Burake: The first page was funny XD; and I kinda like Burake's character in the first two pages. The back story was cool, and I really enjoyed the way you panelled your pages and stuff... and damn his sin form is awesome.
You mean he isn't skinny now? :o Maybe more muscular, perhaps XD
Mize: OMG. Mamoru what the HELL are you doing in here. X_X; Damn your painting skills are... really, really good T__T Wow. The sense of action is incredible... love the humor too XD the \"insert girl here\" and Hiemie's cameo appearance really cracked me up XD; But wow, damn, your PAINTING. Rules.
My only minor annoyance would be why and how the fight came about... like was there any reason for burake to have gone into that mode before you started fighting... or what happened to the girl XD; Were your two stories supposed to be connected? Because if I think about it that way, it's a alot clearer. Ah well.
Both of you did a kick ass job XD
Mamoru... amazing pages!!! You didn't need the \"Insert girl in distress here\" dealie, though. You didn't unnecessarily break the \"Fourth Wall\", so the setting was realised. Exposition would have been enough.
But, your story flowed well, regardless! The little joke in there was pretty good, too. It threw me off ...but it seemed like it was supposed to. I look forward to more from Mize!
Burake ...sorry I don't have very much to critique. =( Your stuff is tight! ...would've been cool to see a fight, but I guess we don't always get those, eh? ;)
Great great work all around!
After seeing this fight and realizing how similar Mize and Dagger, I had to sit and question whether or not I wanted to use him.
My conclusion was \"Hell yes.\" I'm so hyped about getting him in and battling Mize now that I'm ignoring my schoolwork. :P You guys are a bad influence on me.
Both of you guys kick ass. ^_^ Rock on.
Indeed, Wolfe. Mamoru claims that he rushed the latter half of this battle, yet Mize is resting quite comfortably in A Rank...
And he hasn't begun to implement those amazing story ideas I keep hearing from him... Mize could very well rise to legendary status...
Sweet merciful GOD this was awesome on BOTH fronts. I don't know WHO to vote for... Mize, you are everybit the powerhouse I expected you to be. My fear of you is well founded indeed.
Burake: Dude, COOL! Tail looks great. The Sin form looks really nice, his eyes are awesome. The tail needs to like spout out one liners like, \"You got tailed\", or \"Fear the tail beeyotch!!\"
Mize: You're art is like, wow. It looks really pretty. I also liked the speaking a different language thing, it's an interesting twist. Makes me think of subtitles, and hence anime. More of your opponent would be nice tho.
Great Job you guys!
Late,
-Sora
Wow, great entries from both sides.
Burake: Your style is awesome, and the art of this battle was genuinely great stuff, arguably the best I've seen from you. The story, on the other hand, left something to be desired. I'm all for subtle meetings and conversations as a reprieve from straight fights, but in this one Mize seemed more of a footnote than an actual character. Going into Burake's backstory is cool, I just don't think a battle is the best place to do it.
Mamoru: Your art style is fresh and is the dictionary definition of \"kick-ass.\" However, I agree with the stark backgrounds detracting from the quality of your comic. Also, your art seemed inconsistent at times, especially with Hiemie's unnecessary cameo. Burake's part in the battle could have been played up a lot, so I would recommend getting to the confrontation sooner in the future, rather than using up the first half of your battle with extra stuff.
My vote goes to Mamoru.
Burake: All right man, we're finally getting somewhere with that story! I didn't quite catch why Mize breaks into the apartment room, though...
Nifty cel-shading as usual, I liked the little \"preview\" of the sins on page 3. Definitely a perspective issue on that last page, though... the lines on the building should be narrowing as they go up, that really took away from the depth.
Mize: Great action poses and painting technique on this one, especially considering the 10-page spread. I feel like the backgrounds were really stark, though, which doesn't go too well with the vibrant style on the characters.
The conflict itself was disappointing, though... really straightforward approach, and it got drowned out by all the cameos. I know you can do better, man!
Thanks Burake, you did a good justice on drawing Mize and I love your entry, I hope I manage to draw Burake well enough...
Also, I love the back story, it gave me some definite idea on Burake now.
dont worry Burake Bro, I didnt have enough time to finish the rest of the fight so i have to make it really really short. And because of that I apologize in advance because it may give a bit of a continuity problem...but what I already got an idea how to make it still tie well. (pages 1-8 uploaded)
Oh, and before any one gets picky, Yes I know his tail is his left hand in the flashback. Thats intentional, and I'll cover that in a different battle sometime.
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