SECOND PAGE: like qy, you need work on your perspectives and backgrounds... dawg, no matter how much i love your style, you should work on your background if you want to improve. Both of you should start sketching sceneries.
THIRD TO FIFTH PAGE: i notice tha you draw jingles straight head on alot(by this i mean you draw the nose centered, make him appear flat, if you didnt color it), start to try to vary the angles more.

I WAS AS BRUTAL AS I CAN BE IN THESE CRITS!!! NOW HATE ME MORE AND/OR IMPROVE!!! >:I

Qyzex
Artist
670 comments
# 19   Posted: Nov 13 2006, 11:38 PM
wow, I\'m dissapointed byt the lack of comments on the battle. i really want to know more I need to improve on!

Lazereyes
Artist
128 comments
# 18   Posted: Nov 11 2006, 02:50 PM
*cracks knuckles*

Alrighty, you want some feed back, Ill give you some feed back.

Qyzex : Your comic was a lot better than a lot of stuff I have seen from you. Your proportions, anatomy, and coloring is getting much better. Like Phil said, negative space in between the panels, but still good none the less. What I would suggest a lot is cleaning up and defining your lines more. Your coloring though, even though major improvement, could use some work also, but that comes with time.  The story I felt was a little, well, lacking, I mean, It was different from some of your other stuff, so that’s refreshing, but still, it felt, corny. If that makes sense to you at all.

Dawg : Not a ton I can say for you, I like the story change as well, and your coloring is pretty good. So yeah..

justarhymes
Web Dev
636 comments
# 17   Posted: Nov 10 2006, 03:53 AM
feedback, peoples :(

Qyzex
Artist
670 comments
# 16   Posted: Nov 9 2006, 02:04 AM
thanks for commenting Phill. Cheesy? Yeah, pretty much. Empty space? Yup, I see that now. Going to fix it? Hell yeah, I\'m not dumb. No real excuse for making it cheesy (not purposly) other than I\'m just trying to show some of Merk\'s personality. the stories\'ll get better, trust me =D

Phill
Artist
895 comments
# 15   Posted: Nov 9 2006, 01:04 AM
Is nobody going to leave a comment on this?

Qyzex: Alot better than your last fight dude, you no longer clog things up on pages, however, now you\'ve got a ton of negitive space going on here between panels. You could of maybe shortened the comic by a page or so by filling most of that negitive space (keeping in mind not to over crowd a page of course). The fight was pretty decent... but in all honesty dude, this was a corney story dude. You got that one song (which name I forgot) for the emo moment, and a \"Save the friend only to sacrifice yourself\" moment in there as well. Not saying that\'s bad mind you... but it was still pretty cheesy if ya know what I mean.

Dawgmastas: Werd, this is a pretty intresting change for you dude, we normally see some of the wackyiest stuff from ya and we get a huge chuckle from your comics, but this time we\'re actually seeing some character development. If only pong were as brave as you to try new stuff like this. So far dude this is pretty neat, the first couple of pages were intresting to look at, but you ended this comic all too soon dude. The colors on this are pretty sweet as well mang. My vote went to you, but we gotta see more now dude!

Both of ya did awesome!

Qyzex
Artist
670 comments
# 14   Posted: Nov 6 2006, 12:48 AM
Werd, mate. Just finished, and uploaded. Should be quite awesome. Sixtem\'s been orgasming over it, though, he does that for everyone. That tramp.

justarhymes
Web Dev
636 comments
# 13   Posted: Nov 5 2006, 08:58 PM
I didn\'t think I\'d finish, but ended up finishing 3 days early.  I guess I worry too much.  Anyways, I\'m uploaded.  Good times, Qyz.

Qyzex
Artist
670 comments
# 12   Posted: Oct 26 2006, 12:20 PM
My side of the battle is turning out (in my opinion) really well.

justarhymes
Web Dev
636 comments
# 11   Posted: Oct 26 2006, 03:02 AM
ho ho

Toxic Toothpick
132 comments
# 10   Posted: Oct 25 2006, 01:30 PM
This is actually gonna be pretty funny...:)

cyrine
Artist
30 comments
# 9   Posted: Oct 19 2006, 06:50 PM
MmmMmmm :9 Go Go You Guys!

oh shada
Artist
103 comments
# 8   Posted: Oct 19 2006, 03:08 AM
WHAT THE SHIT IS THIS SHIT!!

gradamay
70 comments
# 7   Posted: Oct 17 2006, 07:25 PM
status que

Neoriceisgood
Artist
74 comments
# 6   Posted: Oct 16 2006, 12:00 PM
This battle  screams straight.

Larathen
Artist
182 comments
# 5   Posted: Oct 16 2006, 10:31 AM
OH GOD EPIC

justarhymes
Web Dev
636 comments
# 4   Posted: Oct 16 2006, 02:14 AM
This isn\'t a Hiemie battle.

Hiemie
Artist
511 comments
# 3   Posted: Oct 16 2006, 02:07 AM
I suspect a pile of boring.

Lexy
Artist
23 comments
# 2   Posted: Oct 16 2006, 01:57 AM
This is going to be a fun battle :3 Go Qyzex!

Qyzex
Artist
670 comments
# 1   Posted: Oct 16 2006, 01:55 AM
dun dun DUN!

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 3 weeks
Ended: Nov 15th, 2006
Votes Cast: 37
Page Views: 778
Winner: justarhymes
 

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