Red - You\'ve been in every sdt haven\'t you! I agree with pon that this is the best comic you\'ve done yet! I also agree with everyone else that you\'ve gotta work on your basics anatomy and what not, but seriously nice improvement =P
Viz - Rod your linework is getting better and better. I agree that the small panels hurt your panel flow, but otherwise good fight comic!
Speed Death Tournament 2006: Round 1 / Hip Hop Mummy vs. PRISONER
Critiques & Comments
# 13
Posted:
Jun 25 2006, 07:48 PM
# 12
Posted:
Jun 24 2006, 12:12 AM
I really don\'t get the \"saturday morning cartoon\" vibe that some of the other people are getting from Red\'s comic. Camera-angle wise, there needs to be a lot of work done. The shots were very flat and boring most of the time, and you break the line of action here and there. Art-wise, it really isn\'t my style, but I suppose that may just be personal preference. If anything, your action poses look like they need some refreshment to get more impact into those figures.
Vision, in terms of art you\'ve got it in the bag, although I agree that some of your panel lay-outs can be confusing. The story was pretty decent, not great, but fight comics are fine in my book for SDT. Looking forward to your next fight.
Vision, in terms of art you\'ve got it in the bag, although I agree that some of your panel lay-outs can be confusing. The story was pretty decent, not great, but fight comics are fine in my book for SDT. Looking forward to your next fight.
# 11
Posted:
Jun 23 2006, 11:44 PM
I thought they were both great in their own way.
red: I really liked your more humorous telling of this battle. HHM was definitlyone of my favorits going in, too bad it looks like he\'s gonna be sitting the rest of the tourney out. We at least I have thos 2 other battles.
Vizion: Nice inks. Your characters have a lot of movement and energy in them. I could really appreciate that. You filled each page nicely with action. Can\'t wait to see more of this guy.
red: I really liked your more humorous telling of this battle. HHM was definitlyone of my favorits going in, too bad it looks like he\'s gonna be sitting the rest of the tourney out. We at least I have thos 2 other battles.
Vizion: Nice inks. Your characters have a lot of movement and energy in them. I could really appreciate that. You filled each page nicely with action. Can\'t wait to see more of this guy.
# 10
Posted:
Jun 22 2006, 11:01 AM
I agree with the crits that have already been stated…
Red- The smoke on mummy following him getting burned didn’t carry off at all. Would have been better to just draw in the smoke.. some of the panels it wasn’t clear what was happening.. You might want to think about pulling back some and giving more detail about what’s happening, all the close ups got tiring real quick.
Vision- I think if you had time to put the color all the way through the battle, I think it would have helped. The confusion for me with the layouts where mostly the transition from page three to four… and then page six. Page three… just seemed like a lot of prisoner flying through the air and then four you just see mummy’s feet coming down… it just didn’t work for me. Page six the memories just seemed out of place. I wasn’t clear on if it was something mummy was trying to do to him or just something that was unrelated. The layout could have helped with that… also the use of color at that point could have helped to make the point as well, depending on how you handled it.
Red- The smoke on mummy following him getting burned didn’t carry off at all. Would have been better to just draw in the smoke.. some of the panels it wasn’t clear what was happening.. You might want to think about pulling back some and giving more detail about what’s happening, all the close ups got tiring real quick.
Vision- I think if you had time to put the color all the way through the battle, I think it would have helped. The confusion for me with the layouts where mostly the transition from page three to four… and then page six. Page three… just seemed like a lot of prisoner flying through the air and then four you just see mummy’s feet coming down… it just didn’t work for me. Page six the memories just seemed out of place. I wasn’t clear on if it was something mummy was trying to do to him or just something that was unrelated. The layout could have helped with that… also the use of color at that point could have helped to make the point as well, depending on how you handled it.
# 9
Posted:
Jun 22 2006, 12:48 AM
sorry, red, but the whole rap scene isn\'t my gig, so a lot of your style either goes over my head, or i just don\'t like it much. aside from that, you did a nice job.
vision... the only real problem i had with yours was the face prisoner makes when he is doing that fire attack. but again, great job.
vision... the only real problem i had with yours was the face prisoner makes when he is doing that fire attack. but again, great job.
# 8
Posted:
Jun 21 2006, 06:42 PM
What everyone else said pretty much sums it up.
Red the whole saturday morning cartoon thing was cool, and it was an interesting story
Vision, really good entry, you would have benifitted a little more with a few more backgrounds, there\'s lots of white space.
Red the whole saturday morning cartoon thing was cool, and it was an interesting story
Vision, really good entry, you would have benifitted a little more with a few more backgrounds, there\'s lots of white space.
# 7
Posted:
Jun 21 2006, 04:55 PM
Red. your fight has to be the best one you have done so far. i told you before and ill tell you again...so the council knows that im giving a critic.. you need to work on panel layout. the humor is awesome and colors, and need more dinamic angles.
as for vision nice line art and colors in the beggining.. but man you need to work on your panel work man. its ok to do normal panel work man no need for crazy panels it confusses the hell out of me. i think that your only problem.
great fights the both of yous.
as for vision nice line art and colors in the beggining.. but man you need to work on your panel work man. its ok to do normal panel work man no need for crazy panels it confusses the hell out of me. i think that your only problem.
great fights the both of yous.
# 6
Posted:
Jun 21 2006, 01:28 PM
I mostly agree with Drawdan and Viper.
Vis, your art was great, but a bit confusing at times.
red, good humor but it didn\'t have as much...presence...as Vis\' entry.
Prisoner get\'s my nod
Vis, your art was great, but a bit confusing at times.
red, good humor but it didn\'t have as much...presence...as Vis\' entry.
Prisoner get\'s my nod
# 5
Posted:
Jun 21 2006, 11:45 AM
Red had the more entertaining story without a doubt, the giant diamond earring killed me. Your art was consistent and looked good, I gave you the higher votes on creativity and entertainment.
Vision, some good lookin stuff though like drawdan I got confused in a few spots and it was pretty dry and straightforward. You pulled the Quality vote.
Good job fellas and good luck.
Vision, some good lookin stuff though like drawdan I got confused in a few spots and it was pretty dry and straightforward. You pulled the Quality vote.
Good job fellas and good luck.
# 4
Posted:
Jun 21 2006, 05:33 AM
Vision -your art is lookin very solid-I got lost in your layouts a few timed but overall-very nice stuff. You made the mommy actually look intimidateing.
Red- your stuff was funny-You capitalized on the saturday cartoon kind of humor(minus the language offcoarse) and made me laugh. Consistant quality-good entry.
Red- your stuff was funny-You capitalized on the saturday cartoon kind of humor(minus the language offcoarse) and made me laugh. Consistant quality-good entry.
# 3
Posted:
Jun 16 2006, 12:14 PM
Only four more days.... get moving NO DEFAULTS!!!
# 2
Posted:
Jun 14 2006, 03:27 PM
I am too. I was hoping to fight both of these guys.
# 1
Posted:
Jun 14 2006, 03:09 PM
Don\'t feel bad guys, I\'M looking forward to this.
Speed Death Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Jun 25th, 2006
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66
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Winner:
vision
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